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Published: 2007-04-01 18:06:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 59; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 2
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Description Touch




Touch is everything-
my hand and yours
entwined.  

Sometimes
more love hides
in the gentle touch
of fingers,
then in the
deepest kiss.

I sit and lust
after one touch-
but your hand’s
withheld from me.
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Comments: 4

Gata-de-la-Noche [2007-04-07 00:14:25 +0000 UTC]

Since you asked so sweetly in your journal....

I like this one. Quite a bit. It is simple and sweet, and just makes me smile. The structure works well, kind of framing these thoughts. And it does hit on something that is very often overlooked: simplicity, innocence, love.

Very nice little piece; not much I really have to say.Then should be than (line 5, stanza 2), but I don't see anything beyond that.

Wonderful!

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Loganforever In reply to Gata-de-la-Noche [2007-04-07 18:54:51 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much! I haven't been getting comments at all lately...(pulls hair out, need input on poetry...)

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Gata-de-la-Noche In reply to Loganforever [2007-04-07 21:27:37 +0000 UTC]

Well, I have some friends that are much better at poetry than I am, and, if you are serious about wanting constructive criticism, I'll pass your name along.

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Loganforever In reply to Gata-de-la-Noche [2007-04-08 04:01:43 +0000 UTC]

That would be greatly appreciated.

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