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My Oc Flutterstar...... DO NOT STEAL ITI did not use a BASE if you are interested
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Hello. I am ArtsyCredit. I'm here to give you a few tips on how to improve your OC.
First of all, one of the two could be removed. The wings or the horn. Alicorns can make the pony look very mary sue-ish on the first glance. You can keep the alicorn type only if you have a good backstory for it.
The hair. I know rainbows are colorful and all, but I'd say 1-3 colors (that look good when put together) should be enough. Rainbow hair make the pony look very mary sue like.
The name could be more creative. You could get the name from the pony's personality or what the pony likes. I don't see what flutter or star have to do with the pony.
And the cutiemark could be improved too. I see It's a butterfly wing and a star but, like with the name, the cutiemark could be created from what the pony likes and their personality.
I suggest you to make a backstory for her and her personality. Please don't make a depressing backstory with her parents dying etc. It's over used and quite mary sue.
I know you like your pony and you said you're keeping it, but mary sues come out to be very boring. To make an interesting and love-able character you must add flaws and not too many good things about the pony. Same go with the looks. No rainbow hair, not alicorn, no different colored eyes and so on.
You probably won't listen to the advice I know but, making a decently good oc that is not a mary sue, is more fun for you and your fans!
See? Loads of people tell you "mary sue!" and on, I don't think It's a nice feeling. But if you use people's tips, you could make an actually good and interesting OC and people will love it! If you have anything you'd like to say, you can note me or reply here. Sorry for the long text.
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Thank you for all the tips because they are so good
The backstory will be written soon (I promise)
I will think if I will make some changes to Flutterstar
Anyway I have an idea for another Oc..... her name is Sadness Song.... the body's colour is purple.... her hair/tail has 2 colours, dark pink and blue.... and she is an unicorn with red eyes
Tell me in a reply if my idea is a good one or a bad one
Thank you for all
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i agree it's a mary sue
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Why.... is my oc bad? Or what
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A Mary-Sue (I'm assuming you know, but I'll explain anyway) Is a character with a very common design, personality, name, etc. For MLP characters, that usually includes:
-Rainbow Hair or Black hair with streaks
-Alicorn
-Strong Magic
-Fast flying
-Very Little Flaws
-Lots of Friends
-A name that involves 'Moon', 'Sun', 'Star', 'Shadow', 'Sparkle', or even 'Rainbow.
Your OC:
-Rainbow hair
-Alicorn
-A name that involves 'Star'
I don't know about magic strength, friends, or flight speed, but those three things alone are the most common things found in a Mary Sue MLP OC. If you want, I could draw her for you in less Mary-Sue styles. I of course would give you complete permission to post the images I make to your account so long as you gave credit, and I would give you credit for the original design they'd be based off of.
This is your decision if I draw her or not, not mine.
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Nope sorry.... I like my Oc.... I will not change anything to Flutterstar 
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But, you asked for critique on your art work. Why asked for it if your not going to change anything about your oc? I understand that it is your oc, but if your not going to change anything about it, even after been giving a long paragraph about it flaws, then don't ask for critique.
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I asked for a critique to see how I improved on my art darling not to see how is my Oc
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Ohhhh, gthat's what you meant. My apologies 
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Okay. Like I said, it is your decision, so I won't
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