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Published: 2004-01-09 01:51:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 228; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 13
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She's different from the rest,She never comes in second best.
I don't think she likes winning,
I think it's killing her.
She's in an endless maze,
Waiting for someone to turn the page,
Get her out of there!
She's bored already.
She no longer dreams or loves,
"What do you mean 'share and care?'"
Selfish beyond all bountry,
But no one hates her,
She's perfect.
How can you hate someone who's perfect?
Easily,
Jealousy.
But I don't think she likes being perfect,
I'm quite certain it's killing her.
She's drowning in her perfect world,
Gasping for breath, attention, love.
Why isn't anyone helping her?
I think it's cause she hurt them all,
Filled them with hatred and jealousy.
I hate her.
I'm not helping her.
But then.... Who really is the selfish one?
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Comments: 17
It's... very well written. I mean, it's awesome in everyway, just your choice and order of specific words is excellent. (see, I'm not usually good at descriptions 
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awww Your really good at description.. dont be so hard on yourself.. Who told you, you weren't?! ^_^
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Such a wonderful concept. I don't think I've read one on this topic before.
lovely job indeed <3
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EE 
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Good job! I'm amazed...there must be someone like this everywhere. I really like your observation that her perfection is killing her... I wrote one kinda like this, but, its titled Epitome of Perfection. And, I too, beleive that my "perfect person" will one day be destroyed by her own desperate perfectionism...it's sad, really...that someone should have to go through life like that...but, good observation, and great poem!
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Green and blue and Blue and green...
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lol ooo you wrote one too, I'm gonna have to go read that.. ^_^
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meg your improving! (and hey,your poems already kicked ass 
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oooooooo thank you *twitches* whats higher then kicking ass? lol.. i guess shoulders.. Look out world! Some heads are gonna roll! (lol.. play on words.. play on words..)
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Excellent 
I like the way you repeat "But I don't think she likes being perfect,
I'm quite certain it's killing her."
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lol thanks.. I made a big step to mostly no ryming.. People seem not to notice much ^_^
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lol, tomatoes, hehehehe.
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lol thanks.. I made a big step to mostly no ryming.. People seem not to notice much ^_^
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you are such a good writer. I love all of your poems, they just keep getting better and better!
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lol thank you *blushes red,red,red*
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te he he.. Thank you Raven....... what does T_T mean? *blinks confused*
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Its crying. the top part is meh eyes, and the lines down are the lines of tears.
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