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A/N Doctor who fanfiction YAY Don't kill me. This is my first Doctor who Fanfic and I just started ( 'bout month ago? I dunno ) And I don't want any '' This isn't like da Doctor! '' Comments. Hope you like.
You sighed and grabbed your brush and started to brush your hair. After that, you brushed your teeth and dressed up. You get your [Color] shirt, jeans ( I love jeans so much. ) and necklace. You walked to the kitchen. You lived in small apartment. It had one bedroom, kitchen, living room, bathroom and balcony. You lived alone. You used to live in small town with your parents, but you moved away because you didn't have job there. You worked in a cafe close by. You usually got some coffee to your friend Alice.
You put your coffee machine on and got some morning coffee. It smelled so delicious. You smelled it and drank it. It was normal morning in England. You looked at the clock and set your empty cup on the table. You grabbed your brown jacket and walked outside. You had day free from your job, but you promised to bring some coffee to Alice. You started to walk in the streets. Her workplace wasn't that far away. She was working in a clothe store. Alice was really pretty woman. She had long beautiful blond hair, baby blue eyes and she always had flower in her hair.
You walked front of a huge building. It was the shop. You smiled and walked inside. You spotted really fast your friend Alice. You walk towards her.
'' (Name)! It's good to see you! '' Alice said and hugged you. You hugged her back. She was always so friendly.
'' Hello Alice. I got your coffee. '' You said and handled the bag of coffee to Alice. She grabbed it and smiled.
'' Aww thanks. Hey, can you come with me to see movies sometimes? Like this week? '' Alice asked. You though little bit. Well you didn't have work this week, and you didn't got anything else to do so...
'' Sure. I can go to movies with you. '' You said and smiled. You were about to go, but you heard how Alice called you.
'' Hey (Name) I almost forgot! '' She said and ran to you. She handled a present. '' Happy late birthday! '' She said and smiled. You had your birthday last week. Alice was in holiday then and went to see her parents. You smiled and open it and there was long scarf with many colors. You put it around your neck and hugged Alice.
'' Aww Thanks! This is perfect, but I am going. See ya. '' You said and walked out from the shop. You looked at the sky. Wow. It wasn't even the middle of the day. You could do so many things right now. You took deep breath and started to walk towards your house. What you do after that? Well, you though maybe you should go to shower, then drink some tea and watch things on the internet. Then you maybe text something to your parents-
Your though got cut by blue thing, what was front of your apartment. Weird, you didn't see this thing when you left. And why there is a blue phone- no. That's a police box. How did it get here? That's weird. You walked front of it and walked around it. ' Is this some kind of joke? ' You thought. You looked at the door and tried to open it, but failed. ' it's locked... of course. ' You thought.
'' Good day. '' You heard male voice saying, of course that made you jump and almost scream. You turned around and saw man with messy and spikey brown hair and chocolate brown eyes. He wore dark brown four buttoned suit, blue shirt, red tie and he had long light brown jacket. He just stood there.
'' Hell-o? And who are you? '' You asked curiously. He smiled.
'' I am the Doctor. '' He said. He is the Doctor? What kind of doctor? What doctor?
'' Doctor who? '' You asked.
'' Just The Doctor. '' He said. He walked closed to you and looked around. '' And who are you? '' Doctor asked.
'' I'm (Name). '' You said. You didn't want to say your whole name, because he could be some kind of serial killer or something. '' Well. Nice to meet you (Name). '' Doctor said and walked next to you and looked at the blue police box.
'' Beautiful isn't she? '' Doctor said. She? So that thing is she?
'' Yes she is... '' You said. '' Is this your? '' You asked. Doctor nodded. '' Yes. '' He said.
'' Well tell me. Why she is here? This wasn't here when I left. '' You asked. Doctor looked at the sky and ignored you.
'' Have you notice something weird here or something what is different? '' He asked. You looked at him surprised. Something weird? Well, there is one weird thing that made you think.
''Well... My neighbors started to missing and others. I don't know where they are but they are just... gone. And if they come back, they aren't them. They act so weird and things. Those missing started when the new building opened. The Great Abyss. I don't know where the name come. Will we go there? '' You said. The Doctor looked at you.
'' We? No. Me? Yes. '' He said and started to walk away. You ran towards him.
'' Hey! I come with you. '' You said, but he didn't stop walking. '' I'm not going to let you do that. '' He said and you looked at him confused.
'' Why not!? '' You asked. He stopped walking and turned around. '' Because is too dangerous! '' Doctor said.
'' What's so dangerous that I can't come? '' You asked and Doctor sighed. '' You won't believe me if I told you. ''
'' Try me. '' You said and crossed your arms. Doctor looked at the ground and took deep breath.
'' Well. How I say this. I am not a human. I am from other planet. It's possible that aliens have been ruling The Great Abyss and they are controlling humans. I am going to there and get them to leave this planet. '' Doctor said. You actually believe that aliens exist and you just nodded.
'' I believe that. '' You said fast. Doctor looked at you. '' Fine. Come with me. Do you get scared things easily? '' He asked. You shook your head.
'' I don't fear anything. Only creepy dolls. They are awful. '' You said and Doctor smiled. '' I like you, but all I can say now is that we are going to have an awful lot of running. '' He said and you smiled, walking behind of him. It didn't take too long that you two were there. The Great Abyss. It opened 'bout two weeks ago and they built it really long. How did the aliens get there? Well you didn't know. It was gray building with many windows and floors. You haven't ever been there, because it was nearly impossible to go there without any papers or things like that.
The Doctor walked inside of the building and you followed him and almost gasped. It was so huge. There was white marble floor, where was red carpet. And the walls. They were black and there were many paintings. There wasn't that many people, so that would be much easier. You walked little bit, but then a guard came to you two. ' Fuck... ' You thought. You two were going to get busted...
'' Sir. You can't be here without permission- '' The guard said, but The Doctor show the passport... where was only white card.
'' I am from CIA. This is my assistant. We have a permission to come here. '' Doctor said and the guard looked at the paper and nodded. He left and you looked at The Doctor.
'' What the heck is that? '' You asked confused. Doctor smiled and held the passport thingie. '' Oh this? This is the physic paper. It will show anything that user wants. But now we need to get going. '' He said and you nodded. '' So... What kind of thing are you? '' You asked.
'' Well. I am the time lord. It means I can control space and time. I got my TARDIS and I teleport with it. Then I'm trying to save the universe and save the Earth from aliens. It's pretty hard work but it's sometimes fun. '' Doctor said. You smiled.
'' What does TARDIS stand for? '' You asked curiously. '' That's a good queston. TARDIS stands for Time And Relative Dimension In Space. '' Doctor said and you nodded slowly. '' Ahh. We are here. '' He said and you two were front of storage. '' This is perfect! '' He said and kneeled front of the door and get a... screwdriver? Well It looked like it but it had some kind of blue thingy on top of it.
'' What is that? '' You asked. '' This is my Sonic Screwdriver. This can open anything and it's working with noise. '' Doctor said and then you saw blue light and heard voice. He started to open the door and you watched around that nobody isn't coming. Then you heard little unlock noise and the door opened.
'' Voilá! '' Doctor said and walked inside, of course you followed him. It was dark and you bearly saw front of you. You sighed and then you meet the stairs. It was too dark and there was too long way to the end of the stairs. Doctor walked down the stairs. You sighed and slowly started to walk down. Doctor was far and you tried to walk fast, but then you miss stepped.
'' Dam- '' You said and fell down from the stairs and fell little bit towards. Doctor stopped and looked up. '' Are you alright over there? '' He asked loudly and you fast stood up and wiped away dust.
'' Yeah. I'm fine. '' You said fast. '' Be more careful! '' You heard Doctor saying and nodded. When you two walked down, you saw that there was a tunnel. It was darker and colder place and there was rocky walls and dirty ground. Doctor looked at the walls and then he had some kind of bomb or something. Wait, is he going to blow this place!?
'' Doctor what are you doing? '' You asked and watched how he put the bomb and pressed some buttons. '' I am putting the bombs here, so I can blackmark the one who is doing this. If they aren't leaving from the Earth, I blow this place up. This will take a while so go ahead. I will come soon. '' He said and you nodded quickly and walked away. Wow. How long this is going to take? You walked and walked and then you meet a door.
You bearly saw the door and tried to open it, with success. Damn it was heavy, but you got it open. You walked inside and gasped. It was huge ( I MEAN REALLY HUGE ) place with many computers and machines and everything! There was some kind of satellite in middle of the room and there was... Human? Wait, no. That wasn't human. It didn't look like it. Well It looked like human but it's face was weird and it was blue. It was wearing cape and clothes what looked like they belonged to the king.
You sneaked quietly behind the boxes and looked that nobody wounldn't see you. What was this place? Is that the alien? Well it must be. It wasn't human after all. What was that thing in the middle of the room? Was that the thing, how they control the humans? Well you didn't know but all you knew was that it was EEEVVIIILLL. Where the heck is Doctor? Sigh. You stalked the alien for a while and saw the computer of the satellite. You looked at the alien and then the computer. Well this could be risky, but what you had to lose.
You sneaked to the computer. You could hack it and close it. You were good at hacking and it was English so... You started hack it, but then you heard loud POW. You looked at the door and there he was. Angry Doctor. He walked fast towards the alien with anger.
'' QAZPLET! LEAVE THIS PLANET NOW. '' Doctor yelled and pointed at the alien. Qazplet laughed and spoke some alien language that you couldn't understand. You continued hacking.
'' Because you can't rule this world! This planet is too young! If you aren't going to leave, I will blow this place up! '' Doctor said and show a button. You were just done with hacking and the satellite shut down. You looked at the alien who was laughing. '' You stupid little thing. '' You heard him saying? Wait, he speak English? He walked toward the Doctor and you spotted a pipe. You grabbed it, what made little voice, but it didn't hear it.
'' Do you think you can beat me? '' It said and grabbed Doctor's neck and raised him. You sneaked little bit closet them. '' I am the king! I am the God! I am going to rule this place. EVERYBODY IS GOING TO - ''
PAM
You hit Qazplet's head and he fell down and passed out. He let out of Doctor and Doctor coughed little bit. '' Thanks, but we need to go now. This place is going to explode. '' Doctor said and grabbed your hand and ran away with you. '' You needed to press that button? '' You asked.
'' Yep. Only this way all of them can die. This place was going to explode this week; this is the logical thing to do. '' Doctor said and ran with you upstairs and out from the building. Just about half minute after that, the place exploded. You heard screaming and yelling and sirens ringing, but you continued to running towards the TARDIS. When you two were front of it, you caught your breath and laughed.
'' Well that was fun. It sure was an awful lot of running. '' You laughed and Doctor laughed too. '' Yes, but my job is now done. I need to go somewhere else. '' He said and opened the TARDIS with a simple key.
'' And you should come with me, I mean if you want. '' Doctor said and you raised your eyebrows. '' Me? With you? Really? '' You asked and he nodded.
'' Yep. We can go to adventures and go to planets and travel in time.I go to the past or future and save the universe. Of course it's really dangerous and scary, but it's full of fun. And best of all, It's free! '' Doctor said. You looked your back, where was your home. Then you looked back to Doctor. It's risky, but come on. Time traveling and teleporting. This is the only possible change to get it.
'' Okay Doctor. I will be your new companion. '' You said and entered the TARDIS. When you entered, you gasped. It was so big inside! It was like a ball. There was in the middle some kind of electric thing You were amazed. How was this even possible?
'' Welcome to the TARDIS. It's bigger on the inside than the outside. '' Doctor said proudly. You walked closer the middle. '' Wow. This is amazing! '' You said and you still looked around. Doctor smiled. '' Oh, and your scarf is nice. '' Doctor said.
''Thank you. It's my birthday present.'' You said and smiled.
''Okay then, (Name). Where do you want to go first? The future or the past?'' Doctor asked. ''Past. And anywhere.'' You said and Doctor smiled and pressed some buttons.
''One ticket to the past. Hold on tight.'' Doctor said and pulled the lever. ''ALLONS-Y!'' He said and the police box disappeared from where it was.
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Comments: 27
NinjaBrony817 [2015-03-19 16:17:31 +0000 UTC]
This is awesome!
And I get the feeling I know the scarf...
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Lumicat12 In reply to NinjaBrony817 [2015-03-28 15:42:15 +0000 UTC]
Hah. It's the Fourth Doctor's scarf :3
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RavenclawWolf [2014-11-05 19:34:47 +0000 UTC]
This is nice! The doctor is a little out of character and there are quite a few mistakes in grammar, but other than that it was pretty good! I would never be able to write anything because it would probably turn out as a horrible piece of shit.
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Lumicat12 In reply to RavenclawWolf [2014-11-06 05:07:22 +0000 UTC]
Yeah I know I wrote this like... fucking while ago, my grammar was bad and I havent' watched doctor who that much back then...
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RavenclawWolf In reply to Lumicat12 [2014-11-06 14:41:18 +0000 UTC]
Ohhhh that's fine! It is really good though! can't wait to read some more from you!
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Lumicat12 In reply to RavenclawWolf [2014-11-07 04:38:38 +0000 UTC]
Ahahahahah you then need to wait a bit longer darling My school is killing me and my personal issues.
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RavenclawWolf In reply to Lumicat12 [2014-11-07 14:05:31 +0000 UTC]
Awwww! Well I know how that is. Take your time!
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Fundip15 [2014-07-08 02:48:11 +0000 UTC]
When the Doctor told me the story it sounded like I said 'Yep, sounds legit. Can I com?'
That's what I thought anyway.
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Lumicat12 In reply to Fundip15 [2014-07-08 08:44:28 +0000 UTC]
Ahaha, true. ''I don't mind, can I com with U?''
''K''
Okay I need to stop.
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Lumicat12 In reply to alicereaper666 [2014-04-01 06:00:19 +0000 UTC]
Gasp I am sorryyyyyyyyyyyy
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alicereaper666 In reply to Lumicat12 [2014-04-02 03:04:55 +0000 UTC]
its ok i just changed her name ;3
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megthedoodler1999 [2013-12-28 17:12:54 +0000 UTC]
this is really good ^^ just one problem the doctor wouldn't kill a whole species of aliens cuz he thinks its wrong but other than tht i think its really good ^^
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Lumicat12 In reply to megthedoodler1999 [2013-12-28 17:27:45 +0000 UTC]
Well LIEK AI GIVE A SINGLE FU-
Thank you.
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LoneTaku [2013-12-21 15:11:25 +0000 UTC]
This is pretty good, but you use an astounding lack of articles in your writing. A few examples include "this is Sonic Screwdriver" being changed to "this is a Sonic Screwdriver" or "this is my Sonic Screwdriver," or "go to past or future and save the universe" being changed to "go to the past or future and save the universe." In general, objects like the TARDIS or the Doctor's Sonic Screwdriver are not to be introduced as people. If the Doctor were introducing Captain Jack Harkness, however, then there would be no need to put a, the, or my. Another thing I've noticed is you have a habit of putting a space in between quotation marks that is not needed. On the inside of quotation marks, you don't need those two extra spaces. "Jimmy isn't here today" is right, but " Jimmy isn't here today " is grammatically incorrect. Also, capitalisation. This isn't a huge issue, but if a word is not the name of a place or person, you don't need to capitalise the first letter. You don't need to capitalise "Amazing," but you would capitalise "Doctor," "Rose Tyler," or "Raxicoricofallipatorious." Now then, I think this is my last topic here: sentence structure. "How this was even possible." is a fragment, and incorrect. It would be much better to reword the sentence and write "How was this even possible?" instead. Another example are the sentences "And this place were going to explode this week. This would be so logical thing to happen." This sentence makes little sense to a native English speaker. A suggested rewording of these two sentences in relation to each other would be, "This place was going to explode this week; this is the logical thing to do." To combine two sentences that are related to each other seamlessly, all you have to do is simply add in a semicolon between the two sentences and remove the end punctuation. In general, you want the subject of the sentence to come before the action of the sentence. "He ran quickly past" is different from "quickly ran past him," or a similar example.
My apologies, I kind of went on a grammar-fuelled rant there. If you do actually care about the grammar involved, feel free to let me know and I can go on a more in-depth explanation of things for you!
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6Canada6 In reply to LoneTaku [2014-04-06 09:03:16 +0000 UTC]
I did get over half way through the story, but it was such a chore! I'm glad someone pointed it out! Thank you for this!
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NalaMarieTotallyRock In reply to LoneTaku [2014-04-06 06:18:43 +0000 UTC]
Woa I just learned a lot from you random person thank you..
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JiJiCatt In reply to LoneTaku [2014-03-02 00:15:41 +0000 UTC]
I agree with you LoneTaku. I couldn't get past the first paragraph without being disgusted at all the horrible grammar. If you want people to read your writing, try to make it comfortable on the eyes. I get typos and such, but this story was just a blunt no. Also, it kind of rushed the beginning.
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Lumicat12 In reply to LoneTaku [2013-12-21 15:38:15 +0000 UTC]
Oh and you can do these things more, but you don't need to explane them.
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Lumicat12 In reply to LoneTaku [2013-12-21 15:13:31 +0000 UTC]
Oh it's nothing. My motherlanguage isn't English. I am going to fix them.
I need to me more carefull about these things .___.
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Lumicat12 In reply to Zazzyleey [2013-12-21 12:35:45 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. It did only took 'bout two days My irl friend got me do this.
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Zazzyleey In reply to Lumicat12 [2013-12-21 12:54:12 +0000 UTC]
hah itz awesome .w. as awesome as prussia! xD anywayzz owo got ur phone jet?
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Lumicat12 In reply to Zazzyleey [2013-12-21 12:55:18 +0000 UTC]
I get it today. I think it will take hour or couple.
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Zazzyleey In reply to Lumicat12 [2013-12-21 13:09:07 +0000 UTC]
Awesome Owo imma play something while i wait xD
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