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eggition [2017-04-27 00:14:02 +0000 UTC]

i like the story so far!! in the beginning pages it was a little hard to follow, mainly because of the small size and inability to zoom in. glad you make your pages larger now, however i think they could be a bit bigger still because the text can be hard to read at times.
also, like you said, it was a little rushed in the beginning i think, but you've seemed to start to slow it down a little with the last few pages. give us some time to get to know the characters and get attached to them; that's part of what makes a story great!
i like the style as well; the faces are nice. i'd suggest working on anatomy and proportions, though? it's mainly with when you draw them from a side view and their shoulders appear to be placed quite lower than when their necks stop. also, they tend to be much skinnier than they should be. for example, in the second to last panel, her body should meet at or near where her arms are. studying other artist's and real life photos is the best way to go about that, i think. practice makes perfect, of course, and as the comic continues, there is definitely visible improvement each time.
i like the shading, though i suggest to make it darker and more obvious. contrast is important when it comes to shading and don't forget to make it look very dark when there's lots of contrast! currently the shading is just subtle and almost looks part of the coloring.
hopefully this is helpful?? good job so far!

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