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BrendanRizzo [2018-07-15 02:09:45 +0000 UTC]

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This is very nice. However, once I enlarged the picture, several flaws became obvious which are not so in the thumbnail. The most noticeable is that you do not appear to know how to ink properly. You want to draw a confident line, and that means drawing the pen across the page in one swift motion, even if it does not conform perfectly to your pencil guideline. The more you do this, the more accurate you will become, while also getting a smoother linework. (I also recommend not using a ballpoint pen, though I can't tell from here whether you did or not.) The current state is really a shame, because I can tell that your painting is top notch, and looks exactly how a watercolor ought. However, if you painted differing color values, it would really contribute to the illusion of depth and have your scenes "pop out".

I don't think your perspective is as bad as you worry that it is; I certainly think this is a nice urban scene that is difficult to correlate together without creating a mess, but I think that your different elements cohere together well. In my humble opinion, this would have turned out much better if you had drawn it as a monochrome pencil work, so play to your strengths! (Alternatively, take this constructive criticism to heart in order to shore up your weaknesses.) Just remember that monochrome only works if you add shadows, which are lacking here.


Now, it's cool how you went for an ambiguous scene. It's either the city outside, or a mall inside, and we do not have enough information to know for sure. But if it is an indoor mall, then that makes it look much cooler, as this reminds the viewer of the legendary Hanging Gardens of Babylon. It is interesting that the city appears to be solely inhabited by centaurs.


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ProtoTEnterprise [2018-06-03 19:43:37 +0000 UTC]

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This may have many positive things even if it is not obvious to the naked eye.

With a general design of the place, having an abundance of details in colors and warm colors, how you play with the planes and how the overlays, the sensation of closeness and depth are so notorious that it seems that one is sitting precisely in the first person.

And speaking of the details, they are intense and they abound as well as the great style of stroke used. It shows that you have taken time, effort and dedication to make this universe of images contained in one.

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DonnieApril123 [2019-01-31 20:20:12 +0000 UTC]

Great scenery omg!!!

I am online now XD and I have like an hour free! So..?

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AmaranthineRain [2018-05-24 00:14:58 +0000 UTC]

I actually like the design of this one! Especially the plants and gardens all over the place! The only thing I would suggest is to keep an eye on perspective next time (if you would like some perspective lines to play with for a digital project you can download them for free online or I think Photoshop has a way for you to drop them in on a canvas). 

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Ribbontail [2018-05-21 01:54:12 +0000 UTC]

A pastoral scene just in time for spring! You did a great job on this piece; it's rich in detail and charm, with vegetation, shimmering glass, and exotic swirls in every nook and cranny. You certainly brought this scene to life! It makes me curious, too: is there any philosophy behind their plant-keeping, and how do they garden so efficiently? Hehe. One way to improve this piece would be to add more depth. You could do this by making the foreground bridge (the upper, tan one) more detailed, and by adding simple shadows to the figures. A little bit of shading goes a long way!

Fantastic job overall, this is such an ambitious picture! It shows how important it is to step outside our comfort zones!

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FlyingCarpets [2018-05-13 00:38:06 +0000 UTC]

Wow I'd love to visit there, the stained glass windows alone look very alluring, and all this green makes it looks like a peaceful oasis despite the urban context. I love the little silhouettes of the shrimpgoats going around their business, it's interesting to follow them and see what they're up to!

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1tiptip1 [2018-05-11 13:33:57 +0000 UTC]

That looks like it would be fascinating and terrifying to visit.  

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Sleyf [2018-05-11 10:46:12 +0000 UTC]

This is very interesting, I like how it's both modern and also whimsical with the organic swirls and plants

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