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Magicgrrl — An sinful war
Published: 2012-08-22 04:13:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 254; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 4
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Yeaaah, something I kinda drew for^.^; better later then never to contribute, right? This seems to be the only thing I've been able to cough out this month so far in my desk time at work.
But yeah.... First time trying out some techniques I learned from when we were out the con.... O.O They work so amazingly well <3
Disappointed in my lack of ability finding light sources though >.<
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I do have some questions about this piece for who ever wants to take a shot at pointing things out....
For a pencil drawing like this, what should I have done to improve this piece to make it better over all? Is there something I should work on to give it more depth?
Is there tricks to drawing fire without color?
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Comments: 8
Compliments:
This is an improvement over your previous works
The hair and face, followed by the overcoat, are obviously where you spent the most time and it shows well.
Criticisms:
Blending - unless you wanted it this way, and I know you didn't, blend the edges of the moon against itself and the night sky, same goes for the clouds. Clouds at night just appear as white and grey on blue and black, they don't have hard lines.
It's good you kept the same tone in the night sky, but the stars are mostly identical for shape and size. They also seem to have a pattern to them, make them more random. Also, I can tell you used a tool like an eraser to add them quickly, give them the love you gave your main character, they are individuals too.
Snow and fire - get some real pictures on the internet, put them in paint, change them grey scale. Then picture the shapes you want in the snow and how you want the flames formed. Draw them lightly with a 6H lead. Use a blend and varying lead to add the greys to the flame. Notice how you started shading the snow by starting close to the man's body and working outward? The shading close to his body bows down, making it look like his body is hiding a dip or ditch perfectly behind him. Use a 6H lead and make large sweeping motion from where you want to start a line, all the way to its end. It well leave a mark so faint, you won't see it in the character but it will be on the snow, blend with a cloth to give the snow that even, toned, look. Then, take a softer lead with a blender or cloth and make the contours of hills and bumps in the snow. If you wanted that perfect flat sheen, less is more in this situation, but there is almost always a couple bumps. For example, the path down to the town could have footprints or wagon trails. Has anyone walked in this picture, was there any motion? Where did your guy come from, the house?
Smoke - That smoke needs to be dark and ominous, its hard to tell something is burning back there, and stars will not be showing through smoke. Also, that smoke needs to be coming from all the buildings. Take a dark, soft lead, make very few marks, then blend. After that, make lighter marks and blend into all the smoke. This will get you a dark tone but a few lines that are even darker just to highlight a few billowing shapes in the smoke.
Trees - for the most part seem good but they are pine trees and may not be going exactly the same direction.
Close house - needs shadowing on the ground and building, the moon is in the sky behind everything. Also, why is the door white? Make that roof tacky and falling apart, show rafters, it IS on fire.
All in all, this is a step up from previous drawings where you only drew a main character or two. Give the background and scenario just as much love. The focal point is the man but I really feel like you wanted the focal point to be the fire first, then the man and what he says.
You could have closed the man's mouth and left him in his emotion, then made the fire booming, then title the piece "I hate this war". People would see the picture and notice the fire and the man, then understand the title.
Just know I gave you a 3 on all the categories on the right out of love as they don't justify good critiques.
I know you too well, take it and run with it.
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Lots of good stuff in this, yay!
Blending:
THe fact I've not looked outside my window at night is taking it's toll.... Duly noting this for future drawings.
As for the stars, it was a white gel pen >.> My best friend for lighting now. I'll study how other people draw starts.... try and give these guys more character.
Trees:
Hadn't thought about it before... Different directions might have given the over all piece character as well
House:
This is really making me realize the house needed more love for being so close XD I'll have to experiment with structural burning more I guess... Look up some houses on fire.... Hmmm.... Or start some >.> As for why that door is white? I have no idea... I think my photoshop did that when I was adjusting the gamma after the scan in.
There probably would have been more emotion if I had just left him quiet and titled the piece his words. The original idea though was to make him talking to his ram since, for this character, his best friend is that stupid thing and he talks to it a lot like the crazy priest he is
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It's a nice little sketch
The clouds have a nice shape, the houses are nicley detailed, and OMG is that a goat?! LOL!
There's only two problems though, well in my opinion anyways.
The Moon and the Second House to the right.
The dark side of the Crescent Moon should blend in with the night sky and shouldn't be any darker than it.
Also, that house seems to be too close to its neighbor. Now that I look at it, it looks more like the original outline of the other house.
Of course, that's just me and my opinion.
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Hehe, he's actually a ram... A bright pink, derpy ram... Although that is impossible to tell in this piece XD
I should have waited a few nights and looked up at the moon XD I see what you mean about the moon part. As for the close neighbor, that's suppose to be a store house, but failure to distinguished it (also not giving it enough space from the house) is being the thorn in my foot I see.
Thank you very much for this ^.^
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Sure thing, I do hope you keep drawing too.
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