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After being on DeviantArt for a few years now, I've noticed patterns in people's stories. Patterns, that I can't say I've ever seen until I started using the internet. I believe that's because these kind of patterns are thoroughly unprofessional. The pattern in short is this:Character = victim
Plot = bad things happening to said victim
Maybe this sounds harsh. It's not if you understand that is ALL there is to these stories. They take any character, hurl them into a tragedy and that's it.
Let's get this straight: We do not know your character well enough to care about them yet. No matter how bloody and gutty their injuries are, no matter how many of their family members are deceased, no matter what their boyfriend did to them, no matter what kind of disease they have, WE. DO. NOT. CARE!!!!!
These kind of things are sad in themselves, but WHO is this person we're supposed to feel so horrible for? Establish THAT. It should be your absolute FIRST priority: no exceptions.
No more pasting faces onto the same cardboard-cut-out sob story protagonist.
If you want readers to care, you must FIRST GIVE THEM A HUMAN BEING TO CARE FOR.
If you don't, yes of course you are still going to get comments from emotional people who find your story intriguing. That is not the point.
The absolute WORST thing you can do is (I hate saying this), taking comments from people on the internet seriously (about your writing, that is).
People who have no CLUE about literature will post comments on the most unprofessional writings and say things like, "This made me cry. You are like the next J.K Rowling."
DO NOT LISTEN TO THESE PEOPLE UNDER ANY CIRCUMSTANCES. THESE ARE THE PEOPLE WHO HAVE MADE THINGS LIKE TWILIGHT AND 50 SHADES OF GREY POSSIBLE.
All I'm saying is that if you think things like Twilight are insults to literature, I beg you to take the advice given above. If not, what can I say but: carry on. Let the age of Mary Sue begin.
We need to remember: a rich story is made up of so much more than only one element; it can't rely only on being "dark," or "tragic" or "romantic." These things are for bringing out emotion. It's ESSENTIAL that there is something worth being emotional ABOUT.
That is how you tell a beautiful story.
And even then, if you give us something we truly care about, you'll realize "I can make something even less tragic happen and it will have a much greater effect now."
Sometimes you'll even realize that being subtle is even more disturbing and "dark" than going all out.
I said it before, I'll say it again: drama is the anti-suspense. Drama needs something to feed on or else it is dead.
It's up to you to make casual, every-day scenes interesting too.
Humor is a particularly wonderful tool for making characters appealing. The more appealing the character, the more the audience will care when they suffer.
Think of your favorite cartoon character. Now imagine if they died. Not a funny, cartoon-ish death where we know that they'll be all right again in three seconds.
Pretend they came to a permanent end that was actually portrayed very tragically and non-sarcastically.
Kind of leaves you with a disturbed feeling, doesn't it? If this is the way you want your audience to feel about your characters, then follow this example. It doesn't mean your character has to be as silly as a cartoon character, it just means we should feel like we know them in such a way that we can feel their pain.
In short: don't give us another card-board soap opera. Give us something to love.
No more "I'm going to drench this character in blood and my story will automatically be deep!" If that's as deep as you can get, you must be very shallow indeed.
EDIT: CLARIFICATION
I'm saying that introducing the character should be first *priority,* not necessarily the first thing in the story. The point being, don't write a story that you worry about the character second to the soap opera.
Of course many stories (Harry Potter included) start off with bad things happening. This is because they're crucial to setting up the entire story. The point is not to expect your audience to be scandalized yet.
Also, when you read this guide, assume I'm talking about writing seriously. I'm not picking on those of you writing for practice/fun/etc.
This is a concern because things like this are being published these days. If this isn't your goal, carry on by all means.
I posted this because it's getting to the point where there is no unique style. This is the style that most beginners (and therefore most people) tend to use. I'm not picking on beginners, just pointing out not to settle with the first, most obvious style of writing that no one encourages them to grow beyond.
Are there people who enjoy this kind of writing? Of course. But why is it all we should be content with?
The attitude should be something like this: make the character deep enough for whatever you're writing.
If it's a short deviation, naturally less so than in a novel.
Same if it's not the point of the thing you're writing (say you're just trying to bring out a moral or something).
However, if you expect to write a sob story this is highly important.
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Anewbluedude [2022-11-08 18:59:06 +0000 UTC]
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LadyClassical [2020-03-22 21:50:16 +0000 UTC]
And people say filler and cooldown scenes are crap! I say, the more the better! That's why fanfiction is cool, though, because the readers already love (or hate) the characters.
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TardisGhost [2018-10-01 10:20:48 +0000 UTC]
That's why I try to do some more or less everyday-ish scenes in my stories.
Things happen and sometimes go down, but then get back to normal, even casual again.
I actually almost enjoy writing those scenes even more than the drama. xD
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galateabellator [2018-09-15 12:24:35 +0000 UTC]
I am glad I stumbled upon your texts. I wish I did sooner There are a lot of good points, and you explain things in a very good way.
I strongly agree with remarks about the feedback. A lot of us, fanfiction writers, get praised for something mediocre. It's not that hard to fall into a trap of believing we have made something good - until the criticism strikes, of course
I was wondering, did you write something on the topic of x reader fanfictions versus x oc fanfictions? I find that x readers are more appealing to the audience for obvious reasons (the readers identify easier with the story and characters, enjoy it more, and so on, and so forth). These days, when people see an OC story, they immediately assume it's about Mary Sue/Gary Stu. Or, maybe it's just my subjective remark
I would be interested to read your point of view regarding this.
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kartoonfanatic [2018-04-09 20:45:15 +0000 UTC]
This critique reminds me of YMS's review of Precious for some reason. I have my disagreements about that particular review, but his whole idea of drama-porn is correct in that it is really lame and overdone, even in professional made productions, so of course it's going to be rampant in amateur fiction.
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DonotTouchMySenpia [2018-01-13 23:06:35 +0000 UTC]
This basically my thought process. Unless the main character is bullied/abused for a good reason that creates an interesting plot development, not just making them depressed or have mental health issues, then don't add it in!
Some examples of their background actually being useful to the plot are if they meet new characters in the therapist office or if it creates a weakness for them to then be defeated. Other then that nobody wants a sob story.
There is also some elements that even I didn't think about and can now incorporate into my own writing, so thank you for that :3
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BrittneyLH [2018-01-10 20:00:26 +0000 UTC]
I try to hold by this well enough but honestly I don't know. It's hard to put yourself outside of your story to view as someone seeing it for the first time.
I think you're very right though and I'll use Avatar the Last Airbender for example of how you dont need to be overly tragic or dark to make people care. In Atla there are times it gets dark, especially later on but it is still a "kids" show all in all so they couldnt go SUPER dark. However, they wrote the characters so well and gave them a good purpose and plot that when something somewhat dark happened to them it seemed so heavy and meaningful and that's the kind of response you want to get. This is easy to say but not do and I know I'll never be that good (I wish I could write as good as Atla ;-; ) tbh I just write for fun no real goal other than to give me ideas for art pieces.
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SakuraNights [2017-03-14 19:02:41 +0000 UTC]
THANK YOU!!!
My words exactly, that I see your character in despair, and I pose the question: why should I care?
You've literally put my thought and feelings on the matter in writing, so thank you so much for this!!
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AlexaTheFox [2016-06-17 22:22:27 +0000 UTC]
Oh God yes. I've noticed that particular style of storytelling has become popular so quickly on here and in novels. It's gotten really old really fast.
One thing I would like to add, though, is that some people who write in that style constantly put their character(s) in difficult situations. I mean, I understand you can't have a story if there's no conflict, but some of those writers take it to the extreme to the point where that's all there is. No calm, quiet moments, little to no character development, etc. And they don't / can't let their character(s) have even a second of triumph before something else happens. Conflicts exist for a reason: to be resolved and give the character(s) a sense of accomplishment. What's the point in writing a story if you can't let your character(s) have a stable victory once in a while? It makes the character(s) seem more like walking pity parties rather than actual character(s) you can relate to.
Just my two cents.
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Quibbledink In reply to AlexaTheFox [2016-10-11 20:29:09 +0000 UTC]
I'm sorry for a semi-late response to this, but I have seen that too. I think every book needs calm moments between all of the traumatic and insane ones.
A lot of authors resort to constant gloom and doom because they don't know how to make an interesting set of characters, it seems. "Calm" moments may be boring for them to write since their characters aren't fun when they're in relaxed circumstances. They're only the least bit engaging if they're being violently beaten or gang-banged in an alley.
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NovaArtYoutube [2016-03-27 04:43:45 +0000 UTC]
OMG You have AMAZING ADVICE. WHO THE HECK CARES ABOUT THOSE PEOPLE THAT ARE SUPPOSED TO TEACH YOU HOW TO WRITE WHEN YOU HAVE ALL THE ANSWERS HERE!!!!
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xTicci-Tobyx [2015-11-09 15:23:16 +0000 UTC]
Excellent points. I'm afraid I'm guilty of doing just that in my first few stories. But now that I know what to avoid and how to introduce a character and not the problem I think I'll improve as a writer. I hope to some day become professional, thank you for the advice ^_^
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ambeddo [2015-09-24 01:08:41 +0000 UTC]
I, personally, like writing that stuff, but this has inspired me to expand on what I wrote. You have a very good point, my friend
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shadhardblogger [2015-04-28 02:01:07 +0000 UTC]
That was a bit odd to me... but do I have to show, don't tell a story. I can say my story's only a narrative (expositions happen in backstories, but it can be brief or expanded outside here @ / / whatever you think of in deviantart.com - but there should be more on wattpad). Expositions do have to happen in behind-the-scene essays and what-not, for as long as I don't have to.
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mmpratt99 [2015-04-08 21:14:49 +0000 UTC]
I try not fall into one of these sob story patterns.
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SporeDiatrymisss [2014-12-31 14:09:12 +0000 UTC]
I remember how I won the 1st place litterature prize at school, the third year in a row. The theme of the year was crime and punishment. So, as I understood, everyone in my class wrote about murder or theft or something, these big and dramatic kind of things.
I wrote about a little six years old girl that killed a toad by accident.
I wonder if this means anything
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Robotic-Mind [2014-12-14 17:35:02 +0000 UTC]
I love your stuff about bad writing! I'm 13 and I'm no professional writer, but I know that you should take tips about how to write well and study.
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Dachsiribo [2014-06-12 21:54:07 +0000 UTC]
Great article. I'll definitely keep this in mind when I pick up writing again. Thank you!
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation, by the way.
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Legacyhunter [2014-06-11 17:36:08 +0000 UTC]
Very much agree. This really refreshes my mind and made me see clearer. I'll be 100% sure to take this as a good advice for further improvements. Thank you!
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DanielaIvanova [2014-01-29 13:56:13 +0000 UTC]
While I was reading this, especially the part about humour being a nice way to define your character and make your readers care about him/her, I thought about Terry Pratchett. Don't know if you ever read any of his Discworld novels but they are all coloured by a very peculiar and unique sense of humour and all his characters are described in a very caricatural way, including some of the events in their lives that are very dramatic, life-threatening even. And then in one of the books during a possibly catastrophic risk of war the greatest trouble for the main protagonist is going home exactly ON TIME to read his son to sleep - an issue he gives priority to over his own life and the prevention of a massive, peace-endangering battle. And this problem strikes you so deeply while you're reading, the drama of it is so profound and the sympathy invoked so honest that it's both endearing and ludicrous. It makes you want to scold yourself and the protagonist for caring so much but you simply cannot help it. Now if that isn't a contrast to what you described!
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CaitieBerry [2014-01-27 04:24:06 +0000 UTC]
I completely agree with you, here. If a bad thing happens to a character we've come to love and care about, it's a tragedy and we all feel horrible. But if it happens to a character we have no emotional attachment to, yes, we're going to feel bad that those things happened, but that's it. It's like hearing on the news that someone (whom you didn't know) has been murdered; yes, it sucks, but you feel only a vague sense of sympathy before moving on. And even that sympathy is based more on guilt than anything else -- you'd be a horrible person if you didn't feel sad that it happened, so you feel a token sense of sympathy for the victim and/or their family; then, obligation complete, you move on. Yes, I'm sorry your character was brutally raped by her stepbrothers; but I'm sorry more because I'm supposed to be than anything else. In actuality, to quote the late Douglas Adams, I don't give a pair of fetid dingo's kidneys. Give me a reason to sympathize with your character; then I'll care.
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MakingFunOfStuff In reply to CaitieBerry [2014-01-27 05:08:32 +0000 UTC]
Good analogy.
In a good book, losing a character feels like losing a friend.
In other books, it's just like hearing about a death on the news.
Both are sad, but which shows the better author?
I like that analogy lots.
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BambooFoxFire [2014-01-26 08:08:51 +0000 UTC]
I'd be lying if I said I didn't like to write the angsty/emo characters *shot*
On another note though, I don't think that it's JUST the fact that they write characters with tragedy and emo-ness surrounding them so much as HOW they write them. Most often, I find that people write them as nothing more than an excuse for the character to be "rescued" by the story's love interest, and after a few hugs and cuddles and kisses, all their angst and troubles magically vanish, or the troubles and drama that occure are more melodrama than actual tragedy or what-have-you.
No PTSD, no official counseling or therapy needed, and they get over it rather quickly without even one relapse or without their angsty troubles causing any REAL relationship strain(i.e. having to work on their own bad behaviors or habits which might be destructive as a result of abuse they suffered, or if they do, it's treated as "cute" or "no big deal", but never actually addressed in a manner to solve it, or losing relationships because of it, or needing serious interventions, et cetera).
I love a well-written tragedy/angst story that addresses those problems, which would be issues one would have to tackle in real life or suffer consequences to their relationships and such, but it's really hard to find those well-written ones under all the ones that are total crap.
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MakingFunOfStuff In reply to BambooFoxFire [2014-01-26 08:22:28 +0000 UTC]
Agreed, it all depends on how you handle it.
I'd like to see more realistic stories instead of always having to keep my expectations at level cheesy. Unfortunately, believable stories are hard to find.
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BambooFoxFire In reply to MakingFunOfStuff [2014-01-26 08:25:14 +0000 UTC]
Amen to that.
If you haven't read her work before, though it's fanfiction(mainly Fullmetal Alchemist), Sevlow on FF.net does an awesome job of very gritty, realistic, believable portrayals of dark fiction and angst. Honestly I don't know anyone who does it better.
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AkiLightAngel742 [2014-01-17 23:46:42 +0000 UTC]
I must i really like your opinion on this topic. I'm sad to say i'm one of those people who like those kind of story. (hey i favor a lot of them too and they are reader insert. Yet most story are character fro movies and manga/anime ) but only enjoy the positive and just interesting to see a story in second person. There times where it so what "tragic" but i don't mind. I would even admit that readied the twilight series,and let me tell you i did NOT like the ending or how pitiful character the author put Bella. (I think that's here name). Yet it a great book for A.R points though! (A.R.=Accelerated Reader. thicker the book is the more points you get! i did it because you get to pick out a prize if depending how much points a book get. i really wanted the limited addition sport back with my middle school "logo") And from my middle school year i started to read more books but more unique characters and plots. Most are one shot story.
anyway....
The reason I comment is you open my eyes on how not to make a "common" story and how to be careful when writing. I glad to see your point of view and how other too. You made me think of the great author of history and how they write there story. Realistic stories.
I also want your opinion on this story i'm developing. Its basically has a tragic beginning with both the main and minor characters. All which have different point of views with each character depending on the book (it a series,) yet still have the main character insert there. The genre is mostly action, real life,superhuman, and science fiction. It does have romance in there but it is realistic. It just a story about 14 teens with curses/gift and fight against each other in a war. A man who gave them the powers wanted them to destroy the world and control them for him to be the ruler of earth. Backfire now they are now 14 children became the most hated and fear human know to man. Also there goal is to kill each other. It is a future like story.
(I'm sorry for grammar errors here and there i'm still trying to improve my grammar and my vocabulary.) I just curious on what you think so far.
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MakingFunOfStuff In reply to AkiLightAngel742 [2014-03-11 16:08:46 +0000 UTC]
Thanks for the comment, and sorry for such a late response.
It sounds like an interesting story, I could see it really becoming something great if you stick with it and develop it. I say go for it.
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AkiLightAngel742 In reply to MakingFunOfStuff [2014-03-28 15:53:13 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! Don't worry about the late response!
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That-Doodle-Bunny [2013-11-27 02:24:50 +0000 UTC]
Hi there. I am a collaborative writer with my best friend, and I need some help. You really seem to know what you're talking about, so I hope you can give me some advice.
Anyway, my best friend and I have been trying to write this one story since high school. Back then, we were having fun RPing with these characters (which we still do today) and we thought it was a good idea. Now that I'm out of high school and have matured quite a lot since then, I can see that our story is a cluttered, confused, mess. My best friend doesn't seem to see it that way. That's not to say that she's overly defensive about the story, but she is reluctant towards change.
When I say it's cluttered, I mean it. The main character is a space alien (that looks exactly like a human being by the way) who works on Earth as a part-time grim reaper, hunts demons, is friends with vampires, and has telekinetic powers. If you weren't made dizzy by that description, then I congratulate you. I've tried bouncing ideas around to try to make it all make sense and fit, but as it is it's like a jenga tower ready to topple. If I take anything out at this point, the whole thing will just fall apart. I have no idea how to tell her this without hurting her feelings.
I recently came up with an idea that this character is a story within a story. What I mean by that is that this character is being used as a coping mechanism/self-insert by a less-than-popular teenage girl. Whenever the girl in the story needs to vent some sort of emotion or figure something out in her life, she would write the telekinetic-alien-grim-reaper-demon-hunter story. I haven't told this idea to my friend yet, and I'm afraid of offending her. I also don't want to end our silly, little RPs; I just want them to be different from the story. What should I do? (I'm also sorry for being a bit long-winded).
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MakingFunOfStuff In reply to That-Doodle-Bunny [2013-11-27 21:23:06 +0000 UTC]
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That-Doodle-Bunny In reply to MakingFunOfStuff [2013-11-28 14:03:36 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! I feel so much better now after you said that!
Now I don't have to worry about hurting her feelings and we can just having fun with the whole thing.
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HareTrinity [2013-09-15 13:51:24 +0000 UTC]
Nicely said!
Reminds me, another of my pet peeves is drawn out deaths, e.g. lots of blood, screams of protest, over and over. In the Gormenghast series one of the main characters died so subtly at the end of a chapter that over the next page I had to stop and go back to the line to make sure I'd read it right. While gory ends can be funny and have their place, I think the quietly-snuffed-out deaths can be much more eerie because that's more how death tends to be. They're there, then they're gone, and for all of their life up 'til that point it's the other characters who are left to react, not them.
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ArthurTheBraveOne [2013-08-27 23:08:41 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for writing this. I'm glad to see that, reading your guides, I tend to avoid most (if not all) of the pitfalls you tend to name, and that really makes a guy feel a lot more self-assured (although I have, over the years, very much realized to always take /everything/ about writing with a grain of salt) about their writing. I find it especially funny that after reading all this, I once more realize that my current story could really do with a rewrite of the first few chapters because silly writing mistakes Maybe one thing I would add, which I've picked up elsewhere, is that main characters can (or maybe I ought to say 'should') never be a symbol (which actually ties more neatly into the mary-sue article, but oh well). Wondering if you'd have an opinion on that.
Even so, I can't say that I've read a particular amount of works that pretty much just start of with "OMFG I'm covered in blood I shall now be tragic!" Care to give me any pointers? After all, a great way to learn is to look at some things one should not do
Thanks again for the great articles, would love to read some more from you. Have a watch good sir!
Ps. Do people still /do/ the random thing? Thought that went out of fashion when I was 14...
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azdesertlupine [2013-08-18 21:03:32 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this subject. I have seen plenty of the garbage variety stories you refer to in many free reading and writing archives across the internet. You have given this topic a great deal of valid thought, and I wish more would pay attention to such posts as you have provided. One thing I feel compelled to mention is that people who have made Twilight and 50 Shades so popular seem to fit the rabid fan girl and fan boy style of immaturity issues to the core. They are not highly literate as a rule, and have a type of vapid adoration of empty platitude style writing. With that being a common denominator, better writers get ignored unfairly due to the lower expectation class of readers who are beginning to dominate in the reading sector.
Sadly, when it comes to fan fiction based writing, I have noticed that the fanpoodle type tales with the similarities mentioned here will always win once the more rabid fan girls and boys get involved in the reading process. Such individuals do not care one whit for a well developed, good reading, and thought provoking story. Pushing their fanatical adoration for a certain pairing, or situation down every other reader's throats to the best of their abilities seem to be their only agenda in some instances.
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GoGo-T-W [2013-08-18 07:31:48 +0000 UTC]
Of all the things I've been reading recently about writing good stories, I feel like this is the most relevant to anything I've ever actually written.
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KondoIsami [2013-07-24 07:01:02 +0000 UTC]
How they survive it is what makes them who they are.
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MakingFunOfStuff In reply to KondoIsami [2013-08-15 01:26:32 +0000 UTC]
Tragedy helps us see who they are morally/spiritually, but the little things make them endearing as a character in a unique way.
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QVxVCTxZero [2013-07-01 00:13:55 +0000 UTC]
This is so perfect. I wrote a story with my friends that did the opposite of all of this. Introduced some characters, built up their story, and then BAM! Tragedy struck. There were some minor tragedy at the beginning, but like you said in the clarification, it was to lead up to everything, and establish a couple mechanics in the series. Unfortunately, a story that does all this crappy stuff gets all the comments and love, and the person who wrote it often tries to sabotage my works to make theirs look better :/
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QVxVCTxZero [2013-07-01 00:13:54 +0000 UTC]
This is so perfect. I wrote a story with my friends that did the opposite of all of this. Introduced some characters, built up their story, and then BAM! Tragedy struck. There were some minor tragedy at the beginning, but like you said in the clarification, it was to lead up to everything, and establish a couple mechanics in the series. Unfortunately, a story that does all this crappy stuff gets all the comments and love, and the person who wrote it often tries to sabotage my works to make theirs look better :/
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Berna-EH [2013-06-30 04:51:49 +0000 UTC]
Geez, it's the third of your posts I'm reading and it's almost 02:00 a.m. and I still have to take a shower and it's winter... You're worthy my watch
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