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Published: 2004-06-08 17:55:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 118; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 12
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Description I wrote this one years ago when I got into Poppy Z. Brite's writing's...she's fantastic. This didn't even turn out like I expected it too, but it's one of the few poems I wrote back then that I actually like.
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AngelY2Knight [2004-06-10 05:09:51 +0000 UTC]

hehehehehe, i like it too much! its a very good poem, the rhyming in this kind of poems it's not a rule, that's why it's call spoken word, or for my free verse. It's something about freedom, just saying what come out of your heart or mind

i like this 2 lines, dont know why:

"And with this I will end my sad story.
All these lost souls...nowhere to go. Nothing."


good work

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malignancy In reply to AngelY2Knight [2004-06-10 05:44:56 +0000 UTC]

That's how it goes.

Thanx.

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AngelY2Knight In reply to malignancy [2004-06-10 07:26:36 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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HurtByHerHeart [2004-06-08 18:53:15 +0000 UTC]

Only crit. is the rhyming. It seems to go.

A,B,A,C
D,E,E,D
F,F,G,G
H,H,J,J
K,K,L,L
L,M

And it doesnt follow one pattern.

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malignancy In reply to HurtByHerHeart [2004-06-09 02:42:57 +0000 UTC]

That's what I like about it.

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HurtByHerHeart In reply to malignancy [2004-06-09 17:56:10 +0000 UTC]

Oh, okay then

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