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Next: [link]Page 1 of our audition for deviantDEAD.
script by *flipsidered
art by me
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Badasssssssssss 
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AAH! Its awesome! I cant wait to get our pages done!
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Wow that is just one page and it's so sexy. If I get in I pray you don't clobber me first round! D:
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Ooh, you're entering too? Good luck!
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Seriously, miss, your art and jess's writing is AWESOME COMBO
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EEEEEE, fucking stoked, man. Way to start with some noir suspense, too, l'm already at the edge of my seat.
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Thanks, you! Watch flips build the tension, she is genius <3
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Lovin' the fourth panel with the ambly zombies coming towards her, she totally looks hard enough to smash those goofs
Little nitpicks, tho' the first panel where you see her, her eye is set a bit far back on her skull so it's making her face a little sloped. The tears in the first panel where she's starting to get misty eyed look fine, but the second panel where it's running down her cheek it seems a tad... solid and opaque. Maybe a shine or something to suggest clear, reflective water would help? Totally picky little opinion thing that you can choose to disregard, but I'm not totally sure the way you're handling the separation of her ponytail is necessary. It's a distinct enough shape that it reads on it's own, so using the white line to separate it from the rest of her hair is looking a bit like a misplaced shine mark. Especially against the strong shine on the rest of her hair, it seems to make the ponytail seem a little flat.
Can't say much about the story yet since it's only one page 
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Yeah, i had a nightmare with those eyes and just couldn't see how to fix them. Thanks for the hint, though. And I appreciate the hint with the ponytail - might start handling it like that in future, with a little highlight to accent the shape, maybe.
Thankyou very much for taking the time out to critique. I'm not 100% on the inking with this page, mostly for the reasons you mentioned, but the crits really helped me outline what was wrong so i could fix it next time.
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Oh christ, you're so awesome! Good luck with DD, ima get off my arse and apply to this one (because it has zombies!) but holy shit you're good! I love the dramatic lighting and your expressions as usual are fantastic.
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Thankyou so much <3 This one's going to be challenging, but fun - a new collaborator, a new style, and a new army of slavening undead. I hope to see you in there!
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RUN SYD. OH WAIT. YOU CAN'T.
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WHO WROTE THIS CRAP
gorgeous art, my dude! 
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AUGH. I covered myself with ink in this. I was so filthy after inking this page, you would have laughed.
YOU WROTE THIS AWESOME CRAP.
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OMFGHEARTYOUBOTH.
You guys kick so much ass.
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All props go to emiry on this one! I just pooped out some words, and look at the awesomeness she wrung out of them
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Pooping words on a page is harder than it looks, I'm coming to realize. XD
Dude though, pixie /is/ like distilled awesomeness in a jar or something. It just gets better every time. I always think, "No, there's no /possible/ way it gets better than that" and somehow.... Poof. Better.
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They are shambling into your business!
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This is SO hot omgomg. I love your inking to pieces, I am so jealous. ;3; Cannot wait to read the rest.
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AARGH Cannot wait to maybe cross swords with you in this. I brought my artistic duelling banjo. And WHOO, your inks have me VERY nervous about my own position - inking's currently one of my weaker points. But I hope to see you in the contest!
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Wow!
I'm not sure what I like better.
The Art or the Story thus far.
Either way you peaked my interest.
Great job all the way round.
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Flips did an AMAZING job with the story; she paces very smoothly. Hope the rest of it keeps you as entertained!
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Between the two of you, the Zombies don't stand a chance.
Please pass my regards to your partner.
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In-YOUR-media-res.
Kidding.
But be prepared for lots of spot black and oozy zombies.
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