coldsoul [2003-08-20 23:44:28 +0000 UTC]

Clap clap clap

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valangus [2003-06-30 03:44:59 +0000 UTC]

I agree with kenzie in that it brings a lot more to mind then just what's written...very sweet.

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jsenn [2003-06-24 00:46:44 +0000 UTC]

oooooooooh, I love it, I love it, I love it. It was surprising and wonderful and sweet, just like the first kiss must have been. I love the way you wrote this!

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anamchara [2003-06-23 00:22:35 +0000 UTC]

is there a 'love deviation' option? guess not....so this will have to do....

it was better than words can express, but you did a lovely job capturing it...why cant i write like that! *cries* so very envious...

i loved the moment..
i love every moment.....
i loved the poem
and i love you

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ravensaint [2003-06-21 04:37:02 +0000 UTC]

I so wish I could do these...lol...any way I liked this one a lot, it brought back some cool memories

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kenzie [2003-06-20 02:54:55 +0000 UTC]

short cute and too the point. i love how, in sow few words you conveyed something so detailed (one can almost picture the candle light, her doorstep, etc etc... ) this leaves alot to the imagination; it captures all of the most important facets of the moment. cool.

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unglitteringold [2003-06-19 04:04:58 +0000 UTC]

I love Hikus. You did a wonderful job of telling a story without covering all of the details. Wonderful work.

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wernstrum [2003-06-19 01:47:41 +0000 UTC]

hehe i recognise the haiku here. good work, i always appreciate haikus. the strain to comply makes it harder for the poet to express himself. so i took joy in reading this. gr8 piece

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outpour [2003-06-19 01:24:58 +0000 UTC]

short, extremly short and sweet.

might i suggest "a nod and for yes"

and mabye instead of "she had asked" just "she asked"

perhaps? mabye not..

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