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Mathnerd โ€” Killing Hope
Published: 2005-01-27 02:00:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 147; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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Description They stand between the tall mountains,
Of depression and despair,
Their hearts will freeze, their minds will fade,
In the damp and chilly air.

They muck about and mourn their strife,
There are many there,
They choose not to leave their sad place,
They call for life to be fair.

She sits above and hears their cries,
She studies their course of woe,
She sings to them, voice strong and clear,
Her solo rings true with Hope.

They shrink away and scream in fear,
They refuse to hear her song,
The reject joy and forgot her,
Their time weeping has been long.

She grows intense, Her song persists,
Then bless'd Hope falters and thins,
Her song fades fast, her joy has gone,
She tumbles as sadness wins.

A deep voice sounds, "You killed fair Hope,
Let fall your last saving Grace,
You lost the will to stay alive,
Chose not to stay in the race.โ€

They see Hope rise and plead her stay,
She shakes her head, face downturnโ€˜d.
They deny fault, plead innocent,
Lay blame for the place they earned.

"You had your chance, you chose your path"
She shed not one tear for them,
She turns away and leaves them be,
To woe they themselves condemn'd.
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Comments: 8

Gr3ywInd88 [2005-12-14 18:24:16 +0000 UTC]

Wow, nice work. You should definitely write some more because that was very good. You conveyed the message very well. I am impressed by anyone who can work rhyme into their pieces as well because I cannot. Anyways, very nice job.

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Mjollifer [2005-01-29 22:17:24 +0000 UTC]

i this!!! awesome job!!! this is sooo cool!!!! great jorb!! wow... totally emoticoned... :3

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Sutton1 [2005-01-27 13:46:40 +0000 UTC]

*smirk*

wow, ms bailey. twas a fantastical feat of taylorism! satire is wonderous thing, especially when used against satire. I especially like the first and last stanzas, very awesome metaphore!

when you said "she sits above them" i imagined you were sitting on a branch of a gnarled tree, and the surrounding landscape was all misty and gray. kind of makes me want to put on a couple of mine just to show you up except mine are humorous at times.

in other words... the mighty Sutton1 is impressed

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Mathnerd In reply to Sutton1 [2005-01-28 04:36:20 +0000 UTC]

Wow, I am very honored to have the mighty sutton's approval.

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StarlitPoltergeist [2005-01-27 03:19:03 +0000 UTC]

It's people like you, who write next to never and then pop out something as good as this that make people like me, who write because if they don't they'll die pretty much, feel really really bad.

In other words, I LOVE IT TO DEATH! *squee!*

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Mathnerd In reply to StarlitPoltergeist [2005-01-28 04:39:50 +0000 UTC]

Oh come on, it's just that you actually get around to writing all those extra thoughts in your head. I just think about them and mentally paste them to my ceiling by staring at it all night. You get just as much, prolly more, good stuff out than me.

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Lhunhyandowen [2005-01-27 02:06:13 +0000 UTC]

I LOVE this! It's so good! Two thumbs up!

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Mathnerd In reply to Lhunhyandowen [2005-01-27 02:16:09 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, thank you, thankyouverymuch.

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