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mattwilson83 — NHC Volume 22
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Naruto and its characters © Masashi Kishimoto
NHC story © me
PDF - drive.google.com/file/d/0B8cCY… - VOLUME 22 Available!
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Comments and critique about this is very welcome and much appreciated.
Previous volumes:
Volume 1
Volume 5
Volume 10
Volume 15
Volume 20
Volume 21 Volume 22 Volume 23 Volume 24 Volume 25
Chapters:
Chapter 169
Chapter 170
Chapter 171
Chapter 172
Chapter 173
Chapter 174
Chapter 175
Chapter 176
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Comments: 52
I have been so addicted to your series, you are the king of Naruto fan fiction.
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Just wondering, why does the younger Naruto have mismatched eyes?
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I love this but, the pdf doesn't work on 4shared
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fixed... finally XD
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Next cover... Kurama finally gets to be there?
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When chapter 176 is completed (at least a few day after, anyway.) and I just finished ch174
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I love that the story is picking up and the art is getting so much better! The last couple of volumes seemed repetitive with everyone and their grandma suddenly turning into lesbians out of no where. The writer is beginning to focus on character development and progression with cutting the fat and concentrating on less arcs which makes the story cohesive and come together nicely. Seeing character's study new techniques and foreshadowing, even if small, makes character growth fluid and make sense which is awesome and a mistake alot of authors make. The fights are freaking well done and a solid "Bravo" is in order with the way they play out the art is great, motion, choreography and paneling makes them easy to read and you don't feel lost or confused with trying to figure out whats going on. Finally Sasuke having his own mini arc is great and refreshing instead of just being a background character I'm sure will add some much needed breathing room to cut to during the main arc, although I'm still not feeling his wardrobe choice it just screams street fighter to me.
My only nitpicks really is the last couple volumes with Moegi having a crush on Hanabi I was excited having a bi-sexual character represented but then turned full lesbian kind of let me down some with a missed opportunities(although still salvagable) of her coming to terms that she likes both genders which sadly isn't explored enough. Ino having that kiss with Sakura just seemed out of the blue and random with serving no real purpose other than forced drama, I know the author wanted his audience to be sympathetic with her but I couldn't and it had the opposite effect on me Chouji is too nice and sweet to be treated this way but then again it gives him potential growth as a character, I know inspiration is a key factor in creativity and storytelling but there is such a thing as too much inspiration the story at some point needs discipline and sometimes too much of a good thing can be a bad thing.
This is just some critiques from a fellow writer with absolutely no malice or arrogance intended. Continue with your this great work.
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Wow, just a couple of instances, and suddenly you say its everyone... you must have hated it a lot to think it was more than it was.
and yeah, people were commenting that there were too many, so that helped a lot with me changing stuff.
And who said Moegi WASN'T Bisexual? That was in fact still up in the air, she's only confessed that she likes Hanabi, not that she hasn't been attracted to boys.
I thank you for the critique, it was useful, and interesting to read. I am always looking for ways to improve my work and style, and sounds like I am getting there.
The only thing is, you focused a lot on the yuri elements, and exaggerated them a little, whether unintentionally or in a misspoken way, making it sound more like it was a personal issue, than a proper critique, like 'everyone was turning yuri' i mean seriously... Ino was exploring old feelings coupled with her on 'need' to self destruct relationships resulting in a confusing moment for herself, and moegi and Hanabi's plot wasn't very present, as it will be drawn out a bit more.
anyway, once again, I thank you for the wonderful critique, and Hope I improve further
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I'm mostly indifferent when it come to it, the yuri was the only thing that stuck out recently as everything else is in full swing with the dream arc, Moegi said she was a Lesbian so I assumed she was turned fully gay for story purposes good to hear. Yea I tend to exaggerate for comedic effect I guess it could be taken as condescending but I assure you I didn't mean it that way more a friendly elbow to the ribs that a punch to the face.
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Well she said it like in an innocently naive way, like for some people when they say they like the same sex, they instantly say 'well I must be gay' but don't really consider that they still get attracted to the opposite sex too. SHe says she is a lesbian because she likes hanabi. It's a simple if not inaccruate description used by her. I know, it's confusing XD
And I know, comedy is hard to pull off in simple text form. (why i end to add a visually descriptive comedy elelment when I joke.
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Cool thanks for clearin' that up. I hope hanabi isn't gay I like her and Konohamaru together too much.
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Nice change of pace, last couple of volumes were just lesbian this yuri that. Good to see the plot itself is,in my opinion, moving forward in a meaningful way finally.
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You wanted to draw him as a kid didn't you? ^ ^
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Matt will this hole volume be about his dream or just a couple chapters?
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Pretty much just the dream, there will be things going on outside the dream too, but related to it.
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This should be an interesting look into the past.
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The volume cover sets the theme for upcoming chapters....
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I won't put a sin here but I can tell you one mistake you did. Kid Naruto has too big eyes for his face.
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but who am I to judge. when it comes to drawing on pc I suck. give me paper and pencil - I can make best artwork ever. tell me to do some on pc... I suck.
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everything no need to be perfect.
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I know. but sinc when is complaining a crime?
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it was an artistic critique, not complaint I would think. You simply pointed out an error.
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Well jeah That's what I meen. beliv'it
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Whoa! Talk about the past meeting the present! I've heard of going down memory lane but this is ridiculous!
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Cool. Like a reflection, only YOUR A KID! (sorry, like making it sound drama like) xD
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pretty much what I was going for.
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I'm sure of it! Dream sequences (or whatever) are always interesting.
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Very nice. Mayhaps be possibly a little too much on the eye shines, but that's the only pick I could give at best (and it looks cool, so nothing wrong with 'em, per se).
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I agree with her. Maybe soften them a bit and have the blue still come through with some opacity and I think you got it.
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Who is that boy I see
Staring straight
Back at me?
Why is my reflection someone
I don't know?
Mulan reference, couldn't help it. Anyways sweet cover
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