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MrLylesJr [2011-12-09 06:15:27 +0000 UTC]

Your expression posing and composition are really nice. The page layouts are successful and flow beautifully. The only issues I'm seeing are small ones that you can fix just by being aware that you're doing them. The biggest problem I'm having with these pencils are the line qualities. They look fine in the smaller version but once I look at them in full resolution they are kind of shaky. Clearly you can draw extremely well and I think you should put more confidence in your lines.

The second thing that stuck out to me was your line weight. I think you could show more variation in your lines. If you threw some line weights on the underside of things (just for starters) it would give your drawings more volume. I think page 8 worked really well and it stuck out to me because it was the only page with line weights. Speaking of volume I really think you are inconsistent with the three dimensional quality in your work. For instance in this page on the belt Thor is wearing around his chest is flat on the front side but shows the wrap around on the back. This same problem is seen in sentry's belt. I saw the inked version of one of the pages and that basically is what I want to see out of the pencils. I'm not sure if you're the person who inks these or not but I'm just writing off what I see in the pencils.

Thirdly It looks to me like you don't know whether you want to lean towards a more realistic style or a more stylized approach to drawing the figures in your comics. I want to say you're going for the more realistic side but then I see random parts of the anatomy flattened out like the back of sentry's leg. Your faces also have a stylized graphic quality. Just touching on that, you might consider using other shapes besides triangles in your character design. All the features on both characters are pointed. Maybe round off the Nose/lips/eyes of Thor just a bit to show he's one of the good guys. A lot of artist (Such as Jim Lee) use those simple design techniques when they have to do comic with Superman and Batman. If you want I can link you to some sketches of Jim Lee's work with the notes of his thought process behind his Bruce Wayne and Clark Kent design.

Also speaking of anatomy and design you might want to try pushing your shapes a bit more with your muscles. For example in Thors leg thats thrusted forward you could show that same muscle with two simple lines. I'm not saying you should go completely stylized but I do think there are some designs out there that you would be able to mold into your drawing style well. Maybe study some Phil Bourassa (phillyB - deviantart) and see how he simplifies his shapes so that they are simple enough to animate yet complex enough to show the muscles and forms underneath.

Overall your work is good but I think you just have to work on your consistency. If you can find a way to maintain the professional quality in all of your drawing you will be just fine. Just work on your line quality and pushing your shapes. Also Thors helmet on this page really bugs me. The shape makes it look like his head is egg shaped. I think you should flatten out of top just a bit. Just my thought lol.

On a side note. I'm glad to see you're working on something but I'm kind of sad you didnt continue with the Goku vs Superman series. I was really digging that one.

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Mighty-Griffon [2011-11-15 23:24:27 +0000 UTC]

Gosto mais assim, boa mudança

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yuureikitsune [2011-11-14 02:59:43 +0000 UTC]

I like this one a little more then the last. The scene looks a lot more intense then the first and the posing feels more natural.
I love the contrast is in they're expressions!

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