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MiserableFish — Haywire
Published: 2009-06-01 03:48:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 124; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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Rays of loveFading away
I see a new dawn
I fear another dusk
The moon
And stars and noon
The night and dark
Miss your voice's husk
Happiness and laughters
Reside far away and slaughters
Like you
They're also lusk
Screams and wails
To walls and pails
No-one hears
The bleak busk
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Comments: 15
I love how it's "detached" in writing style. Not emotionally, but short sentences which convey more then lengthy sentences sometimes.
I hope I'm making sense! ^-^;;
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yep you're making sense.
haha, I know short sentences sometimes say more then the longer lenghter fancy ones.
=]
Thank you?
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hmmm its different. im not sure what to think of it.
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lol it just seems odd altogether. like maybe im too dumb to see the point of it. thats very possible.
it hss a nice feel to it though and a good flow.
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haha. Naah you need not be sorry. I wasnt offended.
Just dont know how to take your comment.
=]
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haha ok. i just didnt wanna hurt your feelings.
if it will make you feel better, you can read my 2 newest poems and criticize me harshly as well lol.
im not sure what i meant by comment either, to be honest. i was awfully tired and out of it when i made it. i rather enjoy the whole of the poem. your first 2 stanzas are quite incredible as well.
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Thank you.
Means alot.
And naah I rather like your stuff, critizing is not my thing
+D
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youre welcome friend.
and oh well thanks. would you read it and make not harsh comments then? lol
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You would see, no harsh comments would come your way from me.
Lemme read your latest stuff.
=]
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lol ok i sure hope so.
but if it sucks you better tell me lol
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