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mistsofavalon4ever — Coping Methods
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Published: 2010-02-11 01:28:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 1244; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 2
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Description
We all have different ways ofdealing with
the shit life
throws at us
Some run so hard
that they can't feel
their own muscles and bones.
So far away they
can't find themselves.
Some drink into a
pretty haziness,
tongue loosened,
then fall into
a sweet dark oblivion
ended abruptly
by light streaming through
the curtains and a
piercing headache.
Some keep chocolate
hidden under the bed
and let it end the emptiness
and coat the tongue
when no one is looking
Some stop eating,
to prove they can,
to let the hunger
consume them
rather than the
pain
Some take a pill
and sleep to dream
Some stay on edge,
awake with the stars
and the daylight,
only hoping to get all
of their tasks done
and collapse,
only to start
all over again
Some open their skin
like a zipper,
pulled by the hands
of the razor,
to stay in blood instead
of thoughts
Some disappear in their
paper and pencil,
letting the image take
over everything
else
Some disappear in any
other story
but their own-
book, movie,
no matter
Some acquire songs to
beat the silence
and blast at
all hours
Some break others open
with fists,
to taste their
suffering
resistance
strength
Some smother others
incessantly
with questions
Why can't we
leave it alone?
Why can't we leave
ourselves
alone?
Why do we
so stridently
try to avoid
our own lives?
Each one of us is
in denial
and sinking further
with our coping methods
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Comments: 42
Just amazing! Perfect! I love the one where its starts with some stay on the edge. I love it all!
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wow. thank you.
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You really left me crying :$
really, really, really a great poem ^^
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...I'm sorry? Thank you.
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no! don't be ^^
it's just simply beautyful
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Me too, actually. Thank you very much.
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I really like this.
Honestly, it's because it gives all the escapes we take to try and get away from our own lives as we go somewhere else.
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True,true.
Glad you liked it, it brigtened my day.
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very nice! not the most emo poem I have ever read 
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Well that's something XD
thank you
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What with how upside down my life is I really connected to this piece. Wicked job!
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I am glad you connected ^^ And thanks again!
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Aww. Such a touching piece. I could really feel it... well, up untill about halfway through.
Then it became a bit too repetitive for my liking. I would suggest you either just remove a couple of the stanzas, or you start phrasing them differently. For example, instead of starting every new part with 'Some' again, you could start some with "And then there's those who..." or something to that effect. That way it will stay interesting, and it will keep the reader focussed for longer - certainly if you manage to change the wording in such a way that the stanzas you change will sound stronger, so that it will really build up towards the end.
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I'll work on it. Thanks
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Very welcome
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I'll be sure to
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I like it. All in all what you have is good, all I can really recommend is to lengthen the imagery for some of your shorter stanzas, like the one referring to sleeping pills or the one about writers.
I do agree with you, it is a little emo, but not overly so, especially considering this is poetry and it's all a little emotional; the emotions just change
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Yes, I lengthened the drawing one. Work in progress, I guess. Thanks.
I suppose the subject matter is a little.
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Beautiful description and thought. There was a diverse spectrum of different 'coping techniques'. There was effort and thought, which brings out the passion in your writing.
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This was by far my favorite bit in the poem:
Some open their skin
like a zipper,
pulled by the hands
of the razor,
to stay in blood instead
of thoughts
Overall, I think you did an excellent job conveying your feelings.
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I thought a lot about that bit, the imagery, so that means a lot to me.
Thanks ^^
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You're welcome. It's well-deserved. I look forward to reading more poems from you.
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I look forward to your comments
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Great thought and feeling put into this one, good job~!
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Decent...I like how you wrote it out. ^^
Good stuff
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I like how you creatively describe each different way people cope with tough times. Very good. But I think that the one about writing is a little skimpy compared to the rest of the stanzas: "Some disappear in their/
paper and pencil." Maybe it's just that I'm a writer, but I think that you could describe writing in a more detailed and interesting way (I like what you have so far, but maybe add to it?). Just an idea.
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Huh. I actually meant that more for drawing, which I don't do very often :/ Recently I've done doodles of fallen angels on my Geometry homework, but that's about it. I'll try to expand.
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Oh I see. Yeah you maybe should make it a little more clear that you're talking about drawing.
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When I get a chance
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