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Mitsuara β FIC: That One Time
Published: 2014-07-08 01:37:56 +0000 UTC; Views: 1630; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 4
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Rescue Bots don't get enough love. ΒI'm using this story as a test for when I start to upload a much longer story I'm working on, since the copy and paste upload thing is stupid. :I
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Omg when did this happen and why wasn't I a part of this???
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HEEEeeeeeeeyyyyyyy ^_ Β I JUST read this this morning only over on FFnet. Β XD
The WEIRD freaky part about this was LAST NIGHT I heard mice in my walls! Β It could have been the squirles... but its hard to tell sometimes... Β I think its funny becasue NOW I'm going to be thinking about ZOMBIE hamsters now when I hear them...
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I normally don't bother with PDF fics unless I have to, because they're a nightmare to read on dA's interface. Since this was Rescue Bots, I made an exception. I'm glad I did. I'm still giggling. Very cute dialog, and I love stories where something punches a teeny tiny hole in Heatwave's armor of skepticism.Β
Forgive me if this is too forward, but are you interested in constructive criticism on this piece? Non-premium folks can't turn critique on or off, so I thought I should ask.
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I'm so glad you like it! ^^ Β It was super fun to write.
Not at all, I'd love some.
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You may want to experiment with adding more description to your passages of dialog, and slipping in more details about the room they're in. It's really hard to do that with fanfic since we all kinda take the sets from the shows for granted, but if you do pull it off it'll really suck people in (more than this already does, that is).
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I'll be certain to keep that in mind. Β Thanks! ^^
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Wait... this is 4 pages? Hell no. Or not right now.Β
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FOUR PAGES OF AWESOMENESS
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stop replying to my comments, and start replying to my panics.
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QUIET. RESPOND TO MY NEXT NOTE
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I RESPONDED. Β NOW READ THE AWESOMENESS.
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STOP RESPONDING TO MT COMMENTS!
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REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAD
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REEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAD
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I've been listing off the ways to kill zombie hamsters. I read it, a while ago. then I started the "I'll squish you" thing
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XD Heatwave is the master zombie hunter.
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