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Description "FAITH - An AGMP Story" - a Doujinshi/Comic by =MiyaToriaka
FAITH's Betareader: ~NinthTale Status: BETA-READ COMPLETE
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Page 1 of the Prologue of the story
Have Fun!
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Story and Art by (c)=MiyaToriaka
All original Charas of the Story belong to (c) Satoshi Tajiri, PokΓ©mon Nintendo, Game Freak
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Comments: 443

drd190 [2012-02-01 11:40:43 +0000 UTC]

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this is intresting start to a comic i have read the next 2 pages but this was intresting about the detail. i have never seen as much detail in a chapter of someone elses comics than the detail here. but one thing in the first pannel it looks like the window is just floating somewhere in nothingess. this is a very intresting comic i think many would like if they read on plus u also did a good job at color and shading and it looks like it really happened because of the really great detail

overall great job.

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MiyaToriaka In reply to drd190 [2012-02-01 13:32:35 +0000 UTC]

Hi ^^

Thank you very much for your time and the honest critique. I have to agree, the window looks a little bit weird, also the panels are not in the right order. I tried to make it better in the next pages.
Thank you very much for reading FAITH. ^^

Yours
Miya β™₯

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Nyiana-sama [2009-05-03 02:35:04 +0000 UTC]

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Alright, let me start off by saying that I love your pictures. They are full of so much detail, and they're just so stunning. I'm even more impressed by the fact that it's all traditional art. e.deviantart.com/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)" /> Truly awesome. Plus Ash and Misty is my favorite Pokemon pairing, so I love this even more.

The one thing that I noticed right away, and kinda confused me a little bit, is the flow between the third and fourth panel. This comic is supposed to read left to right, correct? The third and fourth panels go opposite, right to left. So its a little bit difficult. I know it's difficult to get the panels the sizes that you want, but it may confuse readers a little bit. I know that I had to look twice.

The other thing that I noticed is the first panel. There isn't any background color with it. I don't know if it was supposed to be left white or not, but it kinda makes it seem like Misty's window is just floating in space. So maybe adding in some background color will help with that.

The third thing that I noticed, was the clouds. Clouds aren't bright white at night, not unless there's a bunch of annoying city lights around. Even then not really. Clouds usually blend with the night sky, and you can't really see them unless they're passing by the moon. So maybe try coloring them with similar colors to the sky.

Overall, this is a really amazing deviation. It's not that often you see comics fully colored, especially traditionally. It's really something, and I will enjoy reading it as it comes out. Keep up the amazing work. e.deviantart.com/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)" />

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MiyaToriaka In reply to Nyiana-sama [2009-05-03 02:53:20 +0000 UTC]

WOW O__O Totally WOW! This is a very helpful critique and I'm very thankful you took your time to write this. It really helps me a lot!
OK I try to answer some parts

The Panels: You're right. It was my mistake. Bad one Normally I completely do DΓ΄jinshis/Comics in European Style. But here I choose a "circle-system". Now thinking about it I don't know why I did it So it's right, it's a very bad mistake Sorry for that.

The first Panel: Nya I see - in the scann you can't see this correctly. You see, the window itself should be the first panel, but as I see it didn't turned out that well. On the original page you can see that much better.

The Clouds: Ou yeah clouds! I so hate them *sighs* With PC they are so easy and with pencils you only have to make one little mistake and they look totally different, but never as clouds. You're totally right. Actually I wanted them to be with the shooting star, it should've been that light it fulls everything arround it with light. I have to try, practise and learn so mcuh more

Thank you so mcuh fro the critique! as I said it really helped me a lot and I try to make it better next time *o*

Greez
Miya

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latiasfan5 [2019-01-16 04:04:26 +0000 UTC]

finally found this again

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MiyaToriaka In reply to latiasfan5 [2019-01-16 05:57:51 +0000 UTC]

Glad to hear you were searching for it.

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MockBirch684 [2018-11-18 04:51:22 +0000 UTC]

Insert Butterfly rift in the last panel.

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MockBirch684 In reply to MockBirch684 [2018-12-23 04:04:54 +0000 UTC]

No comments still.......... 🎀Hello darkness my old friend,.......

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Snowdog-zic [2015-10-17 11:22:10 +0000 UTC]

Really like your comic

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MiyaToriaka In reply to Snowdog-zic [2015-11-02 07:53:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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Snowdog-zic In reply to MiyaToriaka [2015-11-02 12:51:50 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome

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joselito04ph [2015-10-01 02:38:09 +0000 UTC]

Hi Miya I wanna tour permission that adspt this cΓ³mic fic a fanfic ir you can give me apermission and you hace a crΓ©dit.

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MiyaToriaka In reply to joselito04ph [2015-10-09 16:07:32 +0000 UTC]

Err, I hope I understand right: You want to do a Fanfic to the story? If so, you're free to do so. β™₯

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joselito04ph In reply to MiyaToriaka [2015-10-14 00:14:02 +0000 UTC]

Thanks is true me want make a Fic.

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ZuesKillerProduction [2015-08-08 23:20:07 +0000 UTC]

Symbolism. Good artwork. Things. Excitement.

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MiyaToriaka In reply to ZuesKillerProduction [2015-10-09 16:07:08 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a lot

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Winterstream [2014-10-22 11:31:08 +0000 UTC]

Ich hab den ganzen Doujinshi in einem Zug gelesen und muss sagen er ist wirklich super schΓΆn ^^
Auch die Zeichnungen gefallen mir sehr gut, ich freue mich auf weitere Arbeiten von dir.

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MiyaToriaka In reply to Winterstream [2014-10-23 09:16:13 +0000 UTC]

Wow, dankeschΓΆn, das freut mich wirklich sehr! ;///; β™₯

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oliviavt [2014-05-16 02:48:10 +0000 UTC]

Hey, i read it ALL 2 times, amazing job. Would you mind if i translate this awesome manga to spanish? I will give you credit indeed :3

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MiyaToriaka In reply to oliviavt [2014-05-25 20:35:47 +0000 UTC]

It has already two Spanish versions, but I won't mind if you wanted to translate it yourself.

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oliviavt In reply to MiyaToriaka [2014-05-27 22:35:01 +0000 UTC]

ok!

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hunterN05 [2014-03-24 01:48:30 +0000 UTC]

Another great start ad awesome work on this my friend ^-^

I like it, legit! ^^

Misty looks cute eue

NEXT PAGE I GO!

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MiyaToriaka In reply to hunterN05 [2014-04-03 05:27:46 +0000 UTC]

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hunterN05 In reply to MiyaToriaka [2014-04-03 07:31:58 +0000 UTC]

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ScarabsCorner [2013-01-03 23:33:56 +0000 UTC]

gonna be faving this whole story

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MiyaToriaka In reply to ScarabsCorner [2013-01-07 10:57:23 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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ScarabsCorner In reply to MiyaToriaka [2013-01-07 17:17:47 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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mckinnal [2012-10-29 21:41:36 +0000 UTC]

i just read the entire thing......it was so beautiful!!!!!

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MiyaToriaka In reply to mckinnal [2012-11-02 06:26:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a lot

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mckinnal In reply to MiyaToriaka [2012-11-02 22:14:47 +0000 UTC]

lols your welcome

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Sheikhni [2012-10-24 14:21:17 +0000 UTC]

Too cool. Just love the detail here, I'm gonna keep reading this

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MiyaToriaka In reply to Sheikhni [2012-10-26 04:56:11 +0000 UTC]

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Australian7 [2012-09-03 15:07:26 +0000 UTC]

Loved the entire story!! Thank You!!

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MiyaToriaka In reply to Australian7 [2012-09-04 07:01:03 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a lot

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Ernesto12z [2012-08-23 19:06:14 +0000 UTC]

Misty's Tears.

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MiyaToriaka In reply to Ernesto12z [2012-08-24 13:18:39 +0000 UTC]

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Hinata-Wolf77 [2012-08-22 02:59:29 +0000 UTC]

This is so cool.

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MiyaToriaka In reply to Hinata-Wolf77 [2012-08-24 13:18:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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Starlig [2012-07-16 00:29:06 +0000 UTC]

Cool.

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MiyaToriaka In reply to Starlig [2012-08-01 10:59:45 +0000 UTC]

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Starlig In reply to MiyaToriaka [2012-08-01 14:49:40 +0000 UTC]

Welcome

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SchabeofDoom [2012-06-21 07:41:38 +0000 UTC]

ahhh cool. ich kenn das von Animexx Da hab ich es zum ersten mal gelesen. ich mag die Idee sehr. Auch wenn ich mir aufgrund des alters der Protagonisten immer schwerlich vorstellen kann das sie sich lieben :/

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MiyaToriaka In reply to SchabeofDoom [2012-06-21 13:44:18 +0000 UTC]

Das kann ja auch jeder so sehen, wie er will

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church2550 [2012-06-17 04:13:42 +0000 UTC]

What Misty said is the same thing I keep wishing now that the love of my life is graduating and going to Newfoundland for her education..... only her name is Erin-chan

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MiyaToriaka In reply to church2550 [2012-06-18 05:22:11 +0000 UTC]

Great. Good luck with that

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church2550 In reply to MiyaToriaka [2012-06-18 07:37:36 +0000 UTC]

sarcasm...I'm guessing

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MiyaToriaka In reply to church2550 [2012-06-18 08:34:02 +0000 UTC]

Nope, it shouldn't O__Γ΄

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church2550 In reply to MiyaToriaka [2012-06-18 14:56:02 +0000 UTC]

it almost sounded like it, though

one of the many problems of text comments

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MiyaToriaka In reply to church2550 [2012-06-19 05:15:43 +0000 UTC]

Aha... Sure...

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Kershtoffer [2012-05-09 15:19:24 +0000 UTC]

not much to say... i liked it ;F

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