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mokmok07 — Over The Fantasy -Demo- PG 4
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Published: 2007-01-05 20:10:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 1061; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 28
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I'm sorry update late T_T plz don't bite me or eat me. Now i'm watching "LOST" i brought season 1 and 2 DVDs and i'm just keep watching!! nice drama!! anyways still the same if got any grammer mistake plz inform me or correct me. THK luv your guys ^3^ Chu"Link To:-
Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 1
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 2
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 3
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 4
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 5
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 7
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 8
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Did you read other 3 pages? so far understand?
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yeah i have and now i am wateing for the 5th one
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Yeas as you wish PG 5 is completed ^_^
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woot *gos to read the next page*
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Yeah just finished yeaterday PG 5
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yeah i seen that nice job but your grammer is a little off
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did there still any grammer mistake at pg 4? i ask this because i want make sure there no mistake and everyone were understand
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Now i hope anybody were understand why the guy in this Doujin is difference colour eyes ^_^
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I love the use of the tones here...beautiful work.
I did find a mistake in the grammar, however...
"Everyone thought those eyes will brought bad luck." It should be something like this:
"Everyone thought those eyes will bring bad luck."
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I knew that!! Oh he got me wrong T_T Thk by the way luv you ^3^ chu"
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Your page getting detailed, but some tone are unnessacesary too much.. IMO.
From all the 4 page, page 4 look pro-ish with all the bg added.
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Realy!!?? Uh oh got i dun know it =_='' I make better on next time ^_^ Thk ya!! ^3^ chu"
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"difference eyes" should be "different eyes" and "few days" should be "a few days". art work is amazing as usual.
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