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Published: 2007-01-13 21:21:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 872; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 12
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Finally finished this page in the midle of night T_T gonna crazy because i can't sleep if without finish this.I think this page must be a lot of grammer mistake, so plz help me !!
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Comments: 44
nice!! love all the tones...since I don't have and don't know how to use..practising it though...xD
storyline is interesting too nyoo..xD
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Realy !!?? Oh thank you ^3^ chu" ask your more your friends to read ^_^
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I'm stupid? T_T so far how do you think my manga does.
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There's alot of Loopholes tho @3@
The English leave it to Coffee to help you if you ask him just like Heist did,
Proportion of the overall characters and position is important, that's one of the loopholes which make ppl confused,
Story-board and scrip-writing need to be carefully planned coz it's one of the thing tat make ppl confused.. if they didn't actually put themselves into it.. which they normally did.. like at the end of the story they will be like huh? wat? hah? i don't understand?...so be careful lo :E
and about the stupid part? you not stupid and yyyeah so far.. not so good, to be franks hmmhmm ;^;
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and again there only 10 pages (maybe) and i'm bad on writting script T_T so this DEMO is let me pratic ^_^
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Ppl keep asking me the ending? but i had planned ^_^ u understand the overall story?
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yup messa understand it.. coz messa understand how it feels
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wahhh....far better than me leh~!!
Not bad...juz the text is alittle bit big...like stick with those bubble~
makes ppl wana look forward...coOL!!
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Realy!! Thank you!! ask more your friend to read
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Can't wait to see your drawings for the one I promsed to write for ya!
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But i had to rest a while T_T
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Yeah after i finish this, i'll draw your story ^_^
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This is really good...^_^ And so professional in my opinion...^_^
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Yeah thank you ^3^ chu" i realy happy that you understand this story, because i'm quite stupid on writhing script. Kurozawa tokitou is realy poor, because i make it and i'm evil muahahaha
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I do understand it and I love the story so far...^_^ The artwork is superb. Can't wait for the next page...^_^
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page 7 now is currenly in sketching. I'll do it faster ^_^ ask ur friend read my manga. Kiss u ^3^ chu"
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Awesome...^_^
And I will tell my friends to read this...^_^
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I think he will happy, because u know him ^_^ thank yoy ^3^ chu"
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I can say you done this comic perfectly mokmok! you can be a pro.
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Thank you sora-chan ^_^ actually i'm not so pro la. i'll update new page soon. feel free to read it ^_^
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Err. Spelling mistakes.... Laughing, not 'laughting'.
Some parts can be add more emotion feeling in there, like...
"Why, Why you're here?"
"You're just going to make another fool out of me, right?"
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You should think over some of the background tone you have just used, some weren't fit the perfect spot in it.
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Oh thank you heist ^3^ chu" i had edited some of the mistake, feel free to read it ^_^
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Hmm, I see you have edited some texts.
Still, there is a few dialogues seems very wrong... way in the speech.
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Mmm T_T my english is realy bad ahh gosh i hope somebody would like to help me
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You can ask Coffee Ping, he did my correction.
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Oh!
After reading the other pages, I finally get it! >w<
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I'm so happy that you understand me kiss y ^3^ chu"
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Maybe there 3 more page. so far understand me?
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