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Published: 2005-02-25 00:49:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 84; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Description
I am sitting here a littleafter 9
p.m.
I took a short walk to the
sidewalk and sat on
the concrete
The headlights passed ahead
Clear atmosphere
I am drowning in my hair smiling
to myself
because the perspective is so perfect.
Concrete stretches down, some orange cones
and cheap pillars to hold the overhang roof
of the stores barely anybody goes to
It's kind of like an old Western town
In the films I never watched, only heard about.
I feel perfectly peftect
after a couple minutes ago
before my walk
I leaned against a wall
and a board kept snapping back everytime I moved
the 30-40something smokers barely noticed
laughing outside the studio.
where A man called 1986 sat on a stool and played
his past to eager intellectual undergrounds
Reincarnated beats
80's have morphed into their idols.
Argyle, mustard yellow pants too short, self-conscious
hair, bashful smile of turtlenecked performers.
"We all know each other."
And so I felt
Comfortable.
in a surreal reality.
The Underground.
I hope nobody ever turns down this street
to find out
where I sit.
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Comments: 6
burton-chic [2005-03-16 23:05:14 +0000 UTC]
mmmm. i love the beats.. can you read this in my coffeehouse? i'm kidding, i don't have a coffeehouse. but if i did i'd want you to read it there. don't worry, i'd provide the backing jazz musicians.
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moonjava In reply to burton-chic [2005-03-18 02:26:51 +0000 UTC]
sure if you had a coffee house i'd read it there..the beats and everything are fascinating. dude, i just checked out some of your work it's amazing
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Athanasios [2005-02-25 05:24:57 +0000 UTC]
It's cool, but it seems kind of forced and wouldn't read well. Maybe just changing the length of the lines, lengthening them a little, would give it better flow.
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moonjava In reply to Athanasios [2005-02-28 17:56:46 +0000 UTC]
yeah..it would be kind of forced as a song, i meant not really a melodic song--more like a poem "song," like saying kind of singy...don't know what i'm saying anymore.
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