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Had this done for about a week and forgot about it, haha. Without further ado...Updated ref sheet for Elliot, since he desperately needed a new one that included his cat form. Download to see the sheet better.
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Elliot, once a cheerful and outgoing teenager, one day transformed into a dragon for a reason unknown to him. In fear, the people around him (including his family) attacked him until, finally, everyone was against him. A group who dedicates themselves to protecting the public tried to keep Elliot's existence a secret, all whilst trying to kill him. Elliot severely wounded the colonel in charge of his capture, but the man managed to slash Elliot's neck, creating a large scar. The harm Elliot inflicted on the colonel fueled the fear and hate against him, and finally he had no choice but to flee.
Once he was able to escape, he made his home in a seaside town in an abandoned cottage on an island away from the country he originated from. He is finally able to transform back into a human- after a few fumbled attempts turned him into a cat.
It wasn't long before he mastered these transformations, and they did come in handy. Because he could not show his human face in public, he relied on the cat form to find scraps of food from bins or steal from small stands in markets. Rarely he would use the dragon form to hunt for fish in the nearby ocean.
Elliot planned to continue this lifestyle in secret for as long as he was able, or die fighting to do so. He had no human contact for a year before one day he met a girl named Alexis Raynes, who found out his secret and was then on involved in the war between Elliot and the world.
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Gaaaaah, that sounds like an incredible story. D: He looks great, by the way! I need to practice my dragons more so I can draw him, too. XD
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Ahh... He looks awesome mate, really.
I was just wondering if the mark on his forehead (dragon form) is the same as before, that arrow shape? Or if it's just a single stripe now... The picture makes it a little hard to tell...
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It's just a stripe now, haha. A lot of people drew it wrong so I simplified it. xD
And it goes a bit better with his cat form, you know, with the stripes.
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Gah, silly people... It was on his last reference sheet and everything...
Honestly, that poor kitty wouldn't have to live off bin scraps. I would feed little Elliot if he wandered into my garden, yes indeed... As long as he doesn't mind being cuddled, because I'm afraid that's part of the deal :'D
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I know, I know. My characters always seem to be drawn slightly off. xD
He'd probably let you hug him... but he won't like it.
He needs to keep up the "good cat" act to get what he wants. He's quite manipulative, you see. ;D
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Ah, well people always try their best. I guess... it's hard to imagine your characters as anything other than you picture them, but it can be interesting to see different people's interpretations of them.
Ahh, so he's a tricky one, is he? O_o
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I never complain, though. I really appreciate what people do for me, haha. :'D
Ah, yes. After what he's been through, he had more than a right to hate the world he was born into.
I feel so bad for him... and I made him what he is! D:
I'm a terrible person. ;n;
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Of course you do, you are a completely wonderful person, after all.
Aww, but I wouldn't be mean to him, I just want to cuddle him a bit and feed him some tasty treats, and make sure he's okay.
Aww, nooo, don't feel bad! He'll find a little happiness in the end, right?
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D'aww, thank you! c':
Oh how he would love the tasty morsels of cat food you would give him, haha.
Let's just say that after many, many trials that wound both the body and soul, Elliot will eventually find happiness...
when I manage to get his story together and finally begin writing it, haha... I'm still not sure if it's worthy of being written out.
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Then you don't need to feel bad at all, mate. He'll get his happy ending.
Well, if it's anything like what I've read of yours so far, it is more than worthy of being written, trust me.
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Don't know just yet... I'm thinking his story might be a bit 2D.
I might get some second opinions on it, just so I know it'll be interesting. xD
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Well, that is a good idea, but I'm sure his story's really fine. It is your story after all, you talented author, you. ;D
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I've been thinking of maybe letting you in on my plans for his story. You've always given me great feedback, sooo
You wanna hear it?
I don't want to bore you... ;u;
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*reaches eager grabby hands out for this awesome story* Mate, I would love to!
Oh shuush, you never ever bore me, buddy~ I love reading your stories and ideas, they're so interesting and a hell of a lot of fun too!
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Okay, so, a lot of this isn't going to make sense (Elliot's story is based on a dream... again. xD), so don't mind any weird parts. I'm still trying to figure it out myself. Just let me know what you think so far. xD
So after he escapes to his little abandoned cottage near the sea, a girl (Alexis) follows his cat form but he thinks he successfully leads her away and returns. Too bad for him because the girl's smarter than he thinks and catches him in his human form. She says she knows who he is (and that he's a lot cuter as a cat... fun fact there. xD), but doesn't say much more.
Elliot pretty much decides that he'll have to kill her to keep her quiet, but he had never actually killed someone before, only harmed, so he hesitates. He tells Alexis to leave and never come back, but she sticks around.
It isn't until a few days later that Elliot get confused as to why she's still there. He constantly asks her to leave but she just insists on staying, to the point where she goes to the market, buys food, and cooks it in his house. A week or so after she arrived, Elliot (in cat form) notices some of the men who are out to look for and kill him moving around at the market. He returns to the cottage hoping they won't come across his hideout. And it seems like they don't.
Later that night the men force their way into the house, much to Elliot's surprise. They almost pin him down but he manages to transform in a dragon and throw them off. He feels an extra bit of weight on his back, and when he turns to throw the person off with his jaws, he notices it's Alexis clinging onto him. He bursts through the old door, the girl on his back, and propels himself off a cliff above the ocean to escape.
He tells Alexis he could drop her off anywhere she wanted along the coast, but she says they saw her face so they won't leave her alone. Not wanting the her to be harmed because of him, Elliot takes on the responsibility of protecting her... even if he detests the idea.
[insert other run ins with those people, who try to not only capture Elliot, but Alexis, too because they're accomplices. You get the idea. xD]
[Maybe up to year passes, still not sure on the exact details.]
[Also, something that may come in handy knowing: Elliot, when badly wounded, will transform into his cat form and pass out for unknown reasons]
Elliot and Alexis are split up during a fight with Public Defense (their temporary name for now. xD). They're in a block of abandoned warehouses in a harbour at the time. Public Defense as a whole group attack Elliot, to the point where he can hardly walk. He manages to barely escape, to somewhere close by. He's bleeding to death, and he knows it. He has no energy to fight, and regrets not being able to protect Alexis. He's in complete despair when Alexis enters the scene.
She tells Elliot that she was the daughter of the man in charge of Public Defense, the man who was the first person Elliot ever attacked and hospitalized. She continues to say she was undercover, to watch him and determine his weaknesses. But he didn't have any. She made it so he would want to protect her, thus giving him a weakness.
Elliot at first does not believe her, but she says otherwise. In the end, he asks if she would kill him. He thinks that if any death will let him keep his pride, then this will have to do. He tells her that he was glad to have finally been able to open up to someone after so long, and that even if it was all an act, he was happy that it all happened. That's when Alexis hits him across the head with a blunt object to finish him off.
Oh no, I didn't mean to go so into detail. Forgive me! ;n; But this also helped me get some key points down. xD
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Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh, nooooooooooooo! Elliot! Why must you toy with my heart like that! D:
gosh, I really really loved that, I wouldn't call it two-dimensional at all, it was beautiful, sad, sneaky and emotional... my heart honestly gave a little pang when I was reading that last paragraph, Elliot, noooooooo D':
I can imagine all of that time spent together, hiding and running away from the guards and things, you could build up their relationship so well during that time... gosh, I really love this and I want to see it written out now. That's really the sort of story I'd love to read, ahhhhhh
I love it, mate, I really really do... gosh... I don't know what to say now, you've made me a bit speechless with that ending there, I'll admit. Ah, I love it. I love your stories, I don't know how you do it, but they're wonderful
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I'm glad it doesn't sound boring, haha. I certainly do want to toy with Elliot's thoughts and feelings throughout the story, even though I feel terrible doing it.
Although it sounds terrible, I wanted Elliot to feel like he'd finally found something worth living for, only to have his world crumble before his eyes. I didn't add it in, but after Elliot tells Alexis about how he enjoyed their time together, and she doesn't reply, he get really upset and begins swearing and screaming at her, but also at himself as he was stupid enough to get close to anyone. He even asks a question (to no-one), which is "Why was I born if I was only going to suffer".
Elliot's story is about despair, in a nutshell. Nothing goes right, and if it does, it's false.
But... i'm not sure if I should end it there.
I have... ideas, but i'm not too sure...
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That was far from boring, my friend. Trust me ;D
Aww, well, yes, it is a terrible thing, but you shouldn't feel terrible for it. You want to show this fragile, corrupted side of human nature, and that's a perfectly okay thing to want to do. Sometimes, I think stories can be too happy and too upbeat, and a good tragedy now and then can be wonderfully refreshing, so I wouldn't worry about it at all
Oh? What sort of ideas? *eagerly leans closer* o_o
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:'D
Well, if the story ends there, it feels kind of unfinished. You never find out why Elliot transforms in the first place, but it really depends on how it's written in the end.
Remember how I said when he's badly wounded, he's transforms into a cat and passes out?
Alexis hits him across the head to knock him out, which triggers a transformation into his cat form. Since he's smaller, she successfully manages to smuggle him out of the area and treat him. She keeps a bloody scale from Elliot's dragon form and tells her father that she watched him fall into the ocean, dead, and sink to the bottom. He sends out a search party, but even he knows that sharks may have beaten them to the body, or it was taken away by the current.
Alexis treats Elliot until he finally awakes, still in cat form. He asks her (yes, he can speak while transformed) why he's still alive, and Alexis replies that it was in her own interest to do so. Elliot doesn't question her further, and they don't really speak for a while whilst Elliot recovers, Alexis does however tell him about how she lied about his death to her father, and how she had always planned to knock him out to turn him into a cat.
Elliot thanks her, reluctantly, but he does it.
When Elliot recovers he transforms into a dragon and flies around the island they're currently on to test his wings. When he lands, Alexis comes to ask if his wings were in working order, but he makes her stop talking. That's when a gryphon appears from the sky and lands close by. Elliot takes on a defensive posture to make the gryphon leave, but although it looks afraid, it stays.
It approaches them and tells them that his name is Oliver, and he is also a human who can transform. He also tells them that there are many more like him, all congregated secretly to avoid capture and death from normal humans. Elliot demands a explanation, but Oliver says that he must follow him, but leave Alexis behind. Elliot refuses, and says he will only go if Alexis can go as well. Oliver leaves to ask permission from the "leader" of the group, and when he returns he brings the news that they both can go.
When they reach the place (unsure of details right now), they meet the leader, a man who can transform into a phoenix, and he explains that "mythical creatures" once inhabited the world, but as human populations grew larger, they gradually began to disappear. In an attempt to stay alive, some creatures took on human forms to become a part of human society. Inevitably these creatures would have children with normal humans, and their genetics passed down through the generations, but many children born did not show signs of these genes. Some rare ones, however, could transform into their ancestors original forms, sometimes without warning.
Families of these people who could not control their transformations were outcasts, and there was many murders. The Public Defense was created for this reason.
The phoenix man also mentions that many people can only transform into one creature, and adds that Elliot not only has dragon in his ancestry, but shapeshifter as well (the cat). He despises the Public Defense, and has rallied these outcasts to wage war against them, and asks Elliot to aid him in his goal of destroying them.
Phew. Anyways, this is solely ideas for now. I just thought giving a reason for Elliot's transforming might be needed somewhere. We'll see. xD
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... whoa whoa whoa there... and you thought this story was BORING? O_O
gosh, this is awesome! I love all of it, the twists and turns, how I thought Alexis was good, then evil, but now good again. And ahhh, that's a clever way to explain the transformations!
gah, I really want to know what happens now, if Elliot joins the others and if they manage to take care of the Public Defense and make the land safe for both humans and creatures once more... or if there are MORE shocking twists and turns! I really don't know, but boy do I want to find out!
(also I might now love this gryphon, gosh, I really do just have a soft spot for the feathered guys :'D)
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Um, yes. lD
At first Alexis thought he was some kind of monster, but after the months of being with him, she realized he really is human. The stories he told her about his life before he transformed were so... human. She couldn't believe it, especially after her father had told her how dangerous Elliot really was.
So I guess you could say that she developed a little something for Elliot, without realizing it. And he did the same for her. Hence why he's so heartbroken when he found out she was against him.
After a discussion with Alexis, Elliot agrees to join their cause, but only if they don't harm anyone. The leader says that it's impossible, and the plan is kill everyone involved with Public Defense. Elliot says that not everyone in the organization deserves death, but rather they should talk with them and try to gain rights humanely, instead of like barbaric animals. Alexis tell them that she can show them the wherabouts of Public Defense's HQ, as it is currently hidden.
Phoenix considers this and agrees, telling his group that they will descend on Public Defense HQ for negotiations. What Elliot doesn't know is that Phoenix is using him and Alexis to find Public Defense, mainly to kill the main who founded it- Alexis' father. Alexis' father (we'll call him Peter for now) and Phoenix were once best friends, but when Phoenix transformed, Peter tried to kill him. When he failed, he formed Public Defense to find and destroy Phoenix, and in the process found that there were many people who could transform throughout the world and made it their goal to destroy them.
Phoenix believes that the only way to make the world better is the destroy Public Defense, but Elliot and Alexis think that will only bring more hatred.
When the day comes that they arrive at Public Defense HQ, Phoenix attacks the complex, much to the surprise of the group. He breaks in to search for Peter, and when he finds him, he tries to kill him. Elliot arrives on the scene (in dragon form) and tackles Phoenix, breaking through a nearby wall and out into the open. They take flight and a fire against fire battle begins. Alexis helps her father who is obviously confused at the current situation, but she tells him to trust Elliot like she does, and that he can make things right.
In the end Elliot wins, but they both fall from the sky and to the ground. They both change back into their human forms. Alexis runs to Elliot's side, and Peter approaches Phoenix who lay dying. Peter says to him that 'sorry' will not undo all he has done, and that his childhood with Phoenix were some of the best memories he had. Phoenix says that he wished they could always be friends, but his 'curse' stopped that from happening. Peter admits it was his fear and stupidity that led to all this, and even though it wouldn't help, he was sorry, a few tears rolling down his cheeks.
Phoenix dies there, and Peter walks over to a now awake Elliot, being held upright by Alexis. At Peter's approach, Elliot tries to back away from him, but is too weak. Peter frowns, and says he should never have treated those like Elliot like monsters, and that deep down he knew they were human, but his obsession with Phoenix clouded his mind. He says that isn't a good enough reason, and asks if it is possible for him to somehow repent. He offers a hand to Elliot and thanks him for saving his life. Elliot reluctantly accepts.
Surrounded by those cursed with transforming abilities, Peter lets them all know that Public Defense is disbanding, but a new organization will form- one that supports those with 'cursed' genes, and gives them a place to meet those like them, and learn how to control their transformations. All of this in honour of his friend Phoenix. Elliot decides to help him with his goal, and becomes a mentor to help the younger generation with the transformation abilities.
Annnnnnd, Elliot and Alexis share a sweet kiss at the end there~
So, what do you think? End it in tragedy? Or go from tragedy to bitter-sweet ending? :'D
(Oliver's a real cutie, haha. He had red hair and freckles, and in gryphon form he looks something like a red-shouldered kite with a puma back half.)
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Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, goodness gosh, I love it all
Ah, I really don't know, mate. It's lovely as a tragedy, but it's just as lovely with the turn around uplifting ending, and knowing you both would be beautifully written and a delight to read, so I'd say to just follow your heart and chose whichever you think it best? Choose the story that YOU would like to read. Would you prefer to read the heartbreaking tale of deception and despair? Or would you prefer the happy ending, that shows that all humans are capable of change, just for some, the change is emotional and mental (Alexis and her father both make the transition from enemy to friend), rather than physically changing into something else. The decision is ultimately up to you ;D
(and oh my gosh, there better be a kiss in that happy ending, they've earned it :'D)
Ahh... a red-shouldered kite? I don't think I've ever heard of one before... o_o
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So glad to have that all off my chest. :'D
I think that it would be better to make Elliot despise the world, but then have Alexis change him, so in the end he realizes that trusting someone can't be so bad. And of course he finds love and a lifetime companionship, of which Alexis gets from him as well. At the same time her father, who was so devoted to his goal, realizes he neglected being a dad and now spends time with his daughter.
I like to make all the characters earn a happy ending. Phoenix didn't get one, but he at least was able to speak with Peter once more, which was enough for him.
I just can't not add a little kiss in there, at least. Alexis will initiate it, though. I like to think Elliot would be just as surprised as the readers, but then he just... goes along with it. ;D
Gahhhh
I don't think I could end it with a tragedy. I just want Elliot to be happy, you know? So I think the extended ending would be better... but maybe seperate the stories so people think Elliot died.
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And believe me, I feel so honoured that I got to hear it. I love it!
I do like the happier ending too, because it has a little more character development, for Elliot and Alexis and a few other characters... and boy do they earn that happy ending, they go through a hell of a lot. o___o
Haha, of course ;D
Oh ho ho, you sneaky thing, you. Ahh, gosh that would be perfect. Everyone would be so upset at the tragedy then BAM, you show up with part 2 :'D
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I'm just crying on the inside because of your awesome feedback. It's like you're my editor, haha. I really appreciate you reading all that, I unintentionally added extra details throughout, so you could imagine what I was talking about. xD
Character development is a big thing for me. I like to justify "evil" character's motives, and not give the "I'm just evil because I can be" cliche reason.
Although I do have characters who are evil out of greed as well, but that's in Ito instead. ;D
I quite like surprises like that myself, so i'm guessing other people may as well. I not only mess with my characters, but the readers too. xP
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Hey, an awesome story idea deserves a bit of awesome feedback, right? And trust me when I say it was a pleasure to read ;D
Ahh, and that is always an important thing to take into consideration, so good on you!
I really love the idea of writing the two sections separately, so go for it! Be like Rodda, and mess with your reader's heads! :'D
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Thanks, bud!
That's right! The Rodda way! Messing with people's heads! C:<
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Anytime!
Good good good, we'll make a famous author of you yet ;D
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