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Published: 2008-01-09 07:14:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 237; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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The young man looked down over the wasteland below. The 18 stories seemed to stretch out before him, as if beckoning him down to the waiting street. He sat on the edge, watching his tears fall. He didn't know anymore how long he had sat here. Time no longer had meaning when he looked out at the world from his aching soul. He looked out over the city, a gray, desolate wasteland that only made him feel more alone. Looking out, he spotted the statue of an angel on the building across from him, and again his tears flowed anew as he was reminded of his love. His whole life he had been alone. He had been neglected and ignored by parents that pretended they loved him only as long as he would be perfect. He had been left behind by the ones around him who only saw him as a strange boy who didn't fit in. Even his brother and sister had forgotten about him, and resented him when they remembered his existance.
Then she came. He had reached out, and she had taken his hand. He called, and she came to him. He loved, and she loved him back. She had changed him. He felt alive for the first time. As if he had been renewed as something that had been worth the life breathed into him. He could ask, and he would recieve. He was needed, and he could give. He would be made happy, and in turn could make her happy. He found someone who saw what he could become, and in doing so, he found a way to show someone what he could be. He had meaning. He was something.
Then, as quickly as it came, it was gone. The rooms suddenly empty. The prescence suddenly faded. His heart suddenly empty again. He was alone again. Falling back into what he had been. He could feel his soul crying as it fell back into the silent, cold, hell that it had finally become free of. He began to wonder. Was he worth saving? Was he meant to have such a thing? Or would all the he gained be taken as quickly as she had? He didn't know. So now he was here.
He stood now. The tears continued to fall. He looked down once more, and he thought of her. All he wanted now was to hear those words again. The ones that had fulfilled him. Had cured the pain he had endured. The words he knew would never come again. He stared one last time around the city. Against his will, his mind would only call her name. Beg of her.
"Please, say it. Say it for me. I'm calling to you. I'm falling now. Please hurry. Say it and I'll leave all of this behind. Say it and I'll show everyone what I really am. Say it, and I'll be worth saving." With these thoughts, he spread his arms and leaned forward into the abyss awaiting him below.
Suddenly, a hand caught his arm, stopping his fall. Pulling him back from the edge. Turning him to face her. For a moment all he could do was stare. Then the tear came a final time, but this time with joy. She smiled up at him, reaching out to stroke his face. He leaned into her touch, feeling it's warmth. She smiled again.
"I love you." And he knew. It was real. She had saved him just by letting him know that he was worth saving. He smiled, and she drew him into her embrace. He kissed her softly, and was alive once more. The warmth of her kiss filled him, lifting him, as 18 stories below, his life ended.
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Comments: 11

Cute-Tomato [2010-12-29 22:10:17 +0000 UTC]

'Tis beautiful but in a sad and heart breaking way. You made me cry, dude! Seriously, you have a very powerful way of writing.

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InsanityShallRein [2008-04-16 04:37:32 +0000 UTC]

I was just browsing through random works when this one popped up and I must say I'm glad, yet sad that it did. This story, while short, is very beautifully written and conveys and amazing ammount of emotion in me, and judging from the above comments, in many others as well. While I don't know you, just from reading this story it makes me feel like I might understand your pain, going through something like this myself helps a little there. I just hope you're felling better now!

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OtherThanMe [2008-01-13 07:09:56 +0000 UTC]

I know all the hugs and chocolate in the world can't begin to heal something like that... But you can have my super-secret stash... Just in case.

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Multiminded In reply to OtherThanMe [2008-01-14 05:13:00 +0000 UTC]

Lol. It's fine now. The day was the only really rough time for me. I'm fine now and I just keep listening to the song, but if you're offering chocolate....

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Draco81013 [2008-01-09 19:45:30 +0000 UTC]

awwwwwwwwwwwwwww......... this makes me want to cry... i swear... waaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!
is so sad but well written... and for the other comments i noticed it's about u... and trust me, i think u r a really cool guy. And remember that u have a friend in me if u ever need one...

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Multiminded In reply to Draco81013 [2008-01-09 22:51:20 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Draco! This is really sweet. I'm sorry I made you cry. I didn't mean to! Anyway, thank you for the support. I really appreciate it.

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Draco81013 In reply to Multiminded [2008-01-09 22:54:46 +0000 UTC]

Yw... take care and stop worrying... enjoy every moment of ur life as it comes, good or bad they are all learning experiences and it's our job to actually learn from them...

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cosplayme [2008-01-09 16:50:43 +0000 UTC]

Ohhh, that is beautiful and sad, and I just want to grab you and hug you and pat you on the back and let you know.....

You are lucky, I know some people who love you, I include myself in that some people, you are wonderful and only a soul that has been touched by love could write so sweetly about it. And it's effect on you.

You are not strange, in a bad way, you hang out with Justin, Jen and Grandpa, they are strange, embrace your "strange-ness" with those who share it.
You guys are all nut, and that's what make you special. Most teenagers who think they are odd, are not odd or strange at all, they are true individuals.


I can't stand it when people try to make people be perfect, there was only one perfect soul that ever walked this world, and look what the imperfect people did to Him, major ( What is perfect, and when you reach perfection, will you be nailed to a cross?) rant over.

You are smart, talented,creative and a loyal friend...(and you leave dishes in the basement)lol, sorry had to add a bit of humor, hey, I could have said "I hope you learn how to use your special powers soon." lol

This truly is wonderful and it shows so much of your heart and soul. Great writing.

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Multiminded In reply to cosplayme [2008-01-09 22:53:25 +0000 UTC]

Thanks Cosplayme. All I have to say is HEY!!!! That was mean!






...I'll discover my powers one day... Lol.

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cosplayme In reply to Multiminded [2008-01-09 23:10:28 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome about the writing comments,

as for the ongoing joke about the dishes (that didn't really happen) and your powers(which did happen) it's to funny, mean, but soooo funny.

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sackermanmo [2008-01-09 07:24:43 +0000 UTC]

Multiminded, I don't know what to say. If I forget that knew her in real life, and if I forget that I know you in real life then this story is beautiful and sad. But it's bearable.

The problem is that I can't forget that I know her or you. And because of that, this story is beautiful and sad. But it isn't even remotely bearable. I remember the joy you had before she went away. I see every day the sadness of those memories. But I also see every day the new life that sparked into flaming wonder behind your eyes. Even though you lost her, you didn't lose that.

My heart is breaking right now, because you are sad and I care so much about you. But it's also breaking to know that you have such sheer talent and through that talent, you can help others to see and feel what you see and feel. It is also breaking with joy that you are here, and more alive than ever because you opened yourself to her. I owe her a lot. Those of us who love you... we all owe her a lot.

You are a wonder to behold; you truly are.

I love you and I believe in you!

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