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Published: 2017-02-17 20:06:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 1252; Favourites: 55; Downloads: 0
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Description Second rite for Star for becoming alpha

Your Tokota is mysteriously stranded in foreign territory, be it another part of Tokotna or some place even more exotic/foreign, such as a poacher's den, a zoo or a desert on the other side of the globe. They must discover a way to either survive in their new surroundings or find their way home.

''The tokota gently trotted away in the empty streets. The white raven named Ravn flew ahed and scouted from time to time, but had now set itself in front of Myr and rested it's head under it's wings. Birds looked funny sleeping, Myr mused for herself. There weren't really anywhere they could rest; apart from the hungry stalking stray dogs that lurked after them, resting on these cobblestones seemed a bad idea, a great place for catching a cold though. The sun was on it’s way down and Myr’s sweaty clothes was slowly but surely becoming more of a death trap as the wet cloth stole warmth from her instead of keeping it in, as cloth was supposed to do. But there was nothing that could be done about that, when she had awoken, she had expected to see the snowy plains were she had set up camp, but instead a forest of stones and weird buildings had met her eyes instead. There she had found a bewildered female tokota and Ravn. And no clothes. Except her basic tunic and breeches, some old and patchy boots and the sling she used to keep her hunting rifle attached to. She had scowled at that, whoever that had brought her here, had a wicked sense of humor. In addition there had been a cloak hanging on one of the molded poles that supposedly were supposed to keep you from falling into the human made river. The cloak itself looked even older than the boots or even the buildings that surrounded her; it looked like it might just fall apart from her simply looking at it. Regardless, she had taken it with her, and now, with the temperature dropping alarmingly fast, she just couldn’t find herself complaining just as much about the wretched smell as she had earlier. Myr winced as her head had nodded; she had apparently snoozed off for the hundredth time, but the thought of letting the big half wolf half bear breed lead the way was disturbing, she wasn’t exactly known for her sense of direction. Stars head were drooping as well, but it looked like she thrived better now that it were getting colder, the big female had an impressive amount of hair, after all. Her name Star didn’t come from the fact that she could lead the way, and her fur didn’t shine brilliantly either, but on her forehead a star shaped white form of sorts had shown itself a couple of weeks after she had been born. The memories made Myr smile, she remembered when she had painted the green markings on her face and left forefoot; a circle around her eye and a shield rune on her leg. They were so far from home now. The howling from behind them were getting louder, and Myr quietly dragged Stars head towards on of the other paths that were before them, not the one clear from strays, but one that had a couple of heads gnarling towards the small company. Like hell she’d let them lead her into a trap. Not that it looked like the had the courage or strength to face off against Star though, because they whimpered and ran when they came trotting towards them.’’

Import:
Bonuses:
    • Optional: +10 for somehow including your Tokota's RoD companion in full body.
    • Optional: +10 for correct setting. You can read more about the various areas of Tokotna here.
    • Optional: +10 for including a handler.
    • Optional: +10 for a short story of at least 500 words. For literature entries, this bonus will be awarded for at least 500 extra words.
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Comments: 12

Greyvenn [2017-02-25 02:31:23 +0000 UTC]

You like the Gentlemen Bastards series too!? I just read it a few months ago, and I LOVE it! Do you have any other good fantasy recommendations? 

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Myrfivel In reply to Greyvenn [2017-02-25 13:43:33 +0000 UTC]

OMG A GENTLEMAN BASTARD FRIEND!!! I LOVE the series!! Can't wait until the 4th book is published!
Hmm I'd recommend the name of the wind, but I know you have read them hahaha
But I STRONGLY recommend Prince of Thorns and The Deed of Paksenarrion I absolutely love those books, and especially the former! (Also recommend Guide to the Galaxy and Moby Dick haha)

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Greyvenn In reply to Myrfivel [2017-02-26 03:16:48 +0000 UTC]

I know (': I read them all super fast and regretted it once I reached the end of Republic of Thieves. I really can't wait! (The Falconer!! The Prophesy!! AHHH)

also Ooo I haven't heard of those! I'll be sure to give them a try. Thanks for the recommendations!

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Myrfivel In reply to Greyvenn [2017-02-27 12:16:09 +0000 UTC]

Right!! ;u; I heard talk ablot it coming out late this year or early in 2018

You are welcome! Tell me what you think of them when you have read them one day!!

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Cuteorangedrawing [2017-02-18 18:28:16 +0000 UTC]

THIS IS AMAZING

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Myrfivel In reply to Cuteorangedrawing [2017-02-19 19:49:00 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!!! (Btw can I ask a favor? What could make this picture better? It's easier for the viewer than the maker to find flaws :3)

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Cuteorangedrawing In reply to Myrfivel [2017-02-20 08:50:46 +0000 UTC]

1. The background.

I love how you managed to make the background look so realistic! Tough I am little curios, why there are so many black lines? I can see that some of them are supposed to make some details, but some of them is a little bit weird. 

2. The characters

I love how you shaded them, but I would love to is the characters a bit sharper, if you know what I mean. 

But overall I love the drawing! 

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Myrfivel In reply to Cuteorangedrawing [2017-02-20 16:48:23 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha ja the weird black lines is just me being lazy and not erasing them from the sketch (I'll erase them next time lol)
I get it!!
Thank you, those feebacks really helped!!

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Cuteorangedrawing In reply to Myrfivel [2017-02-21 08:58:09 +0000 UTC]

You are welcome honey! <3

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CupcakeSnake [2017-02-18 18:18:04 +0000 UTC]

GOODJOB

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CupcakeSnake [2017-02-18 18:17:59 +0000 UTC]

That's so cool

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Myrfivel In reply to CupcakeSnake [2017-02-19 19:49:18 +0000 UTC]

Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuu

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