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.lavender smiles
with fraudulent teeth
tossing
with fickle fingers
pixelized gravity
in fibonacci
deaths
.
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sometimes
you just feel like
smashing something
beautiful.
especially
orthodontia.
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almost... seem like you were on the right track...but derailed into yourself... which is ok if you write poetry only for yourself... but who does that thesedays?...
pretty words.
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i was afraid the abstraction here was too too much.
these words weren't intended to be simply pretty [though i did think they were,
if i may say so myself].
i had hoped i didn't sacrifice understandibility[is that a word?] for aesthetics.
though, by the general opinion, i can tell i did.
and i do hope i didn't write this for myself.
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When I can get the general idea--but not fully realize it--the writing presents a challenge to me. Thanks for the challenge. I know this from somewhere.
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Figuratively. Meaning, this is something I've observed in my daily life. But I can't put my finger on it.
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Interesting..
And it made me actually get off of my ass and do some research. I'm not usually into short poetry, but this was bearable in the most pleasurable form.
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i'm glad to hear that.
research is good.
'bearable'?
i guess i could not ask for much more.
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Not from me, anyway. I'm a bit picky with my taste.
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haha,
thank you.
'dear god'
is the best of a reaction
i could expect.
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Fibonacci deaths absolutely makes sense, if one has any concept of the meaning of the word. I went and reasearched them to understand the concept better, and found my explanation at [link]
Lovely work, very minimalistic, but still emotionally FULL.
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This says nothing to me. It's interesting to read because you've combined some fascinating words... Although fibonacci deaths is super fun to say, it means nothing. I keep trying to think "Ok, Fibonacci numbers... uhm... what? I'm confused."
This honestly feels like a lot of things that you thought sounded cool so you wrote them all up together.
On the positive side, you have a very imaginative way of using words, and I would love to see that word choice put to use on a more thought driven piece.
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I, too, enjoy the idea of "fibonacci deaths".
My love of short poetry enhances my enjoyment that much more.
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wow sorority hell you nailed it on the head didnt you? daddy's wallet and mommy's looks.. bah... great read!
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great rhythm to this poem.
pixelized gravity
in fibonacci
deaths
unconventional and provocative word choice.
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