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The Fault in my ReflectionBy R.J. Shewmake
If I looked in a mirror,
What would I see?
All the more clearer,
The fault that is me.
If I broke it like a heart,
What would I feel?
The painfully made art,
My “Achilles Heel”.
Shattered shards of glass,
To each hold my reflection.
Trying to surpass,
I’m opposed to perfection.
If I gleamed at myself,
What would I think?
A lost book on a shelf,
Or a tune out of sync?
If I gazed at a blade,
What would I say?
The Heart or the Spade,
My reflection I will slay.
If I stared at my blood,
What would I be?
A stone in a flood,
Or perhaps a useless key?
If I looked through a window,
Would I be free?
Released from my bestow,
To be a new me.
And so the mirror is gone,
And so has what I was.
Tomorrow’s new dawn,
Awaken through my applause.
Comments: 9
it didn'tstrike me as suicidal, just someone unhappy about themself, their life, what they do and say. you're not alone there.
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I thought it was you. Plain and simple. It's a beautifully written.
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It didn't strike me as a suicidal poem, either. It just seemed like they judged themselves, and really didn't like what they saw, so they fixed it. The last stanza especially, "and so the mirror is gone, and so what I was." That implies a change, not so much death. Like the way the person was is gone and a change is made. "tomorrow's new dawn." Well, that's like saying tomorrow's a new day, so it's perfect for change, you know?
That was how I interpreted it, so don't worry. It really doesn't sound like a suicidal poem.
It was really wonderful. I definitely like this poem. ^_^
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It didn't sound like suicide. It honestly surprised me when you said that's what "I'd" think from reading it. I just saw a general unhappiness with one's self. An urge to purge, so to say. I've felt like that many many times. But I realized the more I tried to be better than what I saw in myself, the less of myself I was. And that just made me unhappier. Then I tried to just be me, and then "OMG" Jerry fell in love with what he saw! Gonked seems to care deeply for you, so you should be pleased that someone cares you exist. So long as someone cares, your life is worthwhile. You can relax and be yourself. It's impossible to make EVERYONE happy, so just try to make the people you care about happy and it will be enough.
About the poem- it's VERY well done, it flows, it's pretty, and it makes sense. It's not just a jumble of pretty or depressing words. No wonder you were accepted into that poetry contest. ^_^
I'm here for you 
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That's actually some interesting advice, and I guess I never really saw it from that point of view. Maybe I am trying too hard to be better than what I am. I guess it's worth a shot, I don't really have much to loose.
And thank you. I was quite pleased with the end result.
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*smiles* If you try to be what you are not, you are lying to yourself and to everyone around you. You end up like *gasp* the popular kids, who don't have any REAL friends. ^_^ Glad I could help! I was thinking about volunteering for Teen Hotline because I do this kind of thing alot with my friends. Teen Hotline is for teens to call in anonymously about problems (such as drugs, bf/gf trouble, sex (I think), abuse, etc) to just talk. It's good to talk to someone that can accept you for what you are or for what you've done. I'm here to talk to. ^_^
BTW- THANK YOU FOR THE ADD TO YOUR FRIENDS LIST!!!
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