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Name: Nyx Nowa
Age: 312 (Appears to be 25)
Sex: Female
Species: Shinigami
Rank: 6th Division Captain (+ One of two leaders of the Gotei 13 squad Hollow Cavalry)
Height: 6´0 - normal figure
Eyes: Stormy sea blue
Hair: Red + white strand (Messy hairstyle, 2 long braids, 6 strands caught up by black kenseikan looking thick rubber bands)
Appearance: She looks quite young. She had long crimson hair but cut it after gaining the position of Captain, leaving two long braids (one thicker than the other)as a memory of her past life. She also wears the black rubber "kenseikan" as a tribute to the previous captain Kuchiki Byakuya. She has black line marks under her eyes going vertical down her cheeks. It´s kind of a sign she shares with her twin brother Hyperion. She wears a long black sleeve on the right arm helping her to maneuver with the sword easier. While the left arm is covered by armor made of a special titanium blend so it isn't heavy but still tough. The upper part of the armor consist of three parts. The lower parts are simple armor, but the upper one is a kind of arm bracelet that holds the captain haori. She never wears the captains haori not even to captain meetings. She doesn't wear basic shihaksho or hakama either as the other members of the Gotei 13 do. Instead she wears a tight swimsuit like black dress with a collar going up to her neck. There is a place going from under her belly button up to her breasts that is almost naked only a thin fabric with a pattern so the skin can breathe. The same goes with the small panties like part at her sides.
She wears armor on her legs as well. It consist of three parts, the upper with the same pattern part as the thin fabric on her belly. The rest of armor is crimson red and shiny. She wears simple black boots with no heel so she won't harm the hollows while riding. (Funny no harm to the hollows ne?)
Characteristics
Nyx ought to be a third seat in sixth division but after the disappearances of the previous Captain and Lieutenant into Hueco Mundo she took his place and her brother as the fourth seat took the place of Lieutenant. She is calm most of the time but can have her moments of emotion. She likes drinking sake with friends but once or twice a month. When it comes to Hyperion she can act as a typical older sister, she is only older by a minute.
During the time she worked as the third seat she was a careless rebel with no intentions of ever being normal. She suffered the same thing as her brother did. After gaining Shikai she went crazy and doesn't even remember it. Upon gaining Bankai it got better, but under pressure or strong emotions it sometimes still happen to her.
After the disappearance, she as the new Captain, founded a group of strong individuals known as The Hollow Riders. She couldn't bear the lost of her beloved Captain Byakuya Kuchiki and so with a help of Technical Bureau she developed modified hollows. They look like hollows but they are missing the hole and behavior. These hollow don't have the urge of killing and consume reishi only from non living things. Nyx's favorite Hollow is called Angelica (the same as the horse from her previous life, she was a rodeo rider). Angelica is absolutely obedient and loyal but has her weakness and that´s Hyperion. She is often jealous of people around him and also is quite overprotective of him.
The group of Hollow Riders with the permission of the Sotaicho often make trips to Hueco Mundo as to make sure the balance is in it´s best, but for Nyx it´s also an opportunity to search for her lost captain. She often disappears for a long time and then appears again as she makes trips on her own. While on her own secret trip she never wears a haori so she is less visible to residents of Hueco Mundo. Her squad and group is used to this kind of behavior.
She loves poking fun at people when in a good mood and that is the sign that she's in good mood. When She is in really bad mood she is unusually silent and glares a lot.
Abilities
Kido:
She is a strong Kido user and is capable of using even the more difficult larger numbers. She doesn't use it often though.
Zanjustsu & Hakuda:
Unpredictable, swift, and nearly unbeatable when in combo with Angelica or Hype
Specializes in jumps and kicks, much as TaeKwonDo in the real world.
Use of the zanpakuto:
She posses two kinds of strength with her zanpakuto. Agility with the right hand that has no armor and the strength goes for the left hand with armor on. She often switches hands in order to defend or attack.
Shunpo:
Weaker than her brother but basically the same level as stronger lieutenants. The weakest among captains. She helps herself by using Angelica. Her shunpo skill gets better in Bankai.
Zanpakuto:
Name: Venom
Long katana with dark metallic blade. The zanpakuto is missing the cross guard of the weapon. The simplest type of katana having only a blade and the grip part. The grip part is a red and black color combination. At the end of the hilt two strap like pendants can be found.
Shikai:
Release Phrase: Dokueki Zuruzurususumu (Slither, Venom!)
As Senbonzakura had a strong influence of Nyx´s zanpakuto development her shikai is quite similar. After calling the release phrase a green light aura appears the blade then disappears and transforms into green drops of venom circling around Nyx making it difficult for the opponent to get near. She also has ability to change a type of the venom according to upper release phrase. (Snake venom, platypus venom, even some types of chemicals like vitriol acid)
Bankai:
Release Phrase: Doukei Seidai (Grand Venom)
When activating bankai a huge basilisk with no teeth, but with a skin able to shoot long thin needles full of deadly poison appears. It looks like the Green Bamboo Snake, which is extremely poisonous, invisible in it´s surroundings as it can merge with it by creating a mimicry. Nyx and only few close friends of hers have the antidote for the unique venom.
Zanpakuto spirit:
Venom is a tall, even taller than Nyx, slim but well built young man with hair similar to the gorgon Medusa. The bright green strands looking like a snake tails are set up in a high ponytail that goes up to his waist. He has Black yellow eyes with thin snake like pupils. He doesn't have legs but the lower part of his body is formed into a huge long snake tail also bright green with some black and yellow stripes here and there. His torso is always naked so the well built but slim figure comes out nicely. He has a big tattoo of a moon with one star on his left part of chest as a tribute to his master Nyx (Nyx means goddess of night). The only thing he wears is similar armor as Nyx wears on the lower part of the arm (elbow down) but his are silver green yellow.
Venom is loyal but can be tease He often encircles Nyx with his tail claiming her his. He's a cocky and a bit arrogant womanizer and macho.But as soon as he knows the person better he becomes a really loud big mouthed rascal. His hobby is imitating others. The only thing that can´t be imitated by him are the leg actions which really pisses him of. (If you want to piss him of ask him for step dance)
When angry he can call the acid rain on his own and also shoot the needles from his fingertips.
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Comments: 101
NyRiam In reply to ??? [2012-04-23 08:28:17 +0000 UTC]
Thank you Blazey....I guess I didn´t even think I would get this high rating from you there surely are mistakes and I have to thank ym dear friend who made grammar corections ...but thank you really much
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TheBlazeKagayaku In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-23 19:47:55 +0000 UTC]
Just putting out my thoughts on this written profile, congrats bud seems a lot of others agree with my critique as well
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NyRiam In reply to TheBlazeKagayaku [2012-04-24 08:40:18 +0000 UTC]
YEah I see that very interesting
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TheBlazeKagayaku In reply to Amadalia [2012-04-23 19:48:22 +0000 UTC]
I knew you'd see things as i did, a good oc for what its worth
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SilenceIzumi [2012-04-22 06:49:44 +0000 UTC]
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Critique: I'll go down on the order from your app, etc. Though, you ought to get a proofreader, as your spelling is a bit mangled you seem to cut off the first letter of your words quite a bit. *I'd be willing to give you a bit of help with this sometime.*
As per the rank, if the captain was lost... unless she passed the actual captains exam, she'd only be an acting captain much like the lieutenants were in the cannon series. So, something to mention or clear up? As for the 'titanium' armor, you could simply say another metal as the bleachverse does have a few created metals/stones. IE Sekiseki stone. Depending if she's semi-cannon line, or original where Yamamoto isn't the CC really alters the Haori aspect, If you keep her/have her pass the exam. As Yamamoto punished Kenpachi/Byakuya for losing theres... so, she'd have to wear it to meetings or he'd kill her.
Shikai.. is interesting? The ability to encircle yourself with venom/even change the properties of venom, etc. Though, perhaps having it be her own unique type of venom and just have it alter by different release phrases. Like, a skill/name for different effects.. instead of saying "Snake" etc, as.. theres a large variety of poisons available.. you might be better off saying something for Paralitc effects, numbing, all sorts of things.
Bankai: A bit influenced by Renji's in her insane state I see...Not a bad thing though. The 'melting' aspect of the sane state is a bit... over powered, it would have to be some kind of gradual or semi-gradual melting. I'd imagine it would affect certain barriers too? If its just some kind of organic melting than its completely nerfed by a barrier so a Kido user for an enemy ruins the entire thing... also, A high level of hierro might be able to defend it partially, etc...
The spirit can.. call needles/acid in only his own realm, or even outside? Etc? A spirit that can affect the outside world on its own.. is fairly unheard of in that kind of a degree @_@..
Hope.. my critique helps and isn't too cruel?
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SilenceIzumi In reply to SilenceIzumi [2012-04-22 09:13:54 +0000 UTC]
Ah, well, Just slow things down... I get how you feel with wanting things uploaded, as I read through there were plenty of spelling errors. I understood it all, simply because the brains a magical thing, but slowing things down and proofreading is a real good thing to do. Though, I see your not.. from England/USA, so any amount of English at all is wonderful.
Glad you liked the snake venom thing at least. The Haori is what makes a captain a captain, even if she doesn't like it.. for meetings I'd imagine she'd have to wear it or deal with the unending yelling from the Commander.
The Rain is a nice enough idea, my Water Zanpakutou deals with Rain/Water bullets too, but just going "Kills everyone and melts them" Isn't exactly a good thing. The more descriptive you are the less ridiculously Godmode it will seem.
And, Ah.. your talking about the Beast Tales arc, where the spirits came out... GOTCHA.
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NyRiam In reply to SilenceIzumi [2012-04-22 09:06:35 +0000 UTC]
But thank you anyway I appreciate it a lot I shall correct some things yet
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NyRiam In reply to SilenceIzumi [2012-04-22 09:06:04 +0000 UTC]
Well Yeah I get all of this...some words for my defence..
I wrote my totaly first OC sheet and I really messed up my imagination to get this out And about the spelling...yeah I have problems with it sometimes because I write quickly and sometimes switch a letter or forget it....also I wrote this at about 1 am so I was friggin tired and wanted to have it ASAP
I accept the thing with the snake venom...It´s a good idea. About the Haori....I accept the Sotaicho but not canon....I used some canon characters but I changed some...I wouldn´t like the jiji to stick his nose to everything. And yeah I forgot to mention that but surely she was at the exam.
About the zanpakuto part...well the acid rain is the first thing that came up and of course there will be more things about that I just updated the really neccesairy things...
And about spirit...well when for example Senbonzakura came out he was able to perform shikai, bankai,....that s what I meant
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bleachlover64 [2012-04-21 23:24:28 +0000 UTC]
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I love how you made it fight into a story and how many details you use to help the reader imagine what she's like. Good way of not making her a Mary-sue. The character over all is extremely well done. I hope to see much more fan art of this character and a story to come! Good luck with the rest of your ideas. By the way your drawing style is amazing and hope to see much more art from you. I love your originality is great I haven't seen any other characters like her. You are an amazing artist.
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NyRiam In reply to bleachlover64 [2012-04-21 23:42:07 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much I really appreciate all your words
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Toshiro-Hitsugaya-31 [2012-05-04 14:55:11 +0000 UTC]
wow shes amazing! hmm wonder if one of my characters could make it as a hollow rider.....
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NyRiam In reply to Toshiro-Hitsugaya-31 [2012-05-04 20:00:33 +0000 UTC]
No probelm...join the group The Hollow riders follow the conditions of creating a Hollow rider also the rules and you´re in if any questions just ask me or cofounders
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dragonofthesand [2012-04-22 22:21:23 +0000 UTC]
Lol she's definitely one bad ass character. I'd love to have an OC who's a hollow rider too xD
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NyRiam In reply to dragonofthesand [2012-04-23 08:32:02 +0000 UTC]
Well after developing my character I can do a possible thing that I´ll do a contest of hollow riders team. dunno how but it just popped out in my mind
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J2Wolf [2012-04-22 05:48:39 +0000 UTC]
..... I am at loss for words, why? Because that character is KICKASS!!!! XD YOu have made one fabulous OC who's info so far makes her quite the heroine not to mention not a Mary-Sue. She is very stunning and quite talened not to mention she doesn't look half-bad I like your description on how her sword is and how he looks :3 he sounds adorable! <-- I am aware how weird that statement sounds
I hope to see more info and fics of her and her sibling in the future. ja ne!
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NyRiam In reply to J2Wolf [2012-04-22 09:14:12 +0000 UTC]
No problem I probably won´t write the fics...that´s not my piece of cake
but I shall try
thank you deat
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J2Wolf In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-26 23:13:34 +0000 UTC]
lol hmmm if and when I can I might do one for you, that is if you want me to. I can understand if you don't want me too since she is yours XD she's pretty awesome if I do say so myself :3
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NyRiam In reply to J2Wolf [2012-04-26 23:23:59 +0000 UTC]
It´s not that I would like you to write...it´s just I don´t want them to be in it yet... maybe after I get whole idea of it I can try something out
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J2Wolf In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-27 00:24:50 +0000 UTC]
lol that's cool, the original creator should always get the swing of things first before trying anything esle out XD I can't wait to see what you'll write about them besides their OC sheets :3
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NyRiam In reply to J2Wolf [2012-04-27 00:34:13 +0000 UTC]
Well I´m not planing out anything yet but maybe someday
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J2Wolf In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-28 00:38:53 +0000 UTC]
lol okay XD someday can be anyday and anyday can be everyday.... and I have no idea where I was going with this :3
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Bulldozer1231 [2012-04-22 05:14:45 +0000 UTC]
Impressive. ^^ I likhis character a lot. Its different from what Ive seen before.
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NyRiam In reply to Bulldozer1231 [2012-04-22 09:13:05 +0000 UTC]
I tried my best...but still it has some mistakes to it
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Bulldozer1231 In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-22 14:44:11 +0000 UTC]
I see some typos here and there, but that can be fixed. Lol The picture looks great and the profile is good overall.. ^^
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NyRiam In reply to Bulldozer1231 [2012-04-22 17:28:33 +0000 UTC]
A friend of mine repaired it a bit
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Bulldozer1231 In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-22 20:29:42 +0000 UTC]
That great. ^^ Its nice of them to do that for you.
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NyRiam In reply to Bulldozer1231 [2012-04-22 20:42:08 +0000 UTC]
Yeah...I really appreciate it
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TheBlazeKagayaku [2012-04-22 04:24:18 +0000 UTC]
Omg, talk about a kickass oc! Nyx is beautiful yet deadly as hell! i love the whole history and the explination behind her hollow calvary, ex. Angelica!
Great descriptions and detail on Nyx. thanks for posting bud
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NyRiam In reply to TheBlazeKagayaku [2012-04-22 09:10:55 +0000 UTC]
No problem...It toook about 2 hours of my precious sleep but it was worth
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TheBlazeKagayaku In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-22 16:47:07 +0000 UTC]
Well its very well written, described and totally pro! i love it bud
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TheBlazeKagayaku In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-22 16:52:32 +0000 UTC]
Lol now im pumped to see Hyperion
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NyRiam In reply to knightblood [2012-04-22 09:09:59 +0000 UTC]
Nyx- stick the ma´am somewhere and let´s grabb some drink
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knightblood In reply to NyRiam [2012-04-22 18:59:57 +0000 UTC]
Knight- *grins* Alright, then
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