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OfLesserBeasts — Judgement Day
Published: 2011-05-12 07:11:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 72; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 0
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Blood trails down my wallsSlowly, in all of finality
Polaroids projected over the red matter
Showing memories in past sense
Given light by the heat of new developments
Faces smiling unknowingly, unready
People that I loved, who loved me
Victims of my isolation, of my slipping mind
Every day I waited, every night I thought
Inching closer to conclusions
That would bring suffering
That would bring chaos
In the perfect little worlds
I convinced myself I hated
And why did I let them bleed out?
Reaching for me, reaching for sympathy
Despite what I had done to them
There were no screams of fear, only agony
I know I could've made it quick
I could've ended their misery
But I didn't
Reflecting on the monster
The newspapers say I am
I feel unjustified
And in the cracks that were stained red
And the Pollock paintings on the wall
I see life running away from me
Pure life, innocence
Do I snuff it out or am I unworthy?
And I still sit, sit
Shuffling through the albums
Rocking, rocking
Rewriting my questions to God
And believe me
I never answer
Comments: 9
Well for me writing is a passion but it takes me time to find the right words and construct them in such a way that it flows and still conveys the meaning that I had in mind. If you can write like this in minutes than I am not only in awe but highly jealous.
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Honestly, I think I'm more envious of you. When I start to write something, it's based on what I'm feeling at that exact moment. If I go back and try to make it better later, I just reach a block and nothing flows for me. I have to get everything out at once or it's lost. That's why a lot of the things I write shift as it goes along instead of maintaining the same feel throughout-- it's because that moment of focus is leaving me. I would like to be able to write poetry and songs with as much time as I need, but that's just not how I operate unfortunately.
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Well I think this is one of those grass is always greener type things. I have only sat down and finished something I was writing in one day a handful of times. I have quite a few things im writing right now that I only have a little bit done on. I would like to write songs but im musically retarded and dont know how to. Im hoping to take some guitar classes and try and remedy that situation. You might try and take some creative writing classes and that might help you write some more contemplative or fixed poetry which could help you take your time. Just a thought.
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Eh, possibly. I guess I just never thought of making that much of an effort toward writing. I mean, I love doing it, but it was always just a hobby that helps me get my feelings out-- much like with my music. As for writing songs, it's just something that can't be forced. I usually write songs by the same way that I write poetry, only I'm experimenting on my bass or acoustic guitar. If I come up with an interesting bassline or riff, the words will generally start pouring out. You're using the same parts of your brain as with poetry, and music sometimes helps because it unlocks the doors of your mind. Half of my poetry is written while I'm playing an instrument anyway. It's not until I'm halfway finished that it sounds good as a poem but not as a song.
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Well I cant speak on writing songs yet but hopefully someday. I do wood working and welding as a hobby but I took classes to get better so even if you decide to not pursue writing as anything other than a hobby it still might be worth your while. Either way song or poem I really enjoy your style.
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This is very sinister. I love the first stanza the most. The diction in it is incredible. Do you spend a lot of time on your word choice or does it come naturally to you? Either way its quite impressive.
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Thank you very much. Nah, I don't spend much time on anything. Most of the things I write are all done within a few minutes. I really don't have much of a plan. It comes out and I go with it.
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That is amazing then. You must have a very good vocabulary, not to mention a healthy amount of talent for constucting them in a very powerful way. Keep it up!
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I must admit, man, I'm flattered to hear that. I never really considered it to be true.
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