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Published: 2002-03-31 14:53:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 345; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 47
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she was beautiful.well, i'm sure that she
still is.
she always wore a little
too much makeup, like she
was trying
too hard.
if she only knew she was
beautiful. talking with her
lying beside her,
gentle rhythm of her breath
in sync with beating hearts.
giving this up was
too hard.
she always had a glow. even
when all was dark, she would be a
beacon, calling in the night
to show the way to go. falling in
love was not an option, and i
must have fell
too hard.
now it's been too long,
but i can still feel the
honesty of my feelings. but i'll still
wear a false facade of feelings
because my other options are
too hard.
she will sit there.
unaware. her carefree spirit and
laugh will continue to shine.
i missed my chance, i have no option
but to carry on as well,
even when it all seems
too hard.
it's times like now i miss her.
the warm gentle breeze acts like
a catalyst of emotion. a wave
of memories, ebb and flow like
tide, and i sit awake. sleeping
without her is
too hard.
and it's nights like tonight
that i will not sleep.
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Comments: 5
kindred [2002-03-31 22:55:27 +0000 UTC]
I agree with Soma. The flow was a little cut off by the puncuation. However, I found the writting moving and deeply personal. Thank you for sharing it, and keep up the wonderful work.
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I am to, commited to, slip away and fade away. Days away I, still feel you. Touching me. Changing me. Consideritly killing me.
There is no love in fear!
~Kindred~
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soma [2002-03-31 15:08:08 +0000 UTC]
this has a bittersweet, melancholy feel to it. the only thing i would possibly try is maybe playing with the punctuation and form a little. the period stops keep it from flowing like it should.
overall, very well done.
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