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Published: 2007-09-23 00:08:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 305; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 4
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"I wonder if I even sleep at night""No, I don't think so. I've watched, you know."
"Really?"
"Really."
what's it like?
"Boring." "Really?" "Yeah. I can see your eyes flicker
"It can't be that bad." and Flip."
"Its not. You know you talk in your sleep, right?"
"What about? Anything interesting?"
You know. "Names. Places. Random."
"I---
I-
I don't think I believe you." Spoken through stutters.
"Back to stuttering?"
"No, t-too fast. I still don't under-- believe yo-ou."
"Why not?"
Well.
"W-well. "You know, these things can't be recorded.
I know. It's like trying to paint a mirror. It only reflects
Am I inside it?" what's inside it."
"What?"
"Aam I inside? The mirror, I mean."
No. Just flocks of birds. Black and
red and green and blue.
"Yes." "Really?"
"Yeah You and the rest of the world with the sun at your backs.
Its beautiful."
"W-where did yo-ou see it?"
"Why do you stutter like that?"
"I uh, don't know.
I don't" Fake cough. "I don't-
" Do they make fun of you?." want to talk about it..."
"I don't l-know."
"Wha-at else is in the mirror?"
"cars, lots of movement. silence, then noise. Strange stuff."
fields still nothing nothing
only the outside
there is
nothing
new in
a
mirror
"I should go." "Y-yeah."
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Comments: 13
Wowza.
I love the stuttering, actually. It adds alotta dimension and depth to the character.
This feel so (real).
I don't stutter
But sometimes i get confused becuase words come out faster than i can think about them and then i end up knocking syllables together and stuff and it becomes a big mess.
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Thanks.
And yeah, I didn't expect this to become "Oh hey, lets talk about stuttering", but it did.
I'm much more fluent on paper than in air, and its just a minor annoyance than anything. Used to be really bad when I was younger, when if you come to school with two different socks you get weird looks.
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The stuttering distracts me too much. You have a wonderful flowing form, and the stutter gets in the way for me if this is meant to be poetry.
However, I do love the style you wrote this in. Very much so.
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The more and more I wait, the more it seems like I'm ignoring this, I think.
Thanks for the comment!
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Hey, feel free to ignore it if you have stuff going on. Priorities and all.
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oh geeze.
I stutter too. I'm getting better at it, and it doesn't even show up most of the time...but when it does, it does. You nailed the speech patterns nicely, like the "fake cough" starter.
I yawn for a starter.
and I love this.
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I rub my eyes. Makes me look constantly tired.
Thanks.
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I'll also scratch my head/look away as I do it.
Or pop my neck really loudly. They love that!
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I block a lot. When I do, I look away.
Eerie.
Also, I wish I could pop my neck.
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oooooooh, 0.0 I got chills. Don't know why. XD Awesome piece. And I stutter a lot too, especially when I'm nervous.
Emily
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