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oracle-of-nonsense — Twenty: I'm afraid I'm growing old
Published: 2012-09-20 21:53:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 7149; Favourites: 313; Downloads: 156
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Description i.
Coupons and sales magazines
have become more than just junk mail
and the holes in my pants
seem more patchable
and I wonder just how much
my sparse jewelry would fetch
if I said I saw the face of Jesus
in the glimmer of my pearls.

ii.
I am beginning to miss the sea I grew up on
so much that I will read bad poetry
just for the mention of a salty ocean breeze.
I feel landlocked and sometimes I'm afraid
that I will never see the world
until I have retired from it.

iii.
Faith says her life is full of asking.
I wish mine were full of answers,
but I too have many questions
and only Time will answer them for me.

iv.
My mother just turned sixty
and her eyes when she looks at herself
in pictures from the '70s
makes me realize
that my time, however long,
is short.
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Comments: 123

oracle-of-nonsense In reply to ??? [2013-04-20 20:34:04 +0000 UTC]

Glad I could (maybe) begin your conversion to a poetry-reader. Usually I'm shite with titles, so I'm pleased that that was what caught your eye. I'm glad you could relate, and glad you keep that child-like attitude

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SilverInkblot In reply to ??? [2012-12-29 01:27:43 +0000 UTC]

Hi there! Just a note to let you know I've featured this piece in my 2012 showcase of 100 pieces of literature: [link]

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ActsofArt In reply to ??? [2012-10-31 17:15:56 +0000 UTC]

very nice!
I myself don't write section poems but I can see the attraction.
this flows very well and the words all come straight through to me.
I love the ending the way it is; I think it wraps it up in a neat little way.

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to ActsofArt [2012-11-01 04:46:29 +0000 UTC]

It's nice for me, because it allows me to cover multiple ideas.
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

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ActsofArt In reply to oracle-of-nonsense [2012-11-01 20:12:13 +0000 UTC]

np

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CrematedMan In reply to ??? [2012-10-26 04:56:24 +0000 UTC]

Enjoyed it very much.

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to CrematedMan [2012-10-26 13:30:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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IyraEMM In reply to ??? [2012-09-25 08:09:21 +0000 UTC]

I love this. The title is great, I think, it's the only reason I clicked on this poem to read it (I'm 19 and I'm also beginning to worry, ha). If someone were reading this out loud I'd say their voice would be soft, their tone gentle.
I love
"and I start to wonder how much
my sparse jewelry would fetch
if I created bizarre stories for each piece."
and of course
"but I too have many questions
and no God to answer them for me."
Do not take out the first stanza! Why would you want to?
The ending is perfect. It carries the whole poem very well.
Everything flows so well. This piece has its own charm. You've done a lovely job

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to IyraEMM [2012-09-25 18:57:21 +0000 UTC]

Hah, I'm glad that caught your eye. I wasn't particularly sure of it, since it sounds a bit clunky, but most people have said it's good. I agree and I'll try to do that justice for you when I read it in class.
I contemplated taking out the first stanza because it doesn't seem to fit as well with the rest, but I really like it, and it's good background/placement, so it will probably stay.
Thank you very much

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IyraEMM In reply to oracle-of-nonsense [2012-09-25 20:22:35 +0000 UTC]

It may be but what's essentially being said is simple and not overbearing at all.
Yes it's a really good way to begin the piece. It opens the readers up to the rest of the poem.
You're very welcome I wish I could come across poems as gentle and marvelous as this everyday.

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to IyraEMM [2012-09-25 20:38:12 +0000 UTC]

That's what I thought, so I think both the title and the first stanza will stay. Unless my entire poetry class manages to talk me out of it.
I'm sure they're out there. They're just hard to find.

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Messerfly [2012-09-23 05:40:07 +0000 UTC]

I like the last two paragraphs.

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to Messerfly [2012-09-23 13:15:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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DailyLitDeviations In reply to ??? [2012-09-22 06:49:40 +0000 UTC]

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to DailyLitDeviations [2012-09-22 13:17:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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Ezri-Krios [2012-09-20 23:39:21 +0000 UTC]

Really liked that, I wouldn't change a thing.

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to Ezri-Krios [2012-09-20 23:54:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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FleetastheWind In reply to ??? [2012-09-20 23:24:25 +0000 UTC]

I like the first stanza! It may not blend completely with the rest of the poem, but to me it fits because it lends a bit of background and perspective to the piece. Nice work!

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to FleetastheWind [2012-09-20 23:32:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! That was sort of what I was aiming for with that stanza.

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FleetastheWind In reply to oracle-of-nonsense [2012-09-20 23:40:37 +0000 UTC]

Welcome! Keep it up!

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cskadoz In reply to ??? [2012-09-20 22:37:42 +0000 UTC]

. . . . 'nuff said.

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oracle-of-nonsense In reply to cskadoz [2012-09-20 23:32:59 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you were that excited.

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