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Tapas Account: tapas.io/oraclesaturn
Undertale by Toby Fox
Clockwise AU by oraclesaturn / Lois Laqui
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WE ALL WANT MORE!! this is so cool! i don't know if you gonna continue this, but know it: we all love it, this is awesome
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Will u continue?i mean... its been like, 4 months since you posted tge last one.
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When are you going to do the next page? I can't wait any longer! XP
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uuuhhh..... paps can escape his puns now!! it was so fun watching them!!
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This is a nice touch, that Paps is able to learn how to do shortcuts. I'm sure it comes in handy with Sans' puns XDD
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I almost forgot about this aha Im so happy that you updated its so exciting to see this au again 
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I decided to go and reread the whole story again to see how the things are progressing. Pages 2-latest are amazing and are only getting better. I don't wish to criticize, but I suggest you look over the first page and correct the grammar mistakes (you're jumping between past and present tense all the time), polish the narrative a bit, maybe a tweak here and there. I think I've mentioned before that it's unclear how Sans learned green magic, a couple of extra sentences would do. Or even better - a few more panels to expand the story a bit - it's a comic after all, "more show less tell" is the rule to go by. What happened in the beginning is important, the whole story is revolving around it (pun?..). The first page as it is feels very different from the rest of them. Other than that - your art is as beautiful as ever, the story so far engaging, I love it.
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The comic has it's own mind, it's turning into a comic strip.
Actually.. I don't have a script. it's a YOLO comics
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Oh yess yesss!! An update!! <3
And paps used shortcut!!! >U<
That pun in the end xD
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I love that Pap design!! So coool! Also shortcutting Pap! YES!!
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paps is beacoming more mature and concern. 
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I love the fourth 'panel' with the two brothers. The way Papyrus looks is just amazing.
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