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Published: 2004-02-01 23:08:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 133; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 24
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I never knew you’d notice,All the quiet and closeness
In the fever of the heart.
That if I stretched out now,
I’d undo all I’ve done,
With my back against the floor
And butterflies across my fingertips
For you
My new love
My fever of the skin
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Comments: 13
Missed this too apparently.
Just to check- before I go answering yon question-- what order are they to be read in-- the submission order, or numerically? *blink*
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And This Is It is the forth part, but only in theory, its not actually a four part piece
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1st, 2nd and 3rd. they are date, not order of importance
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Yeah I really like this, really nice imagery and very tactile. I love the idea of fever in the skin. Short and descriptive, perfect.
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thanks hun
Lets see if you like the 1st and 3rd that i'm just putting up
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Wow... This is so good... sweet surrender of a type, and I love the subtlety. I had to read it over three times to really understand an appreciate the effect. Beautiful. Cheers~
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Thanks...but do you think it is too subtle then? or is a slow build up a good thing?
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technically I got first comment on this 
it's very good and I'm glad you found a worthy use for the line
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Thanks 
Isn't it strange that i found that line and suddenly it became very relevant?
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I really, really love this piece. Very well done indeed, especially "And butterflies across my fingertips." Love it a lot!
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Thanks for the fav
Glad you like it, i was worried it would sound kinda sad, but everyone seems to get the closeness in there, and not a sad word in sight.
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