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orangetot — All My Answers
Published: 2003-10-10 06:36:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 95; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 3
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Congratulation dearestYou won
You broke me in all the right places
I let you, I know,
But can’t a girl still cry a little
For all she still wants?
Does it feel good?
It did for me.
It always will.
It felt like love
But you told me that’s only a dream
So I’ll dream it every night
So with love and lust
And hurt and loss
I’ll be here
To see you for a second
Over and over
Until the scene fades out.
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"It felt like love
But you told me that’s only a dream
So I’ll dream it every night"
Love that bit 
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Defeat. Wonderful provocative piece of work.
I particularly like the contrast between 'Love and Lust' with 'Hurt and loss' - Skilfully used to convey feelings past and present. I feel however that 'Love and Lust' is a bit of an oxymoron whether you meant to include it or not as most people agree that Lust has nothing to do with feelings of affection.
For me this poem deals with the degradation of a relationship obviously in the present moment with reflection of it's past. Well orated especially with the second person stance. You always do this Tot and rather than become boring or run of the mill for you, it is almost trademark and as such 'your style.' Moreover, the second person makes the poem far more intimate and readable.
A VERY COMENDABLE EFFORT TOTTLES, WELL DONE!
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Wow - you can see inside my head!
Ok, i need to know the _moment_ my work smells of boring overused repetition, ok sweetness?
Love and lust are different feelings, but sometimes there hard to seperate, or one can lead to the other. also you can love lust...
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