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orangetot — End of the Graceless War
Published: 2003-10-11 14:13:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 72; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 3
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In the corner of sunshineWe sat in the shade
Plagued by plagues and me
You watched my heart break
And I watched you break it
You've long since not cared to remember
And long since cared to forget me
But could you please
Please
Pretend only for a while
That I ever meant anything.
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hopefully with the end of the war you'll be able to rebuild abit.
that's all I need to say
good poem but I've watched the war too much.
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Me too...
I'm hoping you'll be around for the aftermath though...
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What kind of war isn't graceless? lol
Love the poem again, the last line is a real clincher. Would like to see something a bit more positive perhaps? You can't be all misery and pain! :KISS: :EYE:
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I can and i damn well will!
Maybe in the future. but the future we're talking is distant at the moment. I need barrel-fulls of time and ice cream right now.
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As for the poem, I'm not as keen on it as I am on most of your stuff. Perhaps because of the sentiment.
*gives much ice-cream*
I hope you feel better soon
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you think its generally weak or you dont like the situation? I can solve the former, but as for the latter, i wish i could improve that.
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A little bit of both, really, which tends to be the situation with such a difficult thing to deal with, both in writing and in life. It could do with some editing, but I guess I just don't like sad poems from you when they're written about an actual situation
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