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Published: 2003-03-18 21:30:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 158; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 24
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Description Even if I knew what to show you
I don\'t think I could.
Dead from the waist down,
Jealous from the waist up,
Remembering all the things i tried to tell you
Only to find my lips aren\'t so green anymore.
After all my answers have fallen down
And these walls can\'t house my secrets,
I\'ll just knock them down.
But if I can\'t keep yours,
What will you do it me?
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Comments: 6

badblokebob [2003-10-16 07:53:12 +0000 UTC]

Good poem, methinks. I especially like the imagery in "my lips aren't so green anymore." Nice pic too, btw.

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orangetot In reply to badblokebob [2003-10-16 11:56:13 +0000 UTC]

thanks again yeah, i'm quite fond of this too...but i wasnt sure about the pic. hmm

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badblokebob In reply to orangetot [2003-10-16 11:57:49 +0000 UTC]

The pic can't be that bad -- it's what attracted me to read it

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orangetot In reply to badblokebob [2003-10-16 12:00:48 +0000 UTC]

then its job is done

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polyhymnia [2003-08-30 15:49:24 +0000 UTC]

I really like the way that the title adds another dimension to the poem - great work!

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i-apathy [2003-03-21 19:04:03 +0000 UTC]

This is really good. I especially like the lines:

Dead from the waist down,
Jealous from the waist up

Keep it up!

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