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Published: 2003-09-28 18:19:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 121; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 33
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This is a new thing for me...i hope it looks good.Comments _very_ welcome.
The scribble next to 'Reasoning' is intentional, and the line 'Of your broken rules' is scribbled out because it ruins the ending rhythm, but i felt it needed to be said. A sort of adlib in poetry...kind of.
Thanks for reading guys
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I like it. Quite hard hitting... you read any bukowski?
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i havent even heard of him, but i'm googling as we speak
I cant say this is a favourite of mine, but if you like it, who's complaining?
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I love it, and I love the presentation, seeing the scribbles and the hand writing makes it more personal.
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aww, thankyou sweetness, you're too kind
i hate my handwriting, but it had to be done.
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dont credit me at all in this then
I kid I kid. you know my feelings on this the scribble allows you to feel the flow more while letting you see the whole of the moon so to speak.
When we were discussing it the reason it really liked the whole idea was because it reminded me very much of a piece ~hal0gen did. This was it. it's in a similar vien to this one it's very much worth a read.
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*goes to read*
Oh yeah everyone...paul tol dme to lose 'of your broken rules'. i comprimised.
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Seems like a cool idea -- especially with things like scribbles, where you can read it, but know it isn't part of the poem, as it were. Very innovative
Shame it's so big on full view...
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Ah yes, much better
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Thanks
Yeah, i keep forgetting to downsize things first..it's a pain really
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