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Published: 2002-08-31 10:59:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 157; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 13
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In Pandora's Box,Where the demons are kept,
Lies my own.
Daring me to call.
It sits
And smiles
And waits
For its next cameo.
At the bottom of the Stix,
Where the demons are kept,
Lies my own.
Telling me what I want
It stands
And whispers
And moves
Towards the darker end of the tunnel
In this skin,
Where the demons are kept,
Lies my own
Playing out its game
It walks
and talks
and moves
Just like me
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Comments: 6
Don't have much of depth to say about the poem, other than I like it 
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"Everyone has a naughty side.
Except me of course "
Yeah, you're not fooling anybody, missy! 
Now, poem - I loved the references you put in here, and the last stanza, where you moved into the idea that the demon is not just within you - but at times is you. A poem that pretty much everybody can relate to
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I'm innocence and light personified!!! *cough*
I thought maybe people might find this too repetitive, i hope not
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I really like this, especially how you begin the first couple lines of each stanza. Keep it up!
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it's good to let your demons out once in a while. keeping them in their box only makes them harder to ignore.
I really love the imagry from that final stanza. the way that your dark self could take over and make itself appear to be you, it's kinda haunting.
the short lines are always an interesting mechanic in writing, the way that so much feeling can be distilled into so few words is something very thought provocing idea
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