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orangetot β€” The Garden of Eden
Published: 2003-07-31 22:26:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 153; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 5
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Description Eden has fallen and I blame you.
Not snakes, not venom, not greed,
You.
Eden has gone and hell is in me,
Not foreverness, not love, not light,
You.
Eden has been replaced by a bitter taste,
Not apples, not honey, not cream,
You.
Eden has become…

Just you.
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Comments: 6

polyhymnia [2003-08-30 15:25:59 +0000 UTC]

Touching on one of my favourite themes in poetry - Eden and the fall of mankind.

I love the way you've brought everything back to 'You.' It really emphasises the way that all mankind's failings have been because of a weakness on a part of man, not because of the temptation of the world. Great stuff

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orangetot In reply to polyhymnia [2003-08-30 15:29:07 +0000 UTC]

I thought of this poem while saying the name of a mineral water to my mum while shopping. hehe

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polyhymnia In reply to orangetot [2003-08-30 15:29:51 +0000 UTC]

Inspiration can come at the oddest times

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alwayschosenlast [2003-08-18 19:08:32 +0000 UTC]

I really like it!! Your poetry is awesome, keep it up!

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skribbledot [2003-08-14 20:44:28 +0000 UTC]

Can't say I understand fully but I sure as hell know when someone has done something to affect every single thought and action that I have or have done that I blame them. Is this poem about blame? That's what it means to me. Lovely stuff.

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changwufe1 [2003-07-31 22:31:11 +0000 UTC]

ooooo, has someone pissed you off siverely? *woulnd like to be eden right now*

tis another cool one

*adds to watch*

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