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MasterToymaker [2013-06-11 20:50:41 +0000 UTC]

Tummycrit!

I'm not sure what you wanted critted, so I'm gonna talk about everything until I get tired:

This is one of my favorite poses; resting anything on a table, really.

Anyhow, I feel like I should point out that the bottom of the belly should probably be a little flatter, because of the impact with the the table, it'd be pancaking out, and retaining less of its roundness, unless it's a pregnant/stuffed belly, and even then, from the look of her, it's probably a pretty fatty stomach, so that still stands.

Also, on the subject of secondary actions, her tail, hair and breasts should probably also be "in motion" because of the furniture-wrecking impact of her gut. (and by the way, what's that lump running from the tip of her muzzle to her neck? Is it an extra chin?) The shaking of the props in the background (except for ONE CHAIR in the back right- that chair is a hero) implies that it's a massive amount of force, so it doesn't make enough sense that the rest of her is standing still. I really like the way that you implied the weight through the cracks in the visual sound effect as well as the walls, and of course, the table; that was real clever.

If I were doing something like this, I'd have the table buckling around her stomach, especially since you've got her stomach retaining its shape... it took me a few looks to figure out that part of the table was offstage, but now that I'm looking at it more, it seems like it's breaking in a strange way. The legs of the table should probably not be completely visible, either, or ought to be a little more obviously not on the floor- it kind of messes with the fact that we can't see her feet (which should be on the same plane as the bottom of the table legs, or very close to it), and makes the table look like it's jumping, when it should be collapsing.

Finally, I'm going to talk about anatomy very briefly. The sort of hexagonal shape of her left breast is a little odd. Mostly, it's the fact that you drew a breast with so many straight lines. If it's conforming to the curve of her belly, then the bottom of it should be curved, not straight- it kind of flattens itself, as well as the stomach that way. Her thighs look a little too short, proportionally, for her height, but I don't know the character; she could just have a long torso. Adding a shadow under/behind her breasts and some of her rolls would help add some depth to her form as well, but you've (theoretically) got a lot of light sources, so I kind of see what you were doing with all the different shadows you have there.

Phew. I need to go back to work now. I hope that that was helpful and not annoying. Scenery can be tricky, and this was a very ambitious idea. As it is, it works well, but there are some things that could have made it better. Keep it up.

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Cedar-Ashens [2013-06-11 11:05:54 +0000 UTC]

Abandon all hope, the fatass has come. XD

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Kibzz [2013-06-10 23:18:08 +0000 UTC]

Good job on the character herself and the background :3(I'm horrible with backgrounds lol)

At the same time the fold's in her fat might not look right? I'm not entirely sure, I dont really do them myself, so it could just entirely be me. And maybe work on the knees a bit. Other then that its all great :3

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Ferrishia [2013-06-10 22:54:48 +0000 UTC]

amazing and lovely <3

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AshleyWolf259 [2013-06-10 22:53:53 +0000 UTC]

Niiiiice! >w<

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franki786 [2013-06-10 22:53:02 +0000 UTC]

Lovin it!

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