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Published: 2004-03-06 08:50:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 197; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 37
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Description torn between righteous and wrong,
my zeal spins it's wheels.
i'm going nowhere fast, and i'm
taking you with me.

hitch a ride.  i'll show you heaven,
but i will never take you there.
my zeal spins it's wheels.  i'm
going nowhere fast, and i'm gonna
take you with me.


so i look into your hopeful eyes
haven't the heart to burn your dreams
do i lie, do i turn my back, do i just
spin my wheels on soft streets of your
dreams and speed off into the distant nowhere...

i'm going nowhere fast
and i need to leave you behind
darlin', it's for your own good
close your eyes, i'll be gone
i'll be gone before you know it

my zeal spins it's wheels, and
i'm going nowhere fast
and i'm leaving you behind

never looking back to see your hopeful eyes
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Comments: 12

-nl [2004-05-20 17:13:18 +0000 UTC]

this makes me feel so hurt.....its gorgeous...as if its meant to me....ur such a goood writer!

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parallaxian In reply to -nl [2004-05-20 17:17:52 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

i haven't been the best deviant lately, as i have been doing the renaissance festival...and next i go to colorado for a festival...

when i get a chance to get online, i will participate again...

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-nl In reply to parallaxian [2004-05-20 17:24:32 +0000 UTC]

bring me something nice!

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anima-et-aeris [2004-03-27 09:56:34 +0000 UTC]

I love this... so bittersweet and honest... I've been there, and I just needed it expressed like this to remember it fully. Thank you!

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Invisigoth100 [2004-03-22 12:04:17 +0000 UTC]

All hail to you!
Nat xxx

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parallaxian [2004-03-11 09:30:31 +0000 UTC]

hope ya liked the gallery

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deviantkupo [2004-03-06 11:13:45 +0000 UTC]

Whoa, rock and roll.

The first line was a fantastic opener, I loved the wordplay

I'm a bit dubious about the zeal spins it's wheels bit in the second verse, the repetition at the end is good but I don't think the phrase is strong enough to be carried on into the second verse. Works at the end though

And, good poem! I'ma check out your gallery because of this!

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parallaxian In reply to deviantkupo [2004-03-08 03:38:56 +0000 UTC]

thank you...do considrer though that all these poems are actually songs...in the making...

or not...who knows...

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fullonemptiness [2004-03-06 09:20:29 +0000 UTC]

The word 'song' springs to mind

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parallaxian In reply to fullonemptiness [2004-03-08 03:39:29 +0000 UTC]

cool

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midniteBLAZE [2004-03-06 08:53:19 +0000 UTC]

wow... this is amazing. i really like it... great stuff man!

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parallaxian In reply to midniteBLAZE [2004-03-08 03:40:15 +0000 UTC]

cool...make me a friend...

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