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Published: 2015-08-31 21:58:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 2966; Favourites: 73; Downloads: 0
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You dreamed me.A breath in crescent pulses
suddenly I am
existing in your pillowed fantasies
tucked beneath heavy eyelids.
Soft, willing
moon flesh
there is magic in your bones.
Vulnerable, we
remained entwined
carried by the night tide
imperfect
I am yours.
-D.E.M
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That is truly beautiful and very creative. Good job and keep up the great work! Sorry, not great, but Amazing! XD
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This is transcendent. A beautiful poem. And I like the the last line - it finalizes the message wonderfully.
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Thank you so much for the encouragement---you've made my day!
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This is absolutely beautiful
I really like this poem, the imagery is very vivid and beautiful and *u*
Oh, this reminded me of one of my favourite poets, actually! His name is Christopher Poindexter; have you heard of him? The imagery he utilizes in his poems is a bit like your writing style. Anyway, keep on writing, fellow poet((lol even though i haven't posted any poems on here))
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I have not heard of him, but I'll be sure to look it up! Thank you, I really appreciate it!!
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really amazing
I pretty sure it is free verse poetry my favorite type of writing
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Thank you so much! It's my favorite too. <3
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Oh my. I'm just going to allow my imagination to run away with me here. Pillowed fantasies, indeed! 
Congratulations on receiving a Daily Deviation for this stirring poem. 
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I appreciate the support, thank you!!
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Soft, willing
moon flesh
there is magic in your bones.
This stanza could beautifully stand alone as a short piece, and still, for me, say everything.
And just a suggestion: I don't think you need the last line I am yours which, for me, verges on cliche. For without it, the ending becomes provocative & evocative, since imperfection is more... perfect. Truly.
Congratulations, Daisy, on the Feature.
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Thank you so much!!
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Almost too poetic for what basically sounds like a wet dream. It feels meditative.
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Soft, willing
moon flesh
there is magic in your bones.
Okay, this was beautiful!
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That was the first part I wrote! My favorite stanza as well.
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Thank you so much for your encouragement! I appreciate the fave as well!
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