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Published: 2015-04-02 00:18:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 511; Favourites: 12; Downloads: 0
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You threw me in with the sharkshemorrhaging
self-doubt through sandpaper gills.
Water-logged lungs
mermaid kisses
and I sink to the bottom
clownfish laughing above me.
But kelp prisons cannot hold beauty
and I rise to the top
breaking waves
triumphant.
-D.E.M
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The form in this is indeed fascinating, I like the way each stanza rolls out and then retreats back to the beginning for the next one to start.
As below, the imagery is well handled, and very effective.
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Thank you so much for your kind comments!
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You are so encouraging, thank you!
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It is a pleasure...
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argh. I just checked. I am following you. but dA isn't putting your stuff in my messages.
I had some poems stolen once. one was on a similar theme, only I beat it to death. you handled it quite nicely.
thank you
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I have that problem with certain people I watch, too. I'll only see their stuff if they submit it to groups I watch!
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I wasn't getting good updates from NaPaWriMo either. I had to come track these down through your profile.
still, it's a first world problem.
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Thank you so much!
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Water-logged lungs. Mermaid kisses. I absolutely love that combination. After spending many years at sea in the Navy, the ideas of drowning and surviving a trip to the depths of the sea are etched into my mind... Either way a mermaid will play a hand in your outcome.
Love it
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I love the ocean and being carried by the waves, but the idea of drowning terrifies me. I definitely thought about it while writing this.
And thank you for your service! I come from a military family and married military; veterans are always welcome here!
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Yessss!
I can relate to hemorrhaging self doubt some days!
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I felt that way today, when work dropped this huge meeting on me last minute! I felt like they were trying to set me up for failure...but I proved them wrong. I kicked major ass! >;3
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Well I am happy to hear you came out triumphant in the end 
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This started out interesting, then it blew my mind.
"Water-logged lungs
mermaid kisses
and I sink to the bottom
clownfish laughing above me."
That was brilliant!
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Aw, thank you!
I've had this poem stuck in my head all day! I was inspired by my job today.
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