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ParanoidAndroid22 — A Song of Life
Published: 2004-11-15 03:36:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 151; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 4
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Description I’ll sing a song of life
A song where the pictures of experiences
Are as clear as crystal

This melodic tune tells stories
Of heartbreaks and car crashes
But I’m not my car
Or how it gets destroyed

We’ll move on to the bridge
Where we throw our “pooh sticks”
And we’ll see how far they float
In waters muddied by experiences so lucid

So cast off your sticks to Styx
Hold your babies tight tonight
And tell them the stories that help them to sleep
When they are ready wake them up
And sing them the song of life
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Comments: 17

gracerie595 [2005-03-17 03:25:58 +0000 UTC]

i like this one a lot too. gosh. you just have good word and image choices. i can picture every move in my mind. and i love it. another fav!

xoxograce

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ParanoidAndroid22 In reply to gracerie595 [2005-03-18 02:43:56 +0000 UTC]

You're too kind! Thank you so much again and I'm so glad you enjoy it!
Thanks again,
~Eric

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S-H-M-I-L-Y [2004-12-16 04:52:29 +0000 UTC]

very well written... and the description is amazing

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ParanoidAndroid22 In reply to S-H-M-I-L-Y [2004-12-17 06:32:14 +0000 UTC]

thanks!
~Eric

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NatxUhxLeigh [2004-12-07 23:12:39 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful. Inspiring.

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ParanoidAndroid22 In reply to NatxUhxLeigh [2004-12-08 02:46:05 +0000 UTC]

Gee thanks! I hope it inspired you to do something awesome!
Have a good day,
Eric

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saintsandsailors18 [2004-11-24 02:20:36 +0000 UTC]

i like!!! great descriptions once again. i really admire poets who can write really meaningful poems without rhyming and still have the poem sound really good. if that made any sense at all!!!! good luck w/ this "mystery girl" of yours

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ParanoidAndroid22 In reply to saintsandsailors18 [2004-11-26 05:56:01 +0000 UTC]

Thanks again for your kind words! Yes I understand completely. It feels soo cliched when I try and use rhyme, so I stick to Free Verse, but I'm thinking of trying some metered stuff in the future to stretch myself. Oh yea...um It's Ginger Ottosen...ya know that one red head in your grade...I've had a crush on her since the 8th grade...After this long, its hard to tell someone youve had feelings for them, but...I dont know...I feel like I should tell her ya know, but its hard. Well I suppose thats why I write poetry...to hide my feelings. Anywho, have a good day.
~Eric

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saintsandsailors18 In reply to ParanoidAndroid22 [2004-11-27 16:51:52 +0000 UTC]

gingie eh? thats cute no problem eric, anytime!

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j-langer [2004-11-22 16:19:06 +0000 UTC]

yeah, this is pretty good... sorry it took so long to comment. it's been a few weeks since i've been on.
the last part is especially well done. i might read this again later... i'm feeling kind of distracted

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ParanoidAndroid22 In reply to j-langer [2004-11-23 03:18:51 +0000 UTC]

I would encourage you to read it again. It kind of took me a couple of times to understand myself, but I like it!
Thanks again buddy,
Eric

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FuzzyBunnyTisMine16 [2004-11-21 07:27:10 +0000 UTC]

i actaully kinda pictured it as i read it...few poems can do that to me...i like it

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ParanoidAndroid22 In reply to FuzzyBunnyTisMine16 [2004-11-23 03:15:54 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad...and thanks!
~Eric

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jenna-dee [2004-11-15 09:52:27 +0000 UTC]

another great poem by eric! beautiful concept and images as always. well done my friend, and good luck with the girl.. have a lovely day

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ParanoidAndroid22 In reply to jenna-dee [2004-11-15 15:28:40 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. Oh...yes shes definatly the coolest person I know. I'm just trying to be a good friend right now. I've had a crush on her since the 8th grade...so I dont want to screw things up. Maybe I should just tell her how I feel? Well thanks for your comments. As always they are greatly appriciated.
~Eric

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kuria-demonique [2004-11-15 04:44:47 +0000 UTC]

I really like the fact that it does not rhyme. It flows so much better. My favorite part is
*This melodic tune tells stories
Of heartbreaks and car crashes
But I’m not my car
Or how it gets destroyed*
It really seems to catch my mind. A twisted sense of detail, that makes you wonder. ^^ I'm sorry my comment isnt of much help. I'm not so good with words.

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ParanoidAndroid22 In reply to kuria-demonique [2004-11-15 04:50:13 +0000 UTC]

dont worry about that...it just helps knowing someone likes it. Thanks!
~Eric

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