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peterdawes — A Recollection of Firsts by-nc-nd [NSFW]
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Description you were
an undiscovered continent
and i the explorer
   poised upon your shore
with waves crashing
against the sandy beach
as my eyes
   beheld the sight of you

in all your glory
the first time i'd seen a woman
every other time
suddenly
       didn't
             matter
who were they anyway?
mere prostitutes in comparison
satiating lust with emptiness
only one or two other jewels
that had either eroded
or been cast away
through time
          neglect
            and carelessness
no, my eyes nearly became virginal
the sight of you
chest heaving with
   erratic breaths
tempting me to
        come
     undone
         with
        you.

did i ever come undone

i tasted lips as though
a connoisseur
sipping the finest wines
upon a shelf
tasting much more than decadence
when your lips parted
when you slid your tongue across my mouth
when we commenced a dance
              with the mere meeting
          of frantic
              passionate kisses
there were words somewhere
        i n t e r m i n g l e d
the formalities of acknowledging
    what we already knew
(i wanted you beyond all others)
        (you desired me above the rest)
the unlikely alliance
the doubts and hesitation
those wicked lies we told each other
            to deny what had transpired
       to deny two friends had become far more
suddenly
      evaporated
        under the intense heat
           of the simplest of ideas

             you and me

neither of us knowing what tenor
the orchestra between us
had begun to play
                 was it a waltz
                or was it a tango
or had we been thrown into the sound of
    Charlie Parker with his trumpet
           throwing notes
        into the air
           with
               reckless
           abandon
much like how we threw clothing
                                   to the side
you sang scat as though providing
the vocals with the song
and i attempted to pluck the strings
of the accompanying instrumentation

pressed against us, one another
with intimacy
   the only thing around us
          besides the thin mixture of
                 oxygen, hydrogen, and carbon
    becoming dizzy from altitude
it took the sound
    of my name
through your parted lips
for me to find my way back
   to the present

suddenly realizing what i held

it might have been
    satisfaction
in your eyes
but your smile read of a conspirator
you knew what had just transpired
that transaction of souls
that somehow got muddled
between the union of two bodies
            and in the process
          they became
  irrevocably merged together
              ethereal siamese twins
               eternally juxtaposed
it wasn't the sweat
the actions of man and woman
becoming one flesh
that caused this to happen
it was the three words
that drifted through
the chaos of post-apocalyptic war

and like an entranced creature
i spoke the
        same
          three
             words
not knowing that
i'd never be able
to pluck them from the air
and return them to
     the mouth that spoke them

             i love you

the contract penned in arterial blood
with a pulse
     to seal
     the pact
     in place
i beheld you
as though beholding
the first and last woman i'd ever known
and you've had me spellbound
             blind
          and foolish
lost within
your foreign land
ever since
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Comments: 24

katarthis [2008-09-10 00:16:22 +0000 UTC]

Lots and lots of lovely imagery to wade through - I love the ending for what man hasn't found himself mystified by the foreign land of womanhood? (eyes became viginal? That's some powerful stuff!)

k

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HoldingBackTears [2008-04-08 02:16:59 +0000 UTC]

You should be bored more often! And screw all of my usual fancy-vocabulary-comments... THIS WAS FREAKING AMAZING!!!!! I LOVED the format! Brilliant!

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peterdawes In reply to HoldingBackTears [2008-04-08 21:14:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, thank you, very kindly for the enthusiastic comment. I appreciate both it and the favorite, Kelly.
I shall endeavor to be bored more often.

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HoldingBackTears In reply to peterdawes [2008-04-09 18:51:10 +0000 UTC]

You shouldn't be thanking me, for I state only mere facts. But you Peter, your works are incredible. So filled with beauty and wisdom. They are complex yet simple. They get to the very root of your senses. They are truley amazing. And if anyone ever tells you any different, be sure that they're not within reaching distance of my fist.

I sent a comment on this already, but my bloody computer crashed when I sent it, so I wasn't sure if it went through. Having said, if you recieve two comments... that's why.

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peterdawes In reply to HoldingBackTears [2008-04-11 18:38:45 +0000 UTC]

Only one comment received, so all is well.
I truly appreciate your compliments. It is hard for one to gage one's own abilities, so I rely greatly on the feedback I receive from you all. Thank you.

Do be sure to tell me if ever something is lacking though, Kelly. I promise it would not offend me.

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HoldingBackTears In reply to peterdawes [2008-04-11 19:19:46 +0000 UTC]

I would truley die if I offended you Peter, so it's very good to know that I wouldn't. But to be quite honest... I have not yet found anything lacking. So for now, you're off the hook. ^^

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peterdawes In reply to HoldingBackTears [2008-04-12 19:39:14 +0000 UTC]



I am a very hard man to offend. The advantage to quite a roller coaster ride of a life. One learns how to shift with the twists and turns.

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HoldingBackTears In reply to peterdawes [2008-04-27 18:59:01 +0000 UTC]

This is very true. I'm not very easily offended either. However, my reason is more of a - I live in a life of constant teasing and ridicule anyway, so get used to it - type of thing. I kind of wish that I had your reason instead. :/

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peterdawes In reply to HoldingBackTears [2008-04-27 23:14:26 +0000 UTC]

My heart breaks for you, Kelly. That is never a good reason to need to roll with the punches.

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HoldingBackTears In reply to peterdawes [2008-05-01 01:11:35 +0000 UTC]

Although appreciated Peter, there is no need to waste your sympathy on a pathetic wretch of a girl such as myself.

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reanna-banana [2008-04-07 22:19:28 +0000 UTC]

i love it when you're bored... it's so exciting!
love the format of this one. half the reason i read on is because i wanted to see where you put the words!

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peterdawes In reply to reanna-banana [2008-04-09 11:19:58 +0000 UTC]

Very delighted you enjoyed that. I quite fancy playing with typography when the poem allows for it.

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purecountry [2008-04-06 22:01:50 +0000 UTC]

If this is consequences of your boredom, I am more than willing to endure more...Imagery is profoundly beautiful within your words..

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peterdawes In reply to purecountry [2008-04-09 00:29:11 +0000 UTC]

Thank you kindly, Sabrina.
This one in particular was enjoyable to pen. I am pleased that you all enjoyed it as well.

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purecountry In reply to peterdawes [2008-04-09 00:52:39 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure...

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Zer0Hawke [2008-04-04 08:04:03 +0000 UTC]

If this is what your boredom looks like, my dear, you should be bored more often ^_- The imagery is stunning.

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peterdawes In reply to Zer0Hawke [2008-04-06 02:45:28 +0000 UTC]

Hopefully, another wave of boredom or two surfaces at the opportune moment.

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dark-dragon-wings [2008-04-04 03:50:53 +0000 UTC]

ROFL oh that we do
i love the design of this... its so captivating just makes you read it

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peterdawes In reply to dark-dragon-wings [2008-04-04 04:00:27 +0000 UTC]

Very good. I'm glad to hear it holds your interest.

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dark-dragon-wings In reply to peterdawes [2008-04-04 04:28:43 +0000 UTC]

tis does

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LeonieSainteVire [2008-04-04 02:49:13 +0000 UTC]

i tasted lips as though
a connoisseur
sipping the finest wines
upon a shelf

MMM...I love that image.

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peterdawes In reply to LeonieSainteVire [2008-04-04 02:51:21 +0000 UTC]

Funny. . . I quite liked that taste.
The image is a favored one as well, though. Teasing though it may be.

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YouInventedMe [2008-04-04 02:42:49 +0000 UTC]

great open & close

xo!

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peterdawes In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-04-04 02:44:03 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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