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peterdawes β The Reckoning
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Published: 2008-11-03 03:44:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 948; Favourites: 31; Downloads: 6
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one, final teardrop hits the floor.i shall not shed another.
one, final time i raise my hands
to brace myself against a lover.
that touch that once caressed me,
now seeking to destroy me.
i shall not allow you to punish me anymore.
once, a love so true, that i
trusted you with all my heart.
with all my soul, my mind, my strength;
there was no other who could compare.
you lured me into your embrace
as though i would find safety there.
i shall not allow you to punish me anymore.
it did not take too long for
the seasons to change, one to another.
from true love to fear; from longing to
utter revulsion. you held me in your grip,
using threats to keep me with you.
a victim replaced the person i once was.
i shall not allow you to punish me anymore.
until the breaking point; the day of reckoning.
the straw that broke the camelβs back.
looking into the mirror, not seeing myself,
i sought to reclaim what had been stolen.
i stand up to you, defiant to the last.
looking you in the eyes, just one, final time.
goodbye, my lover. your time has passed.
i shall not allow you to punish me anymore.
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Comments: 19
There are no words.
On the other hand, I love to talk and you hit very close to home with this one. Lovely, brilliant.
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its very sad.
i loved someone and they would beat me..
but i wouldnt leave him, cuz i loved him...
i wish not that apon others.
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Very well done!
I too, like the repeating line, I feel it drives the point of the piece home to the reader.
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Wonderful work, love. You're doing well to help such a cause.
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It's so beautiful and sad. At first I think of someone leaving, maybe death or something. Then as you read more past the first line, you find it's more than that and feel for the person.
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It just goes to show how writing can help a cause. You've definitely captured a strong, defiant tone, I only hope there are people out there who can stand up to an abusive partner but it can be so difficult for them..
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Beautiful, Peter, my loyal servant. I really like this one.
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*bows* thank you very kindly, dear queen.
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Most welcome, Darling.
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Well penned and Celeste did a wonderful job with the graphics in the other piece!
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she did a remarkable job. i swear her touch adds beauty to everything.
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The repetition of that one line "I shall not allow you to punish me anymore" is very, very effective. Good job.
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thank you, dear. i like repetition for impact, but try very hard not to overdo it. i am glad it worked this time.
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It worked wonderfully well here...
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