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Phioai β Virgo (com for jeanslily 4/4)
Published: 2019-01-19 16:39:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 355; Favourites: 27; Downloads: 0
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annnnd done! sry for the long wait! at this pace i should be able to do one com piece per week so yuphopefully i improved oof
tbh i have a hard time with shadowing and colours~
CH: Virgo
Owned by: JeansLily
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I really like what you did here. You really worked well with colors here. Although I think you could work on the line-art here. I feel as if the line-art is too thin. It's hard to tell where some of the lines are because they are so thin. I would try playing around with it and making it thicker is places of interest like in the hair.
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thanks! though I do agree with you abt the line art im not entirely sure where to thicken and where not to thicken honestly,Β so i have consistent line width throughout, though if u do have a rough guideline for it pls let me know <33
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gah from ProjectComment !
First of all, I think that the little sprinkles of colors and how you drew the eyes are very cute! It's something I haven't seen before and I find it absolutely adorable. The flowers, as well, are also very nice! They're very affective for such a simplistic design. The bread, as well, is also drawn really well, and most of your anatomy seems to be on point! However, one thing that I did notice you can improve on is the head. The right side seems to be a bit flat, and it doesn't seem to have a cheek.
Another thing you can improve on is the hands. The fingers seem a little bit too long and there seems to be a bit too big of a gap between the fingers. However, this could just be a personal nitpick, as the fingers do seem to be a bit strange. One other thing is that for the pointer finger, it bends a bit too close to the knuckles. It might have been to make her hold the bread better, but I still feel that you should try to improve the way that the finger is made. I do like, on the fingers, however, the small blending of the browns closer to the bread! It's a nice touch, though I assume it's stylistic.
One of my favorite things about the piece, other than the flowers and such, is the clothing! It's incredibly well done, and the wrinkles are placed very well--nice job! Another thing that is well done is her hair. The blending of the greens and blues is very nice, and it doesn't overpower the eye. However, another thing with the face is that the red is overpowering the rest of her face. On the right side its bad but on the left it's very noticeable. For fixing this I would suggest taking a color closer to her skin tone, do another layer, color the cheeks, lower the opacity on the new layer, and blend it out.
Once again, I love the little sprinkles of colors! Makes me think of birthday cake. Keep drawing and keep improving!
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Hello, creator the the OC shown here! ^^
I just want to point out that her work on the hands and fingers are impeccable, and though you think they are too long and spaced out, I personally believe they are perfect, especially with the way i scale my OCs. So to her credit, she seems to have just been staying true to my design, (and improving on it in my opinion! I certainly cannot draw hands as well) the only thing not original to my design is the shading in the fingertips, which i also think is an amazing idea and might consider coloring my OCs similarly in the future. Her hand is pressing the bread against her chin contemplatively, at least thats how i see it, so I can forgive something like the angle making it look like her knuckle is too close to the bottom there, I think its just a trick of perspective. If anything, she should leave the knuckle where it is and just trim some of the end of the fingertip, but this is quite a nitpick already. Again, I just like it the way it looks now. She makes my OC look elegant with slender features.
Also, a soft mention that it is humanly possible to blush in one cheek more than the other. As someone with really pale skin, I cant tell you how many times one of my cheeks will flush but not the other. So though i see what you mean from an aesthetic point of view, this is not a flaw on a technical level. Its like if someone has more freckles on one cheek than the other. It may not look nice or symmetrical, but its certainly a possible trait to have. If you are talking about the bottom right of her face, (her jawline, not her cheek) Then i can see more of what your talking about, but from this angle, she did provide ample shading to show the sharp V of vigos chin, which is also part of the source material design. Her head is just shaped sort of like an almond that way.
Thanks for hearing me out!
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aa alright, hello creator! alright, I was generally giving tips on what I saw in the picture, not your art style, so I apologize to that. One thing I do still stand on, however, is the cheeks. I also have fairly pale skin, but I felt that it was very, very bright for the character. I understand that someone can blush at two shades, but it was a bright red. Generally, you blush a light pink close to your skin tone. Also, with her jawline, I can see her having an almond shaped head, but I still do feel that the shading could have brushed out a little bit to create a small cheek. People with almond shaped faces generally do have a slightly defined cheek, but only slightly defined.
I was critiquing the art, not the character or your art style, so I apologize if I came off that way.
P.S. bro I love the blended hair sm nice job on thinking of that for your character!!
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all heard~ and thank you so much for the compliment! I work in traditional media and people really love the gradients i use in my characters hair and eyes. ^^
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gah well keep drawing uwu! and I can see the gradients love, the idea is really nice!
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thanks for all the compliments and the criticism! i totally understand abt the colouring of the cheek it's a problem i have noticed but didnt really know how to resolve so ur suggestion will definitely help! And fingers and face wise i personally have not really noticed tht before so thank you for pointing tht out to me! ^^ i will draw the knuckle higher next time and shade the shadow angled a little lower ^^ and hand positioning wise i realised it too late lol so i just decided to continue on! no turning back now! and for the colouring of brown closer to the fingers yeh ur right it is stylistic!Β
for the sprinkles of colour i used a paint tool in clip studio paint called prism dust if u would ever like to find it ^^
oh and for the eyes i tried a new way of painting them than usual glad u like it XDΒ
Β AndΒ Thanks For Commenting!! Ur Criticism And Encouragement Are Much Appreciated!!! <333 Β Β Β
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aa well still, nice job! your art is absolutely adorable!
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