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Published: 2011-10-03 04:34:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 262; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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Description F
A
L
L
I
N
G

into an
emotion
of bottomless depth

not a
safety
net in sight

somewhere
nearby
I see

an iridescent
ray
of light

Grasping
for
it

with all
my
might

the light is
gone
it disappears

still
I

F
  A
     L
        L

unsure
and
unaware

of the
time
I spent

hoping
that
there is

some kind
of
a safety net
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Comments: 13

ArtByCher [2011-10-27 13:51:32 +0000 UTC]

Nice my friend

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pixiebutt14 In reply to ArtByCher [2011-10-27 15:16:19 +0000 UTC]

ty!

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Call-mE-aNGE [2011-10-03 21:48:58 +0000 UTC]

Very well written

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pixiebutt14 In reply to Call-mE-aNGE [2011-10-03 21:57:01 +0000 UTC]

tyvm

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Call-mE-aNGE In reply to pixiebutt14 [2011-10-03 22:13:33 +0000 UTC]

Np!

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WaywardGypsy [2011-10-03 20:17:31 +0000 UTC]

Ah some concrete poetry! very good!

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pixiebutt14 In reply to WaywardGypsy [2011-10-03 20:19:20 +0000 UTC]

ty very much

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WaywardGypsy In reply to pixiebutt14 [2011-10-03 20:28:50 +0000 UTC]

no problem

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taseouisce [2011-10-03 19:09:31 +0000 UTC]

this is cool! I definitely like what you did with the words falling and fall

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pixiebutt14 In reply to taseouisce [2011-10-03 19:34:20 +0000 UTC]

ty so much! the original has always been one of my fave poems because I loved the imagery of an iridescent light being hope but I actually love how I rewrote it

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mrcbax [2011-10-03 14:58:32 +0000 UTC]

that's pretty cool, I like the:
f
a
l
l
i
n
g

structure you added to it.

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pixiebutt14 In reply to mrcbax [2011-10-03 17:03:02 +0000 UTC]

yeah that was one of the revamps I was inspired by play on structure with this poem [link]

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mrcbax In reply to pixiebutt14 [2011-10-03 18:34:09 +0000 UTC]

oh cool!

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