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Published: 2009-04-23 02:53:14 +0000 UTC; Views: 536; Favourites: 18; Downloads: 5
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I gaze into yourcrystalline eyes and
wish I could turn back the
clock
to the time when
you loved me
as much as I loved
you.
(but you always say that clocks
can't be turned back.
I wonder
if you're right.)
Malicious smiles and
greedy words;
you're not the person
you started out
to be.
I miss
who you were
before this all went
downhill.
I never noticed before now
but I miss the
sweet whispers of,
"I love you,"
and your eyes;
your beautiful eyes.
Rewinding time
would be so much easier
than all this regret
I keep pent up inside
and all the memories
I force myself
to lock away.
(I keep them locked tight
in the locket you gave me.)
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Comments: 53
I love it. I don't know what else to say to it.
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ohh so beautiful, especially the last stanza. I can totally relate to it
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*for once I can actually take credit for the part someone liked 
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"Malicious smiles and
greedy words;
you're not the person
you started out
to be.
I miss
who you were
before this all went
downhill."
oh, boy. I can relate to this!
but the entire poem is great.
great job.
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You can blame for those words
I love them. And this was soo much fun to write! Thanks for the comment!!!
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...Wow. I love this. You both did an excellent job.
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Sadly, I do not like it as much as everyone else. It is sad. I thought it would be a happier poem. :/ Ugh. Not really your style either. Sorry Jake. 
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Hey it's ok. It's very sad (how is that not my style?) But it is a collab.
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Your style is very free flowing, mind probing, and somewhat out there writing. This isn't it. Isn't you, but then again it is a collab. I hope I didn't sound to rough. >.<
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>.< It is a collab. I think the total number of words is less than half mine.
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I gaze into your
crystalline eyes and
wish I could turn back the
clock
to the time when
you loved me
as much as I loved
you.
(but you always say that clocks
can't be turned back.
I wonder
if you're right.)
Malicious smiles and
greedy words;
you're not the person
you started out
to be.
I miss
who you were
before this all went
downhill.
I never noticed before now
but I miss the
sweet whispers of,
"I love you,"
and your eyes;
your beautiful eyes.
Rewinding time
would be so much easier
than all this regret
I keep pent up inside
and all the memories
I force myself
to lock away.
(I keep them locked tight
in the locket you gave me.) *bold parts*
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you wrote the non bolded parts right?
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No. I wrote the bold parts.
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Thanks so much from myself and ~losingmyfaith
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very beautiful, and i can relate to it which is always good in poetry
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cant critique properly hon but ill note you a critique as ive no sub , great poem just needs a few loose words changed or removed , is that ok with you if you note me the poem ill edit for you see what you think of it no harm done if you do not like my editing critique hon , im just wanting to help where i may or can with your approval xxj
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Oh, wow. You guys did a collab.
That's fantastic since I think you both are amazing.
Which means that this is so lovely I can't even tell you how much I love it.
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Awwwws, so beautiful and sad. I love it. Great work.
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It's very beautifully sad! You did a nice job!
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You both are welcome!
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