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Published: 2015-10-15 22:12:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 316; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 0
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An hour has passed, the floors are now barren.The crowds have dispersed, alone I now stand.
I fear i'll succumb for how can I withstand.
My fists are balled tight and the nights in my hands.
In just eight more hours the sun will impose,
his harsh sting will prick me like thorns of a rose.
I know i'll have earned it, of that I suppose,
a gift that keeps giving, a light for my woes.
Monotonous insets insist on inception,
of mundane routine within mundane routines.
How one can stay sane, is a mystery to me;
"Awake through the night", seems a little obscene!
Though solace I seek as I search here in depth,
I know that I'll settle, for second at best.
My standards will plummet, with that i'll confess:
"The darkness has left me, alone and inept".
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Comments: 9
Vanabhumi [2020-07-06 10:11:19 +0000 UTC]
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Post-Dead-Apocalypse In reply to Vanabhumi [2020-07-06 10:22:08 +0000 UTC]
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redhawk1986 [2015-10-16 16:33:35 +0000 UTC]
Not a bad poem. Your rhyming scheme is well placed and has a very distinct pattern & rhythm to it. The tale of facing judgement is a frightening thing as it is described here in your poem. Deep, dreary, but most of all, scary, IMHO. All in all, what a wonderful poem. Great job!
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Post-Dead-Apocalypse In reply to redhawk1986 [2015-10-16 17:59:36 +0000 UTC]
Thank you Redhawk, reading your feedback really warmed my heart and put a huge grin on my face!
I'm trying to find my feet with my writing and so I'll be toying with different patterns & rhythms but I must admit I really did enjoy writing this piece, the structure was super fun to write with! >.<
Thanks again!
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redhawk1986 In reply to Post-Dead-Apocalypse [2015-10-16 20:57:30 +0000 UTC]
No problem! I understand how you feel. I'm also trying out various types of writing. And you've earned a watch from me too. Keep on writing and don't give up
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Post-Dead-Apocalypse In reply to redhawk1986 [2015-10-17 08:54:41 +0000 UTC]
You Sir, are damned awesome! i'll keep on keeping on so long as you do too!
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redhawk1986 In reply to Post-Dead-Apocalypse [2015-10-17 13:19:46 +0000 UTC]
so are you my friend.
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AlwaysTheFlawedOne [2015-10-15 22:58:31 +0000 UTC]
Baron a member of the lowest order of the British nobility. The term “Baron” is not used as a form of address in Britain, barons usually being referred to as “Lord.”
Barren
(of a place or building) bleak and lifeless.
"the sports hall turned out to be a rather barren concrete building"
I like your poem it's really good. Nice descrptions.
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Post-Dead-Apocalypse In reply to AlwaysTheFlawedOne [2015-10-15 23:02:59 +0000 UTC]
Aghh! I must have proof read this piece 3 or 4 times without thinking twice about the correct spelling. Many thanks for pointing it out friend!
I will see If i can get onto editing it or re-submitting.
Rookie error LOL
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